Fictional Peace
 

Confusing Questions With No Answers Bein Mentioned
Peace Bein Deceased Reason For Stress And Tension
Keepin Our Children Guessin, Whats Right And Wrong
We're Simply Carressin, The Sin That Consumes Us All
Why Dont We Learn Our Lesson Before We Are All Gone?
Why Do We Wait, Until It's Too Late And So Proned To Stall
Just Siezing Peace, Relieving Grief, But Realisticly
The Fact Is That, We Should Forget It, The Results Are Brief
Quests For Less Tests Of Hate Would Be Great Just To Get Blessed
Nevertheless We Stress, Our Community's Got People Puttin Holes In Innocent Chests... Government Swears Its Best... To Leave Em Alone... Dont Wanna Be Bothered...
I'd Love To Follow A Thug Home Just To Meet His Mother And Father
World Bein Cursed By Hatrid And Rage Bein Staged
Caged In Racism Lacing Together Hate And Fate
Descrimination And Hatrid Claiming Domination To Nations
Evil Indications, Fake Friendships Ending In Tragic Relations
Temptations To Procrastinate Will Decide Our Occupations
Patience And Hardwork Results In Success Innovations
Too Many Lives Bein Taken, Too Many Hearts Are Racin
Tastin, Smellin, Hatrid Causin Body Chalk Tracins
Thinkin We Too Mature To Learn From This Horrid Type Lifestyle
I Dont Care How Old You Are, You're Still Just An Innocent Child
Mildly Understanding Reasons For This Type Of Piece
Honest Truth Spoken Of Real Yet Fictional Peace

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This was cool dogg. The flow was sorta choppy in the middle but it flowed pretty well overall. The topic was kinda bland, which made it sort of vague and played out. Try to narrow down the topic and explore it more. The multis were overused, every multi gets stressed, so for every multi watch out and make sure it doesn't hurt the flow. Internals were nice, overall it was a solid drop bro, keep em' coming.

It was an overall drop, flow was kinda choppie like ^he^ said. Maybe try and cool it with all the vocab. Its ruining the effect and emotion of some of the lines. I liked the topic, something new to see. You do a good job of getting people deep within what your writeing. The structure was straight, it was an over all good drop hommie...
Nice work...

( Be looking for " My Thoughts Pt. 3,4,5 " pretty soon... return the favor hommie )

Thanks.. I wrote this oh about a half year ago and just thought it was good. However I didn't actually try to use multis.. I keyed that verse in 7 minutes no joke. I just said what I felt and it went. Read it like it's an audio.

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