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Mad Man 11-26-03 08:33 PM

High Class (0-0 vs. Tribz (0-0)
 
Topic: Chance of a Lifetime

Verses Due: December 1st

Voting Ends: December 5th

You must vote on 3 battles

High Class 11-27-03 11:42 AM

Aight, Im signing in on this...
I will post my verse later on today, or tommorow.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Tribz 11-27-03 03:05 PM

im in this... ill be posting tonight after thanksgivings over

werd

High Class 11-27-03 08:38 PM

Aight, I will be dropping soon. Goodluck to you tribz, I know you will be a good challange after checking your rhymes. G/L to you hommie...

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Tribz 11-28-03 07:45 AM

Eddie

Sometimes we forget what would happen if we were in others' shoes
And make a kid go through as much pain as their mothers' do
When those who struggle have the chance to live a normal life
Why do we decide that its not allowed and make that child grieve in strife

Let me inform you, Eddie was normal, from what your eyes could see
But most people let their eyes decieve, and judge by what lies beneath
Most kids in school came strapped with knives, others high, damn trippy
Eddie came in to school strapped with a chest plate and an IQ of 60

He was teased, mocked, hurt and laughed but never went off the deep end
He was older than all the rest, and knew his emotions and where to keep them
"BIG PARTY TONIGHT", "can I go mom, can I go please?"
Yes Eddie dear, inside she worried for him, but showed she was pleased

He arrived there early, this was his chance, he patted his plate
His chance to make some real friends, possibly come out with a date
He heard his name, whirled around, 5 boys stepped up beside
"Yo Eddie, come here man" He knew there was trouble, and ran up inside

They gave chase, dragged him to the bathroom, and brutally assaulted Ed
You wont believe what they said, "He didnt belong here, he was a SPED"
The ambulance took him away, holding on to life, but crying loud
They beat him up, but also took his pride, thats it! He let himself slip into shroud...



this is a true story about a kid from my school, his real name was Emanuel, just thought I'd give a heads up that this shit does happen and its fuckin wrong

High Class 11-28-03 04:22 PM

High Class Flow -=Chance of a Lifetime=-
 
Topic - Chance of a Lifetime

Im in a world with situations, wars in many locations
But sooner or later, it will come back to me in rotation
Im facin Deep thoughts, that bring deadly participation
Motivation coming hard, forced uppon the education
But now I have a chance, a glance to revive my stance
Take out my hatred, Fill it with Romance
Now I can inhance my game, a chance to get my credit
No need to edit, my mind still finding things pathetic
Im not accepting what god has given so kindly
Not appriciating, but seem to start un-winding
His light now blinding, reminding me of my mistake
I didnt embrace my chance, the thoughts make me fake...
I Had " a chance of a lifetime " finally the right sign
But I took it for granted, ive crossed that fine line
Now im never forgiven, dispair im liven
No one care, Ive driven to long and lost the ignition
my time to listen, and I didnt pay attention
i would be happy, but the sad seems to be skippin ( like a record skip )...

I had a "chance of a lifetime", dont be like me and take it for granted
I was handed a simple plane, and was effortless to understand it
Now im facing Hell with his faces of perception
lethal injections of poisons, from how he shows his effection
This is a lesson earned, so take the time to right rhymes
Dont end up like me, I missed a " Chance of a lifetime..."

Kosta 11-29-03 11:33 PM

kind of bleh on both sides. but whatever. i'm not voting on this, you both equally blew cock and balls in my opinion so uhh.

v. tie

madman, i'd like in the league and signups are closed, let me in next week if you want. peace matt.

menolin 11-30-03 07:43 AM

im gonna give this one to High Class

High Class
you kept nice wordplay, all he way through which was constant,
nice immagery, and nice drop.

Im in a world with situations, wars in many locations
But sooner or later, it will come back to me in rotation

^^^nice^^^

Now im facing Hell with his faces of perception
lethal injections of poisons, from how he shows his effection

^^^also nice^^^

Tribz
aiight
wordplay was a lil choppy, and i thought inconsistant, but i liked your drop, it has some very nice immagery in places.

