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N-Demik 12-15-03 05:46 PM

Lights & Deaf
 
Check, faulty dialogue, this cost is sentenced to death
its overhead the plummet downhill into retention we quest
All forward to lengthen the mess, beyond metric dimension
idealisms truanting from perception of ecletic perfection
But so what? People indulge in these kind of mislead motions
to insist that 20 wrongs make a right like incest's woven
Into the appropriate papers of every matrimony proceeding
leading to parental maturity, forcing adolescence into weaping
Actions of treason against your evolved seeds, the mold bleeds
free'd the immoral characteristics, there ain't no more "hold me's"
That's just an awful case scenario, the apex of train wrecks
I hate this! Being that Earth is just an alias for fray rests
Not resting dormant though, believe me, the torment shows!
not only through body language or emotion or the war woes
It's more like every instance you're not blinking or sleeping
you envision distinct things like souls sinking or freezing
This system of breathing was just an excuse for drinking, enriching
the death toll, we've used up all the life, living is fiction
We've driven the Styx in, we all listen, just don't pay interest
word was never born, Mother Nature was on the pill during sex
We then use this mess to feed ignorance, images become debatable
throwing spanners in our work till our income states then fall
Left to face the storm, sandbags amiss, man's back in the abyss
defined by this wisdom eclipse, ransacking through the mist
Till I happen upon...nothing, but somethings stacking the scorn
born to harbor the product of Stigmata, all lacking reform
The brackets were torn, now paragraphs exude from context
content under duress to re-invent blasphemy to renew the vortex
Of whore sex portraited within the tainted cerebral cortex
the depths of Hell rebelled and we're all snared in Hades forceps
No one insisted a four step regime to exhume arcane theroies
so it doesn't seem as farfetched facing this series of queries
Where we're in the nearing of long term heart felt ramifications
as managing situations exists as a form mislead anticipation
Here we're caving, the claustrophobic - not the only home goers
half the globe the ford focused, the rest.. the stone throwers
The pebbles dashed, semi skimmed our limbs, injured our skin
the ears of the wall can't hear what our whispering's housing
In a bid for reprisal, confidence uprising is held at eBay
we stay contorted, extorted in sum, for some there's hell to pay
We melt away against the grain, make a beeline for an A Train
just the same old, same old mint sayings, but nothing's the same
Stuck in the same....phase, with different behavior patterns
I'm timed out for a New York minute, but why stay in Manhatten?
Allday is a madden, hard backs carrying sacks, hailing Mary
for the visionless inciting idiots exclaiming brail's impairing
And they failed to merit from life, confused like foreign homage
as to why people assume living is beautiful was common knowledge.

WORD~PERFECT 12-15-03 06:24 PM

YOU ARE WITHOUT A DOUBT A CAPTIVATING LYRICIST CARABLE OF ALLURING ANYONE TO BE ENWRAPPED WITHIN YOUR RHYMES I ENJOYED THIS A GREAT DEAL AND WISH TO HEAR AUDIO .THIS EMBODIED ALL THE ELEMENTS THOUGH LENGTHY IS HOW.

K.Largo 12-15-03 10:21 PM

damn this was just fucking dope.
a very damn good painter w/. words
the images were descrived very vividly.
props man

Dropz 12-16-03 09:10 AM

that was fuckin tight

.Skribblez. 12-16-03 06:33 PM

You have some of the best imagery I've read, I enjoy everything that I've read of yours.. This was mos def 1 of my favorites.

Baron Mynd 12-16-03 07:05 PM

iller than yall: word to how shit your open mic was
iller than yall: you fell off = /
RalphsBagels: SORRY !
iller than yall: my bad
iller than yall: message was meant for N Demik
RalphsBagels: hahah

iller than yall: i love you N Demik
iller than yall: Youre my idol
ArrowbiciswacC: Yes, well, what can I say?!

-uski- 12-16-03 07:34 PM

this was tha nivest Piece I Have read.........Whoa......ya Flow Kills and Ya Structure is Just as Good........Vocab was Excellent Man so was Ya Word Play Made tha Picture in My Head.....This Is the First Piece i have read By You and I will look out fo More Man this was Tight Man Tight.....p.€.a.c.€.........

o can ya Hit Up "Never Take A Chance" Thanx Man
-{/]~{Ú§kÍ}~[\}-

N-Demik 12-17-03 10:51 AM

Thanks alot for all the replies(Except Cam - Idiot)

Appreciate it :)

Baron Mynd 12-17-03 12:50 PM

Blah .. be glad i even read it. Space rapper bullshit with an off flow due to too many syllables in each line.

N-Demik 12-17-03 01:16 PM

Yes..I love you too Cam :rolleyes:

LastPoet 12-17-03 01:30 PM

...Wow..this by far on of the nicest piece I've read in a minute...Your concept and flow was right on point...Keep up..

