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" Remember our Love " ( Full Rap )
Remember the times we held hands, made plan's
Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) My effort has been endless, when we met I became friend-less Our hearts collided, and knew we were defence-less Our lips went from across the school yard, to close inches Until that magical Day we showed our love, it proved to be spend-less Your my heart, soul, the missing face of all my pictures Highest on my scale of ricter, we were stuck like stickers I would give a kiss goodnight every time the moon went to set We have no regrets, Just trying to work on our future success I will give you my last breath, I will trade the bad in for good Cause its all for you baby, I hope I am understood Your my life, My future wife, there to make everything right When darkness showers on me, you continou to bring light Please dont leave, when I say ' I Love you ' just believe me Your my need, with out you I have no one who will lead... Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) Forgive-ness, thats what you gave me when I was thinking crazy Our constilations colide, no need for messages from haites I made bad choices, but you stuck with me to make things better So many letters, and hard roads through the dangerous weather We can make it, Like I said satan is face-less So lets keep our eyes on each other, and just pace-this You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle Your my idle, your strong where I can only be so week Our love has no peak, No ups and downs, so we dont leap We fly like birds that know death is coming Running like Lions with there pride, knowing this could be there last hunting We will meat soon, finally after this long time, in the same room But im always there, consider me the sun and the moon Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) As you touch my skin, it begins to bump n go tense Issue's we've rinsed and spent time thinking through non-sence Our love is eternal, Might be hard but keeps a hard kernal All my thoughts placed in your mind, My walking Journal You know me from the inside, to out-side, and the out-side in Remember memories of those memories, but no thoughts of an end I can depend on you, the only one I trust with the darkest secrets To other's im read-less, but her skill of it leaves me speach-less I bought you rubbies, diamonds, silver, but none match my writes Those are the only ways, you can see through our sites Is to check my poems, letters, and notes of forgive-ness With-out you by my side baby, My time on earth is Sense-less... Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) Just know I will always Love you... ------------ This is kind of a filter of things going through me and my girls long distance right now. I had to move away in july, so its been hard ever since. ( Anyone who has knowledge will know what I ment about the Haities Line...) ---> Rate what you think about this hommies |
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6976#post966976 - Rule http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6991#post966991 - Emerge http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6995#post966995 - Insane Lyricists |
damn, that was great, your flow and emotion and wordplay was awesome, you had a great song here, it would sound great on audio keep it up mayn pz
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this was real nice nice hook nice everything i really enjoyed this one i really felt your emotion in this that hook was nice i liked it so much i went back and read it again beatiful....hahaha
can u hit my piece up "underpriviledged" keep this up man it was good |
Uppin this, and thanks for the feedback hommies...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
damn hommie. You sound like me. This reminds me of my song "babygirl" Keep spittin that nice shit. If your girl sees this, I'm pretty sure she'll appreciate it. Keep spittin fam.
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That was fantastic.. Great emotional/feelings and wordplay.. i read it allowd and the flow was great ... loved it
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That was A Nice Drop....One Of The Better Ones.........The Chorus Was Tight Kuz.......The Verses Flowed Nicely.......they cam hard......U Used Nice Vocab......Nothing Really Wrong With It....Except the Long Read But I Didn't Mind It ......10/10 Fo It Keep That Shit Droping Kuz That was Tight As A Mother Fuka Peace (v)
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Thanks hommies,
Ive been trying to elevate, guess im doing it right... LOL Much love, and if anyone wants me to peep there flows, Just put the link in here. I aint got no problem doing so. You took your time to read and type a replie to mine, so i will do the same... Aight hommies, UPPIN OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
Yeah i agree this was a pretty good piece here...like Uski said the chorus was nice, i liked it...your flow in this seem pretty good, it stayed on point i thought as i read through this...it was a long read, but it was worth it i think....overall this was a good piece...keep at it.
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Dat Was Dope Man 10/10 Mah Bestfriends Girl Even Thinks Its Off Tha Hook
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Yo kuz u were always one to flow from yo heart. da kourse wen nicly, da flow waz rippin, an da emotion put in tops diss off wit a 9/10... hella tight kuz, Keep it krakin yo.
