rule vs Rhymes
 

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topic: PLAYGROUND


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yo checkin in mayn...i'll post tomorrow after school............................................ .................................................. ...

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in the mean time checkout my latest poem Racisam and drop a feed back its in my sig

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As the sunlightlight tries to brake throw the "smokey fog" of this summer morning...
This "warzone" fill's with "MP" and yellow tape is closes this down without a warning...

Shooting "soldeirs" fighting protecting head and neck to keep this for kids the only place...
Were everynight this picture repeats itself until the early morning in a everlasting pace...

------------The picture i saw-----------

This stone cold summer morning a tast of powerful gun shooting smoke raised the air as fresh blood was around...
No matter which direction I tried to turn mothers fall to Pic up the "troops" as they lay hopeless and in struggle on the ground...

this "dark nightmare" turned around after this was turned to constent threat to kids,thank God for that day...
As days and days of hard work and help from residentes were offered this "bloody" ground was turned to a zone to play...

As the years roll us by we made this wat once was hell a great Paridais, some even say this home...

quick key...

Percussions anounce stabilty to the human eye of one
Realizing pain an aginy from what playground war begun
Depths of my being being slashed because of actions
No remorce crutial behavier killing my school satisfactions
Religious poverty amune as as one uniqgue fragement
Disapointing we cant adapt lost certian soul pegments
Amune to actions tendicies of assault I cant handle
Thus leaving me in my home praying to be idle
My heart is trapped in an envirement of hate
Propaganda of styles if you dont have your fake
My blood runs cold as I struggle to not be injured
Today i'll apt to agresions scared cuz my life isnt ensured
Bullies creating sins on other children of backgrounds
Stereotypes and false statements all over the playground

ive never judged a topic before so dont hate i think if the topic is playground rhymes was kinda off topic so i have to give this one to rule
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96008

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nice verse rule

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i think rule had more flow and it created a better picture in my mind of the topic his structure wus also good
rhyme su had a good verse to nice structure but it didnt really flow as much to me yo soo i gotta give this one to rule i cant post a poll vote tho sorry

but could you guys vote on my battle sin my sig please yo they
gettin SLEPT on yo thanks
My VOte=Rule

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come on man would you like if your battles were slept on

damn vote

yo rhymes you voted on my battle but u didnt poll u vote please do so we gettin slept on too yo il vote on this as soon as i can poll i alrdy gave u guys the vote id post soo peace please help us finish the battle bein slept on thanks yo peace

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ive never rated or judged a topic before...but here it goes:

I give my vote to rhymes because he had a much better and easier to read verse..he actually went into the "topic' and explained everything clearly...rule you wrote your peice as if this were an actuall battle..you verse wasnt bad i just think you took this seriously..therefor rhymes get my vote...

no.hate...keep at it ya'll...good work by both..

arent you suppose to take it seriously?.lol.................................... .......................uppern for some votes

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yea you are supposed to take it serious but not the way you did...there was a topic givin there for you were supposed to rap about that topic..your verse was writted as if this wasnt a topical battle..thats what im trying to say....if you dont understand this...then dont battle topical...no hate

PZ

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I'll give this to Rule for a much better format...

(Kill the stretched shit, Rhymes)

He also takes the vocab.

Both came with sharp imagery and emotion.

Felt em both.

But Rule's was so much easier to read.

Vote: Rule

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rite, cant vote, but hopefully can soon.....a wud vote for rule....simply because a found his verse easier to read, as it was set out in a decent format.....

some nice wordplay in both, but rule took it only slightly in the wordplay....

overall = rule

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7902#post957902

ooppps.....really shud of done that on that ^^post^^ :S

yea the format and punches i have to give it to rule he edged it

i cant vote yet....got no 100 posts

but return favor

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...1635#post961635

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rulle stole this yeah he got it all the way gj man yeah i liked it anyhow i dont care anymore about how im going to say thi.,......

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