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4 da ladies
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open woundz


heres a little story i'm about to tell/
i makin' it up as i go so, what the hell/

Mike was a good kid, never really stood out/
his parents treated him like a girl scout/
all he did was go to school, and stay at his home/
his parents flipped when they found he got stoned/
they took away his privelidges, like he had any/
through his head, suicidal thoughts, he had many/
he decided to accept his jail -like restrictions/
he thought he could hold back the knife from incision/
or hold back the 22 from loading ammuntion/
soon, after groundation was ended/
the rules again, he started rebendin'/
this time it was cocaine, he had the money to buy it/
his parents yelled at him, he thought it was a riot/
they sent him to boot camp and when he got back/
he took the 12 gauge, off his fathers gun rack/
he sat on his bed, he thought about death/
he came to a conclusion and put his mind to rest/
later that day his mom went up to check/
all she saw was his bloody ass neck/
she regretted not giving him room to ever breathe/
the guilt built inside her and she grabbed the keys/
started driving to the lake where her husband was fishin'/
got coastin really fast and turned off the ignition/
she caught him at 40 instantly he died/
he never heard it coming until the crack of his thigh/
the wife drove into the lake, not even thinking twice/
except that it would've been easier to go out with a knife/

mike needed drugs to have fun in his life/
his parents were the ones that unsheathed the knife/


out like a newborn

feed back plz

lol... Dunny, I Like's It , that was creative... and you fliped some good lines.... Keep @ it..

feedback people, c'mon

Yeah this was pretty good man....you seemed to structure it pretty well it looked good to me....the flow in this piece was pretty good it stayed pretty consistant i thought didnt get off too much....overall id say this was a good piece, worth the read...keep at it.

to da top

c'mon people, uppin'

that was a good peice I liked the read on it.. nyce topic...8/10

Peace Out Kuz

this was nice the lines flowed very well youve improoved a good amount nate good job nice topic word play was decent id give this 8/10 good job lookin for more peices man

hey just for fun, wanna battles klipz

oh u wanna battle meh?

yeah, i need something on my record, even if it is a losing point

THIS WAS A GREAT READ TWIN I LIKED ALL YOUR ANGLES AND ASPECTS

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I wasnt feelin this that much. It was to simplistic, and had to simple of a rhyme scheme. You have alot of potential hommie. And for a free write its good. It didnt really catch my attention though. Keep elevatin playa.

5.5/10

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

to da mutha fucken top biatches

It seems like you have a down sound flow style

i really don't like tho's kinda styles.. but the peice was coo

Average.. keep elevatin... on3

you give the shittiest replies I've ever seen.
if you don't shape up, I'll get you banned.

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