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Thanks for tha love hommies. Its much appriciated. and street soljah tell that girl " Sup Ma, thanks for the opinion." Yea, I always spit straight for the heart, nothin fake. Thanks again hommies.... UPPIN
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
Uppin For Some Replies on This...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
yo this was dope... your a fucking genius....
it almost never fell of flow, you lyricism was great (multies, internals, vocab), you had some pure emotional wordplay in there, and an element of storytelling... your hook fits in perfectly, and sounds great when reading out loud... some of my fav bars: You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle Is to check my poems, letters, and notes of forgive-ness With-out you by my side baby, My time on earth is Sense-less... We will meat soon, finally after this long time, in the same room But im always there, consider me the sun and the moon .. if 50 cent saw this and realised how badly it shits over 21 questions, he'd shoot himself nine times you should show this to your girl, she'd love it 9.5/10 |
Thanks alot hommie. You are funny as hell. Yea, I sent this to my Baby. I will tell you what she thinks of it through PM tommorow... Thanks alot hommies for the replies. It means alot to here your opinions. UPPIN
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
yo i liked this chyper as well keep up wit da the hot stuff homie
score 9.4 of 10 |
I felt that your rhyme was flawless. It kept my attention and I could relate to what you were saying. Your best works always come from the heart. I think you got some skills, fo real. If you do have some audio, I would luv to hear it man. Keep writin'....hit me up
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Aight hommie,
Im supposed to be hitten the studio this summer. Gotta conection with a hommie in northern florida. But thanks alot hommies. I probably will use these lyrics for a track on my intro. CD for the underground. UPPIN for more replies... OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
This was dope dawg.
We got some competition now between us coz I'm droppin 'Love you,Hate you' tonite. Flow was perfect, so was vocab and structure but coz everythin can be improved I'll give it 9/10. Well done |
aiight
the hook The first 2 lines were a good set up for a hook. Though in stead of house to house, you could of put heart or someht ing else. hoo 6/10 1st verse Our lips went from across the school yard, to close inches great line ok it was an aiight verse some nice immagery and some aiight vocab and wordplay. Highest on my scale of ricter, we were stuck like stickers this was one of the weaker lines in the song, but it was a good concept overall verse 7.5/10 2cnd verse You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle probably your worst line[/b] again it was a nice verse, with some good wordplay, nice immagery, but it could of been made better. [i]overall 7/10 3rd verse your best verse too many quoteables in this one. the best wordplay, immangery was in this verse. overall 9/10 i wasnt being harsh i was only commenting mainly on the bad things so it can help you elevate. it was a good drop, and you have some talent, but it seems that if you would of took your time, (i do this) and not rushed it instead. [b]overall[b/]8/10 aiight keep it up peace |
Aight hommie, Thats straight. I grade people the same way, just gotta point everything out to them. Thanks for breaking it down like that, much appriciated. UPPIN POSSABLY...
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shit dawg i wanna hear this on audio.
fucking quality here. good wordplay, structure, multis, similes, and flow. overall 9/10(cause nothing is perfect but very near). thnx for the reply. |
No problem hommie... I think this thread is probably done...
But here is my last effort, UPPIN OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
dope drop...see dis is why you in DOI...keep it up dawg..I give you 8.5/10 for this drop...
now you gotta keep elevatin and get into legends... |
yo bro ...emotional sciptures wit al time mixtures...i must say its GReat which may turn u into a fag but im not bein slack cuz tis is just part of the comments....so dont be mad its a contribution 2 ur rhymin rap...haha
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LOL, You just sounded very stupid hommie... But whatever. Thanks for checkin this out for me lightning. UPPIN
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
Highclass that was a great peice i enjoyed reading it. so i read it over and over again 3 to 4 times.. this was reeaaally good hommie..dont ever give up you got hella talent..10/10
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Hott tracc!!.....nice topic,flow wus good n on point!!....wordplay very nice keep dat up!!.....good structure......look jus put it dis way shyt wus a job well done n dats all dat matters!!......keep it up playa!!.....~1~
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Bringing this back, anyone think that this belongs as a legendary rap... I wanna see if anyone would vote on a person not very none yet... so...
UPPIN |
I just replied to like 4 fuckin people, were the fuck is the favors being retured. I will just remember this ;)
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you did what you wanted to do. Its cool you posted a complete piece because that doesnt get done enough or didnt back in the day when i was still coming here. You can always be better but i cant give you to much shit for this.
7.5/10 nothing flashy but you did what you wanted |
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LOL so fucking true yeah he would.... nice hook on this really good good flow, multies overall very good would like ot hear it go audio tho.... Keep it up high class man nice shyt.... Check out my audio "Skillz" in well audio-songs ya know... Peac3_________________------------------------________............... |
nice drop
dis was a dope piece even tho its old lol didnt recongize it nice flow, multies and wordplay would be a nice audio 9/10 |
i liked the chorus a lot. this was some good shit. it was catchy and flow almost never fell off. good drop homeboy
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DAMN....
Pretty dope peace Flow was good... Emotion was running By far 1 of the best things i've seen Dope Shit homie... Keep it up... We should do a collab some time |
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