St-St-Stutter (Ft: Skiddz) extended version
 

El dios perdona los que han estado igualando palabras con la violencia, permiten la extensión de la Libertad a todo, no tiene miedo para hablar más alto ya'll hará.

Relik,
Are you having problems trying to get words to come out?
Have you bottled up feelings that your whole life is about,
Anguish is what i really see, i don't mean verbal deficiency,
You can speak clearly... but you words come out fearfully,
Freedom Of Speech, wrong words give reasons to impeach,
Type of shit they try an teach, but it's still like the 17th century,
So elementary, I didn't know words could be,used as weaponry,
You better duck and cover, given you reasons for why you stutter,
So should you have problems all bottled up inside, keep it secret,
These days you have no-one to confide in... just don't speak it,
To stay mute, ends mutiny, but one has trouble trying to compute,
"All these feelings new to me",you can't keep quiet and be astute,
Thoughts peril in the deepest pit in your brain,can't get them out,
So damn hard to maintain, reasons why you go insane, no route,
But what to complain, try the hardest in vain, to speak it all up,
and it will remain the same, commend the claim, your get locked up,


Skiddz,
Listen close, I see in you, How fear Overcomes
God providing everything...Light from his Son
Your bottled up inside, Feelings wanting air, Gasping
Your selfishness, strangling hate, that they attracting
My mind confides in me, yet is apart from my body
I kept it in for so long, now its too late to try to be sorry
You seem to gossip revealin information of your peers
But when It comes to yourself, You hold on more to fears
And when you let go, Your whole sanity disappears
And they put you in the hospital...forever..
And even if you can say everything, nobody would want to hear


Relik,
Actions speak louder than words, and cows move better in herds,
Propoganda has you allured,we move in groups,see what I mean,
We walk, talk, and act in a pack... indivduality is that rarely seen,
If only to speak how you feel,we'd see some emotions that are real,
Contradicting whats others don't want,revealed, shut up and sealed,
Upon casting this verse, I hope i've made speaking out better than worse

this peice was good, both had good flow, nice shit, everything was kinda in order so i cant pick out anything that stands out majorly to pick on, nice drop keep them up, reply to my peice please, the collab

are 3 ppl each are, we forgot to post them b4
relik- skiddz-
lethargic
chrit MuhThugga
fgee relik
skiddz

yeah i agree this was a good collab here...enjoyed the read....it flowed pretty good, stayed on through out it....you had some good multies i liked those, from both of you...you both structured your verses nicely,...overall this was a good collab...keep at it.

Is it me..or is this Masta C cat trying to be Open Mic mod?
Calm down, you did that in my piece too, calm your goddamn hormones...We know the rules.

yo it was a good peice and nice collab
vete con dois homie and its all good


9.5\10

yo leave feedback on mine
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This was a tight collab. Both had a good flow and used a good source of wordpaly. You both used a variety of vocab and like what was said, you both did a great job. uppi nfor them. Oh yea, return the favor.

"Get Down, Get Low" featuring Manet

*I accidently said goof flow. How fucked up is that*

^^^^word thats what we need to hear, even more in-depth, lol word

All i could say is Damn!

this was a nice collab, it had good structure fo' both of yall, tight ass wordplay, n.......... keep doin yall thing, lookin to see sum more from yall

PeAcE

alrite, can we get someone in here to brake shit down????????????????????????????????????

actually....hes been apporached about being an Open Mic Mod
I guess this is why

thats bullshit, hes been here for 4 fuckin months, i dont think i like these new admins, they dont care so much, gettin rid of the old mods, could you review our open mic, thats was kinda freepost

THIS WUS ALRITE NOTHIN BIG

^^^^get banned

alright upping for more people to peep this

Lmao at all the bullshit replies this got ..

.. stupid newbie fucks, really though ..
you opened this up decent, flow was on point
to me, i liked the content in this actually, the
writers voice was its strongest asset .. transition
was good, kept it moving nicely .. kept switching
it up .. didnt stay on one idea like most newer
kids here do .. i thought you could of put in more
Multi's and internals to help carry each verse,
cause right now you only had a basic one syllable
rhyme scheme, but yeah .. mulei's and internals
would fix that and help a lot towards how your
verse flows when read. Id also say to you .. dont
worry about making your lines even. As long as
each line is roughly 12-16 syllables long, it will flow
Ive done this a lot longer, thats why i can get it to
go together when i write but it takes time .. you'll
pick it up as you write more cause you'll start getting
a feel for how the piece flows and eventually, you'll
get it to go without really trying. It was a fairly original
topic i felt .. ive not seen it flipped before, you gave it
a nice twist .. when is aw the title i didnt expect it to
be how it was, so i give you props on that. Skiddz verse
i didnt feel as much, he said what he wanted and got
the point across but it was egtting tiresome to me, lacked
the edge there to really hold my attention and make me
want to read what he had to say .. a lot of that is to do with wording .. you have to word each line so that it holds the
readers attention and keeps them entertained. The finish to
this piece was decent, rounded it off nicely .. nothing really
eye opening .. but the potentials there, thats what matters.


Just stick at it and you'll improve eventually, we all have to start somewhere.


Pz.

thank u thank u thank u..............a critical reply that will help me in the future, now if everyone would give like that the world would be a better place.

word..thanks for the reply