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High Class (0-0 vs. Tribz (0-0)
Topic: Chance of a Lifetime
Verses Due: December 1st Voting Ends: December 5th You must vote on 3 battles |
Aight, Im signing in on this...
I will post my verse later on today, or tommorow. OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
im in this... ill be posting tonight after thanksgivings over
werd |
Aight, I will be dropping soon. Goodluck to you tribz, I know you will be a good challange after checking your rhymes. G/L to you hommie...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
Eddie
Sometimes we forget what would happen if we were in others' shoes And make a kid go through as much pain as their mothers' do When those who struggle have the chance to live a normal life Why do we decide that its not allowed and make that child grieve in strife Let me inform you, Eddie was normal, from what your eyes could see But most people let their eyes decieve, and judge by what lies beneath Most kids in school came strapped with knives, others high, damn trippy Eddie came in to school strapped with a chest plate and an IQ of 60 He was teased, mocked, hurt and laughed but never went off the deep end He was older than all the rest, and knew his emotions and where to keep them "BIG PARTY TONIGHT", "can I go mom, can I go please?" Yes Eddie dear, inside she worried for him, but showed she was pleased He arrived there early, this was his chance, he patted his plate His chance to make some real friends, possibly come out with a date He heard his name, whirled around, 5 boys stepped up beside "Yo Eddie, come here man" He knew there was trouble, and ran up inside They gave chase, dragged him to the bathroom, and brutally assaulted Ed You wont believe what they said, "He didnt belong here, he was a SPED" The ambulance took him away, holding on to life, but crying loud They beat him up, but also took his pride, thats it! He let himself slip into shroud... this is a true story about a kid from my school, his real name was Emanuel, just thought I'd give a heads up that this shit does happen and its fuckin wrong |
High Class Flow -=Chance of a Lifetime=-
Topic - Chance of a Lifetime
Im in a world with situations, wars in many locations But sooner or later, it will come back to me in rotation Im facin Deep thoughts, that bring deadly participation Motivation coming hard, forced uppon the education But now I have a chance, a glance to revive my stance Take out my hatred, Fill it with Romance Now I can inhance my game, a chance to get my credit No need to edit, my mind still finding things pathetic Im not accepting what god has given so kindly Not appriciating, but seem to start un-winding His light now blinding, reminding me of my mistake I didnt embrace my chance, the thoughts make me fake... I Had " a chance of a lifetime " finally the right sign But I took it for granted, ive crossed that fine line Now im never forgiven, dispair im liven No one care, Ive driven to long and lost the ignition my time to listen, and I didnt pay attention i would be happy, but the sad seems to be skippin ( like a record skip )... I had a "chance of a lifetime", dont be like me and take it for granted I was handed a simple plane, and was effortless to understand it Now im facing Hell with his faces of perception lethal injections of poisons, from how he shows his effection This is a lesson earned, so take the time to right rhymes Dont end up like me, I missed a " Chance of a lifetime..." |
kind of bleh on both sides. but whatever. i'm not voting on this, you both equally blew cock and balls in my opinion so uhh.
v. tie madman, i'd like in the league and signups are closed, let me in next week if you want. peace matt. |
im gonna give this one to High Class
High Class you kept nice wordplay, all he way through which was constant, nice immagery, and nice drop. Im in a world with situations, wars in many locations But sooner or later, it will come back to me in rotation ^^^nice^^^ Now im facing Hell with his faces of perception lethal injections of poisons, from how he shows his effection ^^^also nice^^^ Tribz aiight wordplay was a lil choppy, and i thought inconsistant, but i liked your drop, it has some very nice immagery in places. Sometimes we forget what would happen if we were in others' shoes And make a kid go through as much pain as their mothers' do When those who struggle have the chance to live a normal life Why do we decide that its not allowed and make that child grieve in strife ^^^if only all your poem was like this, consistantly^^^ |
Thanks alot hommie. Upping for some more of these votes............
