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[.OnE.] ft. Whitelightning
Whitelightning
One Feeling, Many Emotions Derived How Can One Being Make Me So Alive Guts Wrenching At Any Single Glance Motions Ceaseing, We Start To Dance To Co-Exsist Is Unexpected Bliss Don't Want My Oppurtunity, Considered Missed Take Advantage Of Anything Wholesome Don't Wanna Spend Times All Lonesome If Elements Stray What Scars Remain Do All Feelings Leave A Permenant Stain Too Many Bones Locked Up Without Keys Airborne Hatred Thick, An Uncontrollable Disease Experiences Affect All Biased Opinions And Feelings The Next Woman Will Be Subjectd To These Raw Dealings One Woman, Singular Soul Ripped Or Sewn Too Bad This One, I didn't Condone ..Sureal.. Love, One Thing, Death Is Another.. Pull One String, Flip To The Other.. Breathless, Her Beauty Enthralls.. My Heart Felt, All Over The Walls.. Torn Out, Thrown At The Mirror.. Burned Out, Drone Of The Fear.. Divide Two, Then Split It In Half.. Beside You, World Starts To Crack.. Glass Shards, Scattered In Front.. Fresh Scars, Objects Are Blunt.. The Blood Drips, Sin Bares Heavy.. Flipped Scripts, I Am Now Ready.. Knife To Throat, Blade To Her Skin.. Life, It Floats, But Wheres It Been.. Held My Hand, Cried Ever So Gently.. Nothing Planned, Not Done Intently.. Slid The Blade, She Gasped For Air.. Her Life To Fade, From Internal Fear. How Many Reasons, She Have To Live.. How Much Blood, Did She Have To Give.. Everlasting Stream, Of Blood Begun.. In The End, There Can Only Be One.. |
nice work guys
both of you did very well...you both managed to shine working together WL fav line: Too Many Bones Locked Up Without Keys Airborne Hatred Thick, An Uncontrollable Disease sureal fav line: Love, One Thing, Death Is Another.. Pull One String, Flip To The Other.. good write fellas...imagery metaphors all were there drop some feed on my open mic in sig titled : untangible evil |
Man.. Everything I've ever read of Sureal's has been good, Now i'm a fan of whitelightning too
I loved this piece, both spit with emotion, This had everything.. Great write you 2.. |
But yeah i agree this was a good collab here....enjoyed both parts of this, made a real good read...liked the multies used in both verses, vocab from both of you was real nice....flow was good in both verses as well....overall i thought this was a good collab.
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uppin
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maybe Sureal was right..this site is goin downhill with zero feedback..
uppin. |
Uh...
Real good formats... Real good flow, decent vocab, great imagery. But what the hell was this about? The birth of a serial killer? A passion killing to someone you once loved? Not dissing it, I must have just missed the reasoning behind the killing. Overall, 7.75/10 Woulda given higher, this was really dope... But it left me going, "huh?" Peace |
uppin...
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WL...i hoped you learned alot from this collab
your flow was good but if you could drop a syllabul here or there it would be better...the last few lines really were out there in Syll. count... Sureal... Yup, as usual... great |
To be honest.
You two are like carbon copies of each other. Your styles are...like, based on Multi's...which...eh |
uppin..yea I know what ur talkin about Realist...
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Dope.
. . . . WL.. your deff improvin kid.. good shit.. it was actually almost borderlined with sureals.. ALMOST.. you had a good outlook n' it was a good read. nice Sureal.. Rep Ro Sent.. this was dope.. simple n' to the point, not fuckin around.. always deep.. always a good read nothing really i could tell either of you to work on.. but.. . . Hit This Up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=98583 |
is this the same surreal as the one on Thugs Mansion??and is WhiteLightning D*Wrecks or D*rex?????? or is this jus a coinsidence?
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Sureal this is The First Time I have read One Of ya Pieces but now i will look out For them ya structure was Nice and ya Flow was Excellent But i think ya Lines are A bit to short but it Don't Worry Me.....WL Your Verse was Good too ya Structure was Ok ya Flow was Excellent Ya Did Well TO Start it Off And I Enjoyed the Imagery...........
so that was the Best O/m i havre read and and Hella Tight Collab ya'll and i'll look out for more of ya Work.......p.€.a.c.€....... |
this is fucking hot
Vocab,flow all of it was hot 9/10 |
it was a tight piece
lets see what more collabs yall got in store |
thanks for the feed guys...uppin
Who da fuck is D Rex? |
uppin one last time..
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