HopesFall vs Melancholy
 

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Battles Go Up Friday
Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time

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You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week


Topic: Living in a cage

Check....good luck to you....

uhh, i wasnt aware until today, i will have it in by tomorrow 2/2... so it will be one day after, im sure you will see to it that i am granted this.

Granted...Melancholy also has an extension

“Janine’s Cage”
By: Hopesfall

External illness with an internal mindset, this kindness,
Doesn’t come for free, here for eternity, I’ve grown spineless,
It fires on all cylinders, my composure completely bursts,
At emotions worst, happiness shifted into reverse,
---
She smiles, teeth shine for miles,
I sit down next to her; I’d be here for a while,
She takes my hand and places it on her thigh,
It confirms my, emotional high,
Hearts shattered by the chorus of screaming,
My rage is gleaming, it’s Janine,
Cut was my heart, untold was the pain
She came to where she left me…
…A rose in the rain,
Would her darkest of nails…
…Be pushed through my wings again?
I lay alone, on the floor I was slain,
Trapped in a cage, labeled with her name that morrows,
It was her, the root of all my sorrows,
I gripped my chest, in a mesmeric way,
And thought back in the night as I did in those golden days,
She blissfully twisted; I stepped and said to Janine,
The words that plagued her, like smoke from Methanphetamine,
I pierced her chest with words; it had to be done,
What she did to me was like peering, into the barrel of a gun,
“You Get Under My Skin, Even Though My Mind Is Thick,
All In All, My Message is That, You Make Me Sick…”

he no-showed.... so i win.

Hope 4 hoe show

ya drop was ok
wasent wha i exspected
from all the shit u talk
u need elivate on that
use more emotion
ya wordplay was witty
but the way u delivered it
seemed like u knew he wasent
gonna show so u jus half assed
hope thats the reason it looks like
that...the flow was choppy
and the structure was horrible

up that pronto kid

*Nuff Said*

Fuck...could I get an extension on this? My mom died, so thats why I havent been on in a while...I will drop tonight.

*Dumps on her dead face*

no... i dont care if your mom died... just think of her with a mouth full of dirt 6 feet under... but anyway, i know i did that in like 20 minutes the night before, and i quit for a while, so i am just starting back again. And i knew it wasn't good, i just ddidn't feel any emotion at the time.