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So Simple This Shit Is
Im barely Break-in-tha-Surface, ya Shakin-and-Nervous, ya Life…,
iz Forsaken-and-Worthless, im Take-in-ya-Purpose, with Strife…, Walk tha Path-but-its-Steamin, tha Wrath-of-a-Demon, iz Now…, blood Bath-ya-not-Dreamin, I Laugh-while-ya-Screamin, and Proud…, Ya Remains-will-be-Scorchered, and Painfully-Torch-Herbs, with Flames…, In these Chains-you’ll-be-Tortured, blood Stains-in-tha-Orchard, and Hanged…, So Face-it-im-Deadly, im Anxious-and-Ready, for Death…, With a Weightless-Machete, ya Face-spits-Confetti, and Left…, Ya been Placed-with-tha-Gashes, Embrace-in-with-Axes, and Knives…, So im Lace-in-tha-Tracks-when, im Grace-in-with-Actions, and Vibes…, It Convey-and-it-Reaches, im Slay-in-with-Speeches, so Run…, Got chya Pray-in-for-Jesus, get Frayed-in-to-Pieces, and Strung…, being Scar’d-with-tha-Lessons, of Starve-in-and-Stress-in, tha Blessins…, Im Carve-in-ya-Chest-in, with Larva-Infest-in, Intestines…, Release-in-Aggression, Increase-in-Expression, through Themes…, Im a Killa Priest-of-Profession, In-Feasts-of-Obsessional, Schemes…, Tear ya Raps-in-to-Pieces, Collapse-in-ya-Weak-Spits, on Sight…, Get Smacked-till-ya-Speechless, Attack-in-Physiques-wit, tha Might…, Piercing Lances-through-my-Rivals, No Chance-for-Survival, so Flee…, Rippin Advanced-on-Arrival, so Glance-in-my-Eyes-yo, and See, Ya Deepest Fears-in-Connection, that Steers-in-Direction, of Cells…, Facing Mirrors-of-Reflection, with Tears-in-Complexion, of Hell…, Ya Vision went Black-and-then-Blurred-ta-Grey, Crack-in-ya-Vertebrea, Back…, Now tha Rap-iz-in-Slurred-Delay, Rapid-with-Words-I-Spray, Fact…, See me Grinin-in-Anger, while Spinnin-tha-Chamber, on Pills…, U already Been-in-tha-Danger, Beginnin-ta-Hang-ya, for Thrills…, Im Thrill-in-ta-Snatch-her, i Steal-and-I-Capture, ya Spouse…, Theres no Heal-in-a-Fracture, you’ll be Feel-in-tha-Rapture, no Doubt…, So You can Soak-in-ya-Care-in-Cries, till ya Choken-and-Paralyzed, Broken-and-Sterilize, so Focused-on-Flare-in-Eyes, While im Provoken-a-Pair-of-Lies, with a Rope thas Tearin ya Neck from ya Body if Tied, Mutha Fucca! :nono: |
like a multi circus....i liked it
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gud drop liked all the multis that shit was nice, flow was real tight cos of that and even though ya lines were abit stretched it flowed perfectly to me...
props for this i'd give it a 7.5 cos tha topic wasn't great but everything else made up for it... keep droppin... peace |
wow ok
it easy to see why this guy has 58 wins i liked the multies however u may want to break it up a bit got a bit hard to read at the end now if you'll excuse me i have to go get some eye drops. |
that was a mad multi frenzy!! i was feeling it for sure. the flow was good, lots of colorful images and all that. and obviously the chain of multis was... um... off the chain. keep it up! 7.5/10.
check out my "fulcrum shift" if u got time. peash |
Good use of multies in this peice though i really wasnt feelin the topic
the peice itself is ok, you could of went a bit deeper in exlaining a bit and showing more imagry but other then that pretty good, please get rid of the "-" it makes it look so bad and boring to read. i give this an overal of 6.5/10 pz |
^word i agree... you are dope, but fix your text structure.
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Thanks and yeah
once i get it typed im too fuckin lazy to fix shit thats how i do my open mics Ohhh welll Thanks fo the feed |
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