N-Demik 12-18-03 11:25 AM

Thank you LastPoet :)

skitten 12-18-03 12:55 PM

Shit. What the fuck am I suppossed to say? This is the best fucking drop I've read in a week. You could be a pro. Keep this shit up.


Female power

Baron Mynd 12-18-03 01:03 PM

^ I HOPE YOU WEREN'T SERIOUS WITH THE LAST COMMENT.

But yeah, if people see i've posted in here it will get more replies


POST POST POST! I KNOW YOU SEEING I REPLIED YOOOOOOOO!

N-Demik 12-18-03 03:29 PM

LMAO

Fuck off Cam..don't make me have to start deleting your irrelevant posts :rolleyes:

Thanks for reading skitten

Maven 12-18-03 03:34 PM

hey...hey demik...reply to three open mics and post links or this is gone :cool:

lol, I'll reply to this when you post your links, hoecake

N-Demik 12-18-03 03:36 PM

Shoosh...I'm the God mod here...don't talk to me like I'm a subordinate

Mr.Christensen 12-18-03 03:42 PM

and the good word is...wow

too long for my taste, but it shows me how bad i am

great job here sir (yes its a guy) and may i ask a favor
there an open mic piece i did
ss:special miseducation

feedback would be appreciated...

N-Demik 12-19-03 12:47 PM

Funk you for the look :hump:

Mr.Christensen 12-19-03 12:50 PM

N demik doesnt return feedback favors

:(

N-Demik 12-19-03 12:58 PM

I used to....

But it was a bad experience...

I'll see about giving you a response later. :)

Writers Block 12-19-03 01:15 PM

Demik ain't reply to mine either, hence i didn't reply to this ..

N-Demik 12-19-03 01:42 PM

^LOL...

You never asked me to reply to yours though :rolleyes:

N-Demik 01-01-04 11:02 AM

Tee hee... Dizowning

rule 01-01-04 11:44 AM

this was one of the best pieces i've read in an open mic in a long time, it had a lot of description and very thought out lines a lot of good vocab excellent song, the flow was great but hard cause i couldnt pernounce some of the words correctly i dont think but all in all that was amazing keep it up man

and if you could could you peepm the song in my sig and leave honest feedback thanks man

MethodZ 01-01-04 09:18 PM

this is was dope

i wasnt actually going to read the whole thing but when i started i finished and i like it...u put the picture in my head good (even thought it was hard to understand)..ur wordplay and creativy and not to mention ur vocab is deffinately the dopest on the site..and u have yet to bring me a shit one...

i give this a 1 and a half out of 10 :P

hehe

Viscosity 01-01-04 09:22 PM

this was dope.

Flow was dope.
Structure was dope.
Vocab was dope.
Concept was dope.

I'd say dope piece. 9/10
long but yet affective

Peepers 01-02-04 04:40 AM

Shit Demik......i see your still at it man....

PuRe forever bro

i like your new style, you toned down the vocab to a point where i can actually read it without a thesaurus and dictionary.....

dopeness

Koalatee 01-02-04 11:31 AM

Re: Lights & Deaf
 
Yes, very well-written, contrary to the beliefs of Lord Baron & Co. :rolleyes: Of course, as it has become the trademark of a Demik written, vocabulary & satire seemed to dominate the majority of this piece. There were plenty of quotables, but a few were especially intriguing:
Quote:
That's just an awful case scenario, the apex of train wrecks
I hate this! Being that Earth is just an alias for fray rests

After your explanation, I think that this was a particularly relevant & innovative line.
Quote:
We've driven the Styx in, we all listen, just don't pay interest
word was never born, Mother Nature was on the pill during sex

Again, a satirical metaphor utilized to perfection. .
Quote:
In a bid for reprisal, confidence uprising is held at eBay
we stay contorted, extorted in sum, for some there's hell to pay

(copy & paste previous praise)
Quote:
Stuck in the same....phase, with different behavior patterns
I'm timed out for a New York minute, but why stay in Manhatten?

This was my favorite line of all, & I am still wondering how the hell a damned British national could convey such a concept. Have you been to New York? Because that would be a commonplace sentiment in the likes of you & yours, I'm sure. .
Quote:
And they failed to merit from life, confused like foreign homage
as to why people assume living is beautiful was common knowledge.

Of course, the conclusion is full of luster, as always.

Cheers, good read, deserving of Hall of Fame honors, I am sure. I like the new Soundclick track, too - it's a Badmajik production, is it not? Post more @ Rb, please.

BoyWonder 01-02-04 12:18 PM

yo i swear dis shit was good u know...but i checked out ur tracks on soundclick and man u got some gay voice u know....tryin to sound like canibus or some shit


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