My Story-new freestyle
yo dis is a freestlye of my story,
ayo.....i entered tha game age fourteen/ wit nuthin in my pocket but a dolla bill and a half full canteen/ waitin outiside da studio hopin to be seen/ hopefully get noticed,and enter on real screen/ all dat happened,two years later/ when i had some shoes,and a fancy lighter/ i wus standin ova there on dat street corna/ when a limo came up to me,and pulled ova/ i dindt know who they were,til an hour lata/ theyd heard i was some kid rockin da mike/ keepin it real flippin his tongue like a dike/ they invited me to lunch/ i was so hungry i quickly started to munch/ i jus finished smokin an ounce,they had a hunch/ so they brought me to tha studio/ where i made my debut on da radio/ rappin at commercial breaks,wit some good flow/ thats the first place,i started to glow/ i was a local star,i soon started to know/ started becoming arrogant so i got kicked off/ started fightin fo my life again and a bit o dough/ my career was movin,way too fricken slow/ i went back,asked for a second chance/ they said if i restarted,theyd hire some kid called lance/ so i got my pen and started to write/ songs this time,that started to bite/ but little by little,my game got better/ i soon got a record deal,by word of letter/ i got sent to long beach where my rhymes got smoother/ my debut cd was ready,down came to support me was my mother/ i didnt sell many copies at first and i got discouraged/ then my pop came along and buil up ma courage/ now im hittin platinum/ doin 50 a week on cardboard or aluminum/ i was famous and could now afford rum/ a day started takin 80 tokes/ not once did i choke/ i aint gon forget anyone dat helped me on dis long road/ yall helped me,by following da code/ theres my newest freestyle,tell me what you think.i dont give a fuck bout hater voters. :gfy: i know some of it blows. |
oh yeah,none of dis is true,i just made it up sayin it was my story
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it was ok...i thought it had basic rhymin...anyways...theres no pretty good or ok in ur polll so ima have to go wit mediocre.
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yes, this WAS mediocre
elevate get a good plot to rap about get some vocab and try to find a dope ryhme scheme thats all I can say |
ok.thx for da feedback
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