Potential Eyes - TR and G. Hod
 

Potential Eyes - Quality and The Realist

When I Was Sixteen

Where's my adolescent climax? As I scan for pinnacle years. .
I realize that my spiel lies in the depths of analytical fears
Why want to turn 21? Now, I don't brandish a frown at all. .
And my youth easily outweighs the "advantage" of alcohol
A quintessential ride, en route I get to mint potential eyes
That will be doctors and lawyers to show their influential side(s)
I accept it, too, though I have been amassing some vicious tools
Most will skip the roses, running past in packs of ambitious wolves
A fearful bastard's dreary chapter arrives in hoards of what possibly. .
May lead him out of Youth - to the corner of Bore & Monotony
We pass the lone skies, this solveable disaster strolls by. .
I try, but optimism is not a choice when the glass is bone dry
I'm scared, in need of time to play, as my shrillest whines confess
I don't realize the pressure because I have the will to find success
Never give in; not even when imposing minions look to score strife
I'll be fine - when given the chances to continue & adore life

Now At Twenty-five

Now I am of age to look back on my beginnings
No chance of sending my self back and winning
Ahead of my time, but still looking for promise
A sigh and a whine, I turned my back on college
Lack of textual knowledge for medical science
Could I practice law, when I play with violence
Decided my fate with quick silence, past tense
Darkness surrounds me, night school commence
I will earn recognition, raised to a high position
No opposition when I went on many inquisitions
Part of the work force, income stays consistent
Lethargic apathy is distance, I'm now persistent
Now I have the ability to hold my head up high
I’ve done the grind, expanded my potential eye

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That piece was ill straight loving it.. good flow.. and the realist you had a dope structure.. if it was a girl i'd hit it ;) hah but anyways very deep piece and dope as fuck, nice work Koala Tree and The Realist

wow i loved this

it was dope....flow...creativity...structure was real nice

it would be good to hav a collab with one of you :)

keep it up Pz

Yeah i agree this was a real good collab here.....i enjoyed the read...both of you came real nice with everything, there really isnt much to say about it besides it was real good....flow, structure, and everything else was good by both of you, good piece.

Dope Drop. Good flow and vocab was good. Look forward to seeing some more stuff by you guys. 8/10

Peace

some feedback please

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G.Hod, You are a legend on arby now, Your piece was fucking amazing, The multis was really smooth, your vocab was dope and fitted into a tight flow, I was feeling your depth on here, yet it lacked any wordplay that I like to see, But the read didn't suffer from it,

Realist, Your structure was dope, Not that it means anything to me, Becuase flow is important and audio wise peeps won't care how it looks on paper, but it did flow, maybe the use of multis would help the flow along, Your depth was personal and I liked that..

Props to both, Dope Collab.

G.Hod< New legend. :)

...Nice...it's rare to see collabs even out like this...but..this piece was something else...very well done...keep up..^^

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High praise, pot1ent. Thanks for noticing my improvement, though. . Good job, TR - we'll do it again soon, hopefully.

Props to that piece of work right there, structure, flow, multis, wordplay, and vocab was the fuck shit b

i just hope i held my end up on this

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interesting concept here...l liked it....both different, but went together well i thought.....both had goo d flow...and got the feeling across...G, ya verse has some nice pionts in it...with a good use of multis....realist...thought a few more mulits would help it along...but the way it is it was still dope.....nice collab....keep it up....pZ

G...Your verses never seem to disappoint, and this one lived up to that. Dope ass imagery, nice way of puttin in perspective the eyes of a 16 year old.
Realist- I don't peep enough of your stuff. This was fucking dope as hell man. You held up your end man, no worry. Two different styles doesn't mean one is weaker than the other, I feel you too were equal on this collab, and thats how it should be with most collabs, nobody should outshine the other, because it is unsuccessful.

ok G. Hod's was my favorite part
Dopest line:
We pass the lone skies, this solveable disaster strolls by. .
I try, but optimism is not a choice when the glass is bone dry

But then u got TR's fucking structure witch was amazing
TR's flow was hot...
this was a dope piece... i'd give it a 9/10

Also can you PLEASE give an HONEST Vote for this battle its gettin slept on crazy... plus theres alot of hate/dickriding on me by this kids friends...:
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hey nice piece yall i nominate this for legends. nice topic and beautifully put together, it deserves it. . . . . . . . .

really good concept, and done very, very nicely.
some really good wordplay, and vocabulary.

g-hod, some ill as fuck vocab, and the pictures you painted with words was great.

TR, nice shit, didnt stray, nice vocab, some cool immagery.

peace

legends? yay

thanks alot guys, up up and away

Re: Potential Eyes - TR and G. Hod
 

See, its not that hard.

Fucking rebelion starter G.Hod.

Freeposter!!!

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definitly Legends potential

flow was remarkably sweet
both dope writers and managed to surprise me

nice imagery and concept as well

two different styles that worked well together

nice

well it got in legends

feedback?

what can i say that hasn't already been said? basically, i loved it, everything about it was dope and you are both great lyricists, judging by this alone (i will look out for more of your work!) vocab was the thing that stood out the most to me, besides the underlying message.

agree with him about favorite line^

anyway..
ghod ur flow was nice..
and a good bar structure
it got better as i read..and i wasnt dissapointed by it
i've seen u do better though


realist..
flow was decent
nice bar structure too

Could I practice law, when I play with violence
Decided my fate with quick silence, past tense
Darkness surrounds me, night school commence
good shit^

your verse just lacked the depth of ghods
good collab though

fgee
one day i will finally impress you
cause everything i do i get an
'ehh' at best..

damnit im trying