Sometimes we forget what would happen if we were in others' shoes
And make a kid go through as much pain as their mothers' do
When those who struggle have the chance to live a normal life
Why do we decide that its not allowed and make that child grieve in strife

^^^if only all your poem was like this, consistantly^^^

High Class 11-30-03 02:24 PM

Thanks alot hommie. Upping for some more of these votes............
1-0 Me

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

deacon 11-30-03 02:36 PM

yeah i think high class took this by far very nice job mayne....i just felt that tribz was too simple...high had nice vocab and actually impressive flow...nice battle guys...um and daddy says make sure you put the effort in voting as well...-1-

High Class 11-30-03 02:40 PM

I will be sure to go and vote hommie, just waiting for more people to drop there verses. aight looks like Im still up. UPPIN

2-0 Me
(will there be a KO )

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Tribz 11-30-03 05:01 PM

ya i think you deserved to win this
i just wasnt feeling this topic.. at all

rule 11-30-03 05:10 PM

Vote High Class, he had more flow although I found tribs was more unique cuz it was true i found high hit harder, both good verses i just think some things needed some more flow and indepth emtion and explanition props to both

High Class 11-30-03 06:50 PM

Aight then, thanks for the votes hommies. If there counting KO's I guess I won. I will go make my votes when the people start putting down there verses. Good battle tribz, and goodluck when we go at it in the future. 3-0 K.O. ME

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Thrust 11-30-03 07:40 PM

i don't think this was really close honestly
high class...had higher class in every aspect
other dude i'd get lost with...i didn't like it bein all that strected...
it wasn't that great of a telling there....
high class just had better imagry n feeling in his piece

vote-highclass

High Class 11-30-03 07:59 PM

Thanks for the vote hommie. You is cruicial LOL, I guess Uppin for the last vote for the Win. UPPIN

4-0 ME

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Thrust 11-30-03 08:02 PM

unlimited votes...
o n uh...suggestion...
don't need to up your battle man...
some people may get annoyed of that...
wit u posting after everything...
lol....it's cool

-ElocuShun- 12-01-03 03:25 PM

not a bad battle but very hard to judge....
but my vote=High Class

High Class...your flow was on point your story was nice but you didnt stretch it as far as you could..next time milk it for all its worth..pz overall=7/10

Tribz..you was jus aight..showed a lotta potential n grind but you jus didnt catch me in any way...work on ya structure to get maximum flow etc..overall=6/10

Key-Low 12-01-03 06:00 PM

Goin against tha grain

This was a close battle, high class.....ur's gotta betta towards tha end, work on bein more consistent.....rhyme scheme was off at first...very choppy, tribs....solid, didnt lyke tha end
good flows for newbies though

tribz- rhyme scheme: 7, flow: 7.5, Story: 8, total: 22.5

high class- rhyme scheme: 7, flow: 7, Story: 7.5, total: 21.5

high class - go more in depth next time, tell us how you messed up and what was tha chance you were given

i'm goin against tha grain

vote- Tribz, no hard feelins, good luck and may tha best man win, check my verse, stay real, peace, 1

High Class 12-01-03 07:32 PM

Newbie'z? Maybe you shouldnt say things about people you dont know. No beef, but does that make you feel bigger when you say shit like that? Just wondering. How many votes does it take to win? Or is it continuo's voting until the 5th? Ahh well, Uppin...

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Key-Low 12-01-03 11:29 PM

no hate....but you are new to sacred scriptures, thats why i said it, no beef.........but i was a newbie when i first started, so now you are.........elevate, stay real, peace, 1

High Class 12-02-03 12:14 AM

I got you then, I didnt know what you meant. Dont think im new to it period. I use to do it alot back during the hiphopheads, hiphopfuter, and ripthemic days. But I stoped for a while, No beef, sorru bout that hommie...

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Mental God 12-02-03 03:33 AM

High Class Took This With An Original Flow

I Loved This Line

But now I have a chance, a glance to revive my stance
Take out my hatred, Fill it with Romance


Tribs Kinda Came With Some Story-Telling Flow That Didnt Really Flow, And The Streched Bars Is Succh A Turn Off...

Dadi Kewl 12-02-03 10:18 AM

Class takes this with a more complex and solid verse
Good vocab and a tight flow....
Tribz just came a bit too somple for me.

V. High Class

jego 12-02-03 05:46 PM

this was my first topical battle to vote on...
nice change from everythin else....

well i think tribz had a good verse becuz he really applied the topic to a real specific situation and had a nice twist on it, that was clever, good rhyme, good drop overall.

though high class didnt get as specific as tribz did, i enjoyed the flow and rhymes on this piece much bettter, as i read it to myself it just flowed real nice, i think it would make a good song to record. this verse showed nice skill right here in the english language....

my vote: highclass

reall good and close battle mad props

can yall hit this up???

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...28&pagenumber=2

Xeon 12-03-03 12:23 PM

high class got this on wordplay and vocab

nice

Maven 12-07-03 01:46 PM

HighClass wins.
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