(0-0) MarvJay1009 Vs Hotshh (0-0)
 

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i doubt dis fag win,datz y im laughin,hotshh go run & tell a admin...
im laughin,cuzz ya cash thin its "girls on my 2 fukk list" but u add-men..
basically,ya basic b u been waitin patiently..till da day u was facin me..
u da fakest g,no guns u got beef u gon spray em with mase then flee...
roc'n a rainbow flag at gay riots ya cd i aint buyin my killa's? they ridin
homie jay violent,try it i ask u if u was "HOT" rv just stayed "quiet"..*shh*

Paralyze ya Textures....Apply the Pressure have You Die in Stretchers
Fry him Extra,Ya heart dont Pump blood..So U'll have to Lie in Ketchup
Look, Ya Timings Lack..plus ya Rhymings That, make You Kinda Wack
Dishem Like a Dime of Crack Behind da Back, 2 broke 2 Rewind it back
Shit, you Figure Racing against this kid You Facing?... it's Obliteration
Leave ya Liver Wasted, You shoulda 'No Show'd' Like Tigre Basement
from Far Away Ill leave U Scar'd and Slayed, You Starved and Played
Fars I Say kid You arent "JAY"..ranked number 1009 cuz Marvin's Gaye

hotshh: Paralyze ya Textures....Apply the Pressure have You Die in Stretchers
Fry him Extra,Ya heart dont Pump blood..So U'll have to Lie in Ketchup
Look, Ya Timings Lack..plus ya Rhymings That, make You Kinda Wack
Dishem Like a Dime of Crack Behind da Back, 2 broke 2 Rewind it back
Shit, you Figure Racing against this kid You Facing?... it's Obliteration
Leave ya Liver Wasted, You shoulda 'No Show'd' Like Tigre Basement
from Far Away Ill leave U Scar'd and Slayed, You Starved and Played
Fars I Say kid You arent "JAY"..ranked number 1009 cuz Marvin's Gaye

This was real good. Opener was good. Nice use of the frying/ketchup metas and good multi to use.
Closer was the key element of the whole battle. "scarred and played, starved and played" the "rank 1009 cuz marvin's gay" was a killer bar. Top form, nice personla punch that hit hard and (in my opinion) just tipped the result for the battle.
Good punches and great vocab used in this. Nice flow and structure too.



MarveJay: i doubt dis fag win,datz y im laughin,hotshh go run & tell a admin...
im laughin,cuzz ya cash thin its "girls on my 2 fukk list" but u add-men..
basically,ya basic b u been waitin patiently..till da day u was facin me..
u da fakest g,no guns u got beef u gon spray em with mase then flee...
roc'n a rainbow flag at gay riots ya cd i aint buyin my killa's? they ridin
homie jay violent,try it i ask u if u was "HOT" rv just stayed "quiet"..*shh*

Good verse aswel. Opener was ok, could have came harder there. Liked the "add-men" -nice.
Closer was ok, but once again could have come harder, i was feeling the "shh" thing but it wasnt enough.
Punches were good but didnt have the quantity. If there was another line or two you might have given more to go on but either way it was still good.

VOTE: HOTSHH

good verse...but damm like 30 niggaz done said da marvin gay line..

ok........
marvjay...................
i doubt dis fag win,datz y im laughin,hotshh go run & tell a admin...
im laughin,cuzz ya cash thin its "girls on my 2 fukk list" but u add-men..
used laughin twice....not good....good punch....multis were ok

basically,ya basic b u been waitin patiently..till da day u was facin me..
u da fakest g,no guns u got beef u gon spray em with mase then flee...
i liked this bar.....1st line was nice....shoulda used the same rhyme scheme with that many multis on the 2nd line......but still nice....

roc'n a rainbow flag at gay riots ya cd i aint buyin my killa's? they ridin
homie jay violent,try it i ask u if u was "HOT" rv just stayed "quiet"..*shh*
lol the punch was tight....but as far as the multis....up them....only 2 in each line....up the amount of syllables in each multi too......



Hotshh...............
Paralyze ya Textures....Apply the Pressure have You Die in Stretchers
Fry him Extra,Ya heart dont Pump blood..So U'll have to Lie in Ketchup
nice punch....nice multis....nothing wrong with this bar....nice

Look, Ya Timings Lack..plus ya Rhymings That, make You Kinda Wack
Dishem Like a Dime of Crack Behind da Back, 2 broke 2 Rewind it back
nice multis.....what can i say?

Shit, you Figure Racing against this kid You Facing?... it's Obliteration
Leave ya Liver Wasted, You shoulda 'No Show'd' Like Tigre Basement
again a pretty good punch....and pretty good multis...liked the 1st line better though....better multis

from Far Away Ill leave U Scar'd and Slayed, You Starved and Played
Fars I Say kid You arent "JAY"..ranked number 1009 cuz Marvin's Gaye
decent multis here....punch was good.....


overall i voted for hotshh for more syllable in his multis...and more of them....i felt that his punches hit harder too....not that that matters all that much.......

i voted hotshh ill tell ya why for his begining lines built into the climax of his piece in the middle with the rewind line etc straight multi flow tickle ya tongue shit...The personal at the end finished his piece...hotshh set it up where ill tell you what i ma do, ill rewind it with flow, and then ill spit on ya thats what i saw in his piece....

as for Marve his starter was kinda played too much in my mind he lost lines by repeatin the same thing twice except with a lil punch in the second...middle lines were confusing punches that missed i think in the battle... and the last lines were a good group of punches which i believe ya should have done right away n given him no time to have free lines because this kat like finals on RV king shit...

vote...hotshhh if ya want me to post the verses i will but if ya look i basically did without and described sentence by sentence...

^^like that dragon ball vid...

thanx fa the votes...uppin/

hotshh: Verse was nice throughout. Multis wer better done that marvs for sure. Although, in the last bar they were kinda forced. Punches were good as well... so was structure..

Marv: Your multis were simpler than hotshh's... and it doesnt seem like you spent too much time on ya verse.. youve dropped better shit in the cyphers.. punches werent that great... Next time TRY

hotshh, good verse overall, i liked the fact you used werdplay,,ya multi's
werent as simple as marv's, ya verse was deffinately more consistent throughout.
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marv, honestly ya effort level was jus wasent there dawg, you had 1 bar i thought was aight, the rest was really simple n wasnt hard hitting in terms of multi's or punches.
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vote hotshhh