1-0 Me OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
yeah i think high class took this by far very nice job mayne....i just felt that tribz was too simple...high had nice vocab and actually impressive flow...nice battle guys...um and daddy says make sure you put the effort in voting as well...-1-
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I will be sure to go and vote hommie, just waiting for more people to drop there verses. aight looks like Im still up. UPPIN
2-0 Me (will there be a KO ) OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
ya i think you deserved to win this
i just wasnt feeling this topic.. at all |
Vote High Class, he had more flow although I found tribs was more unique cuz it was true i found high hit harder, both good verses i just think some things needed some more flow and indepth emtion and explanition props to both
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Aight then, thanks for the votes hommies. If there counting KO's I guess I won. I will go make my votes when the people start putting down there verses. Good battle tribz, and goodluck when we go at it in the future. 3-0 K.O. ME
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
i don't think this was really close honestly
high class...had higher class in every aspect other dude i'd get lost with...i didn't like it bein all that strected... it wasn't that great of a telling there.... high class just had better imagry n feeling in his piece vote-highclass |
Thanks for the vote hommie. You is cruicial LOL, I guess Uppin for the last vote for the Win. UPPIN
4-0 ME OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
unlimited votes...
o n uh...suggestion... don't need to up your battle man... some people may get annoyed of that... wit u posting after everything... lol....it's cool |
not a bad battle but very hard to judge....
but my vote=High Class High Class...your flow was on point your story was nice but you didnt stretch it as far as you could..next time milk it for all its worth..pz overall=7/10 Tribz..you was jus aight..showed a lotta potential n grind but you jus didnt catch me in any way...work on ya structure to get maximum flow etc..overall=6/10 |
Goin against tha grain
This was a close battle, high class.....ur's gotta betta towards tha end, work on bein more consistent.....rhyme scheme was off at first...very choppy, tribs....solid, didnt lyke tha end good flows for newbies though tribz- rhyme scheme: 7, flow: 7.5, Story: 8, total: 22.5 high class- rhyme scheme: 7, flow: 7, Story: 7.5, total: 21.5 high class - go more in depth next time, tell us how you messed up and what was tha chance you were given i'm goin against tha grain vote- Tribz, no hard feelins, good luck and may tha best man win, check my verse, stay real, peace, 1 |
Newbie'z? Maybe you shouldnt say things about people you dont know. No beef, but does that make you feel bigger when you say shit like that? Just wondering. How many votes does it take to win? Or is it continuo's voting until the 5th? Ahh well, Uppin...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
no hate....but you are new to sacred scriptures, thats why i said it, no beef.........but i was a newbie when i first started, so now you are.........elevate, stay real, peace, 1
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I got you then, I didnt know what you meant. Dont think im new to it period. I use to do it alot back during the hiphopheads, hiphopfuter, and ripthemic days. But I stoped for a while, No beef, sorru bout that hommie...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
High Class Took This With An Original Flow
I Loved This Line But now I have a chance, a glance to revive my stance Take out my hatred, Fill it with Romance Tribs Kinda Came With Some Story-Telling Flow That Didnt Really Flow, And The Streched Bars Is Succh A Turn Off... |
Class takes this with a more complex and solid verse
Good vocab and a tight flow.... Tribz just came a bit too somple for me. V. High Class |
this was my first topical battle to vote on...
nice change from everythin else.... well i think tribz had a good verse becuz he really applied the topic to a real specific situation and had a nice twist on it, that was clever, good rhyme, good drop overall. though high class didnt get as specific as tribz did, i enjoyed the flow and rhymes on this piece much bettter, as i read it to myself it just flowed real nice, i think it would make a good song to record. this verse showed nice skill right here in the english language.... my vote: highclass reall good and close battle mad props can yall hit this up??? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...28&pagenumber=2 |
high class got this on wordplay and vocab
nice |
HighClass wins.
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