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Writer..(For all Writers..find your name in here..and..Fuck-You)
I'm a writer ... and that's all I ever wanted to be Rhymer scribin' the perfect rhyme, it's somethin' to see Inciter of thought, a lifesavor for those stuck in belief visual speech: shit to you, but it means somethin' to me I'm a writer, and I'll probably never get to be a celebrity so I've resigned to e-mailing hand-written letters on keys helps me get through the week and sleep sound at night knowing that tomorrow, when I sit down, about to type I'll make cents of this confounded life, help to make change to change brains and ideas chained and bound to lies that we call conformed thinkin', I feel like Bad Speller alien to those beliefs... when my brain starts drinkin' the universal language of anguish, dipped in soda Pop and I'm supposed to stop, look at how close we've got... We're eroding rock, simply by conversing over circuitry re-wording freestyles into visual lyrical codes to be seen by THOUSANDS WORLDWIDE, resurrectin' old forms of prose change the way we were raised to say how the formula goes From emcees, djs, breakers and grafitti art designs to street ballers, beat boxers and cats spinnin' text rhymes Ain't this some sh*t, somethin' we was havin' fun with Now cats are talkin' about gettin' some of their pieces published... This means something, and the cats with talent will show no matter how far the art will fall unbalanced, it grows breeding from insecticides, withered leaves that have died poisonous breezes that ride wind, infect with lesion and hives "Nature will find away" hidden underground from rhyme decay We'll stand over the corpse of hip hop and scream it's ALIVE... I'm a writer... It's what I was born to do Leave me alone, I just have to form a few pieces and poems, it may seem to be corn to you or it may be illness if so then feel this... I've won awards, some have said I'm the next big thing but hip hop pulled at my heart and chest's limp strings grabbin' me, forcing me to spit out in paragraphed lines if not for this, half my mind probably would have died WHAT IF, just WHAT IF, we're sitting on something big something that'll make sense to a generation of kids and to a generation of adults feelin' alienated from a culture that they all had a hand in creatin' it's possible, but then again, what can text do to improve hip hop. I'm just a writer, writin' rhymes to you...and you... ...and you.... and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you...and you...and you....and you....and you... and you...feel me? Shout Outs:To all Wits End members((Verb is Dope,Hottie's sexiest{at least that's what I've been told},Yu Bin Sund has the doppest avy,skiddz tried to kill me,com's a genius,Leth is amazing)),all Hemisphere fam((Dev the new freeposting king,Sublime D is simply great))gunman the dork!,my favorite open mic'er old ass B2K,ELEETE for being honest,Credz for having the "AUTO REPLY!"{This was okay..},FanTa ZeE for being sexy~~,Formula MC for showing me props!,Tech for being cool,Sarcasm for N.O.G's what!!,St8 Ace for wanting to rape my avy!,and the rest of N.O.G's(although we ain't going nowhere..LOL),all the haters for wanting to say I'm dope,but not being able to handle the truth!,Dynasty Soilers(yes,you read right!)for being extremly dumb and giving everyone something to laugh about!(J/K),to all legend judges for denying me three times(I will make it one day!)Corrupted Visions for showing me love..and if I forgot your name..you weren't that important...PEACE.... |
this was straight blazin..hot track..i could hear this in my head as an audio...and you and you and you..hot shit
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Nice shit.
"From emcees, djs, breakers and grafitti art designs to street ballers, beat boxers and cats spinnin' text rhymes Ain't this some sh*t, somethin' we was havin' fun with Now cats are talkin' about gettin' some of their pieces published..." ^Great 2 bars. But ya left me off your list :( Oh well. But yeah you had some dop imagry, maybe cause I can relate, this sounds like a resignation/rtirement track. Loved the flow, could hear the beat in my head, nice vocab and everything. Nice Penskills |
This was okay..:)
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Nice shit Penskillz...You have become my favorite Open Mic'er...good drop, had some good wordplay and stuck to your point, and your flow was nice. Please re-pay the favour by replying to my "Critical Revelations" in the Open Mic...Thanks
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Dat was the best open mic Ive heard............................and Peace back to ya for puttin Dynasty Soldiers.....
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No doubt Pen you came wit it once again......Shit was hot......blazin........scorchin.......whateva you wanna call it........You know i know can relate to this shit......shit was smooth an man im telling you this would be a dope audio.......Thanks for the shot-out dawg much appreciated! no doubt! Hope to see you come back soon....
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dat was a siik open mike.it was the best ihav ever red.
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Pen. . You Never Cease To Amaze Me. . Although I Think Some Of Your Open Mics Were Better, This One Definately Stood Out With It's Meaning. . FLow Was On-Point. . Content Was Above Most MC's Here Level. . The Message With This One Was Dope. . Just A Great Way To Leave The Open Mic Scene. . Thanks For The Shout Too. . Pz.
I've won awards, some have said I'm the next big thing but hip hop pulled at my heart and chest's limp strings grabbin' me, forcing me to spit out in paragraphed lines if not for this, half my mind probably would have died ^ ^ Dope. . Great Imagery. . Stood Out To Me The Most. |
that was very nice..i don't have any major criticisms...well paced flow, nice language...it was very nice...great actually...
here's something for your sig since i used you in mine...this is true by the way Penskills is the textcee for the next generation...he is reviving the old time poet...his ideas will usher in a new form of hip hop and change the industry...Wit's End |
Best open mic that ive read that wasn't a diss. It had a purpose and it meant something. Flow was bangin and the wordplay was on point. Structure was nice too, I couldn't really find a flaw in it, except it was small as hell.
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^ thanks everyone for the love........somebody nominate this for something! :evilgrin:
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Truthfully this has tobe your best piece yet...you vocab was much more complex..you had a good sence of direction to where you wanted this to go which made it form a sence of reality because a lot of people see things in this type of perspective...great concept...good multies and metaphores...keep up the good work...and if you can..peep my worry lines....thanks man pz
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lol.... GARBAGE....j/k... nah this was pretty good... you seem to pick up nice topics n write them well.... thought you handled this one decently.... and brought it all together nicely..... tight drop......
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