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Eph Vs. Crossword
This Is The First Round So Records Will Not Be at stake.
But if you no show you will have your post cut in half. You Must Vote in 2 other battles after you post yours or you will be DQ’d and will have your post cut in half. Check In’s Due Before Tuesday March 15 Verses Due Before Thursday March 17 First to 3 Votes Win’s.. 2-0 = KO Remember, everything is in Pacific Time. If you do not know what that is then too bad. Topic:Change |
check, T's vague... but, okay.
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30 lines max....
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check. Finally i have something to do...
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--TheBeggining--
An illuminating vision, Squinting my eyes I see A figure resemblng a goddess, A Distinguished beauty Her smiles carress my thoughts, As i conjeur some courage Our eyes meet, My heart skips a beat as my love starts to flourish As she approachs my chair, I sit in despair Rejection and humiliation pollutes the air "What If?" Fills my thoughts, But a smirk never leaves my face As she speaks the words of Aphrodites with such grace Creating such an aura, Melting every doubt That shes the one, I can't live without As I take her hand, and leave for eternity --TheChange-- I spent the next 21 seasons indulged in her My heart replaced by a glass representation Then she grasped ahold, and pulled me under And the Demon starts to fade in A mere mortal as myself, I could not resist The sweet song of a siren The Succubi's toxic kiss The cold hand of the Fates slapped me for the last time I should have known, I should've caught a sign A dirty stinking leech, Who has sucked my soul dry My heart replaced by scars, from her Razorblade Lies I am done accepting the results of your crimes As i sit and count down the time Watching you bound to the bed I fight the anxious Devil in my head You shall taste my wounds And you shall burn by my words Ehh, hard to see how i went with the topic... considering i had a little trouble with such a broad topic... But anyways, to explain it... His feelings changed, and so did the girl... This was actually a lot longer but i had to shorten it because of the line limit... :-Pn Not my best, so be nice with your votes :) |
what we need to do is CHANGE this topic....
so ya gonna cut my post in half, huh? fuck it, Change: Who got ya that Gucci, you bought ya that loui? Who sent ya flowers on days you was moody? I see the irony behind ya smile, girl you confuse me. Leave that dude he…tells his boys ya strictly booty. Ma, ya time consuming, from the bedroom to Jacuzzi. I took ya on vacation, when you asked to see a movie. He thinks ya just soft lips & boobies, which proves he Don’t know the difference ‘tween lovers & groupies. Has you cook & clean daily, like it was I love lucy. Honey truly, ya need to justify the situation like judge judy. Grab ya uzzi & automatically assume he’s…cheating. Every day now, I lay down & overlook the issue. Wonder what ya thinking & if hes ever hits you. Then about his crib & all the diamonds he gets you. Got so much ice at home, its like ya live in an igloo. Go on to think bout how much I miss you & if its real love? My mind’s spinnin like his rims do, so I conceal my grudge. Sent ya letters, asking if the shit ya put through convicts you. Responded once, sayin ya just want passionate lips to kiss you. & I send ya gifts to…reminding you, its time for change. |
Nice drop, lets get some votes in here.
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lol. yall disappointed me. but it may have been the topic. reason i said yall disappointed me is cause i was hoping for this to be the best battle of the first round. ok these verse explainations may not be that long. fuck it i aint gone go into each verse. ima just tell who won and why.
Crossword one this to me. i could envision both verses in my head, but crossword had more emotion to me. not that eph didnt have any. i could see eph's verse as the number 3 video on 106&Park. lol. Eph's verse also flowed better. so as the second actual tie i voted on today i'ma give it Crossword. though both of them would be great to still have in this tournament. damn u Dabatos and ya Generic topics. lol. i hated mine too. Vote: Crossword. |
Yea.. well basiclly..
eph.. you came with a topical from way back.. just a story line with no emotion at all... and barely any imagery man.. and no you can't blame it on the topic because of this weak verse of yours.. (no offense) but if ya are good topical heads then your verses would always be good based on any topic.. Your vocab you lacked in this.. but your multi's were amazing.. good job on that.. 6/10 Crossword.. your verse was pretty good.. but not really what I expected man.. you lacked imagery as well on this verse.. and your vocab skill was used only very little on here.. but what got to me is your emotion.. thats what i felt the most from your verse.. and emotion is the most important because once you get the person to feel what you want them to feel.. then that would be a win for you..7/10 well im dissapointed (if dats how u spell it lol) because both of ya are good.. and this was basiclly only very little over average.. and ya can't say because of the topic.. cuz as i sed before. topic doesn't matter.. it depends on the creativitie of your mind.. a good thing to write about this topic could of been How before this country was the land of the free to killing people quickly.. (actually that ain't good lol), or like the mind of person went from being the nicest person to a mentally insane person.. or other things like evolution i guess.. iono.. but there were alot of things to write but both of ya went with girls which is what everyone would use.. vote: Cross Thread Closed.. Cross wins by K-O 2-0 |
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