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Mentalz vs Mystic Chaos
Battle Rules:
10-20 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic: Jigsaw Marriage Person with most votes in 30 days...gets win Minimum posts to vote: 50 Check in by: 10-22-05 at 11:52 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. Win by forfeit |
Mystic Chaos has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-22-05 11:26 AM.
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Kissing A Picture, Just Wishing A Kiss Past You. From Love To Games And Chess Has Bloomed. Love... But Its All For Not, Not For Gain. Insane By Rights I Control Not The Calls Of Pain. "She Loves, She Loves Me Not", I Say So Plain, On A Rose Born Only Thorns And Pedals Of Razorblades. This The Playing Piece As I Sit And Settle The Board. Playing The Game Of Love In The Center Of Storms. The Beautiful Things Climax To The Middle Of Palms. With Arms To The Sky, Hands Wide;The Lightning Rod. This Puzzle Dances The Table, Love's Scrabble. Yet I Lack The Last Piece To Release Hates Grapple. Had A Spark That Set Passion On Fire From Flat Colds. Now My Hands Struggle As I Try And Color The Ash Gold. Try And Creat A Sunscape From A Rainy Days Damp Haze, Standing Up Steady, With A Heart Held Of Bandaids. And Now There's Is You. I Try Not To Care, I Continue To Mend My Woods As Another Grew There. Try As I Might, This Unicorn Forever Dances The Light, Allas I'm A Horse Of A Different Color... Dark As The Night. |
Mentalz has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-22-05 02:02 PM.
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... I stand surrounded & hounded with peers I've known for years ... But each day I wander home to my Grandmother's unyeilding tears I shovel my fears so I can inhale the stale poisen from my boy's an' ... Uphold my riddled poise above the clouds of toxic ridden joy's ... ... I choose to ignore family & embrace the falsity that follows me ... ... But my path of abstract fata morgana hallows me till I'm distrait ... One night in mid November I can remember walking through the den ... Stalking my talking guardians in this hovel terminous I reside in ... Upon there departure I see my dying grandfather abeyant in a chair ... Undoubtedly unaware of me gazing seemingly without care ... I see it again, as I've seen before, that puzzle labeled on the table ... ... One look before I go out again to persue my nightly technique ... ... As I get closer and slightly squeeze tightly and drop to my knees ... ... I gazed altogether dazed in that puzzle's keenly lit median ... ... verily what I saw was Lucifer's time peice & me meeting him ... That night I went out hastily, shaken. Was I mistaken, was that Satan? ... I've conquered obstacles with opticle you could never fathom or guess ... Head held high I stride ahead leading a life of alleged moral ambiguity, stress Fluently deciphering all of the Pi Piper's crucial entirety seemingly introduced ... As I perish in torment from the torrent of clues the Jigsaw's Mirage produced. |
This was feedback posted for Mentalz
props good job to both nice ass battle jsut showing love
bumppppppppppppp. |
I can't wait to wait a month for these results. I just realized that rule sucks Mystic. :p
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Voted For: Mystic Chaos
wow this was a very dope battle from the both of you. Mentalz-You had an extremly dope piece, you had nice concept to the topic and good vocab..your emotion was ok not the best ive read in a topical battle...n your imagery was good...you had some good wording.Your creativity was sorta expected for the topic...not much to come wit in my head so good job. 7.5/10 mystic-your verse was unforgettable man, every piece i read from you is dope. You had good vocabulary. your conccept taking on this was creative...didnt see this coming one bit which is what i liked. i was able to keep reading wanting more. your imagery was eccentric lol it was really intact..and your emotion was felt man...well done v/mystic rtf |
unexplained vote kid >(...............................
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actually, thats an explained vote...the only reasin it looks 2 lines is becuz the page is stretched.......
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This was feedback posted for Mystic Chaos
Niggaz....stop with the gay ass poetry...try rappin next time...wannabe shakespeares.
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That votes fine, I mean, c'mon we have 30 days of this shit this has only been 10 minutes. :p
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What do you think Rap is? A form of poetry. All you're reading now is the foundation you build upon homie. |
This was feedback posted for Mentalz
Mentalz you killed this, and Mystic I want a rematch later, cause I straight up know I'm better then you. so look how for a call out bitch. and mentalz better win this cause he deserves it.
props to both though |
This was feedback posted for Mystic Chaos
pollz............................................. ..
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