Hlp with the Elevation-
i posted this up in open mic, and got some comments there, just ownderin what some of you tihnk can be done to help me out- (your insights are appreciated)
my words hardcore, even compared to war/ these lyrics leave you stunned when ya jaw hits the floor/ my skill is so dope you could wiegh it in grams/ I'm backwards, i shake ya face and brake ya hands/ don't give a damn if you's a woman or a man/ crush ya bones and stuff ya body in a can/ I'm high octain, hard to maintain/ you can't cage this rage or keep me off the stage/ so try to contain this shit I spit onto the page/ i ain't like u rappers cuz i'm only half-ya-age/ and when i dissin everybody it's gonna be an epidemic/ leave everyone of you bitches shakin like you epileptic/ so cover your ears, or you'll be sheddin ya tears/ cuz i buried ya game, you had your chance and lost it/ my game is cuastic, put ya vision on me and lock it, watch it/ as I take this line "nine" and cock it/ better hope yuor somewhere else when I pop it/.....bitch |
there is some good lines there
but the flow is too basic put some more multis in that shit |
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