Love Me...
Long as I'm here, someone will love you I didn't see it clear until I tried to rise above you Almost full grown but I didn't see why Standing in futile tears was a privilege of mine times i cried I didn't pay attention To the sorrow of souls Hollow the cold Borrowed the mold Of angst as it was fed me by Carl Jung and Freud As my supposed destiny Left the stress suppressed in me Depressing me recklessly I only wished to be A little girl Grown in the concrete Amongst bricks and weeds Dicks and trees always overshaddowed me Saw how dad abandoned me Tried to be the child he wished he had in me. You had me All alone Tried to hold me in the way that I needed to be held Tried to make me feel the way I needed to have felt But I die in the tragedy that I'm Daddy's little girl And daddy's little world Ended with him running away With another little girl I used to love the way he Loved me Loved me Hated the way he Loved me. Loved me. He didn't love me. None of me. One of me. I Made daddy leave. All he wanted to do was Love me. Cold off the Zoloft End it all with Tegretol Hold back the Prozac I Don't Feel right. These nights I must fight Burning sands at my feet Making vaporized tears an exercise in futility Humility 20 Years Since I did this to me I needed to end me Because I Remembered me And what I caused Him to do. to me To you. I needed to leave the pharmacy alone. Harmony of moans Heaven's alone And it needed my there. Devil wispered to me And said he'd Lead me there. He didn't care. Devil Daddy didn't care. i Went to the 7-11 left their Sleeping pills bare. I didn't share Didn't know You were there. Surprise visit From a soul Lost of all hope. Mom I Didn't Know You Were There, I Mightn't have done it. I'm sorry, You gave me this life, but I didn't want it. Opiate and hemlock Drool Taste of a fool Chasing the tools Of self destruction. Worse than the pain of death at one's own hand Is hearing the shriek of your mother As you exit this land. Noooo!! Screamed the bullet Into my mother's soul. My body was still warm As my eyes began to close Noooo!! Screamed the happiness As it left from her eyes. Endless whispers of regret As I thwarted her surprise I wanted to go By A window of hope I didn't know if That existed no more. Now I Know The sadness of eternity. Now I know a hell As I stand in these fires. A little girl Once again. Only to live as a ghost Never to hold The hopes of my mother As I watch her Cry her Self to Sleep. I can Only stand And cover My fears. Try not To hear Her cries Damning me. Damn. Me. He only wanted to love me... |
Interesting, I could see alot of depth in this..
Original, & your lines were short but sweet.. Your emotion was the strongest aspect here.. & at certain points I felt your lines.. . Rtf.. . Keep dropping.. |
thanks man....uppin this thing
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this was deep, showed great emotion, good character, good use of wordplay, alliteration. nice vocab damn tis whole piece waz a master piece. very intracate. i like the lines and the structure was first n foremost the best to this poem bieng that there is such a minimum of words that explain so much. very deep.
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wow, you revealed a lot of emotion in this piece.interesting and original structure,and even though your words were layered,it flowed together well. Nice work on this piece, keep it up.
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I am truly impressed actually, I read the entire thing because once you start reading it's like you cannot stop. Such a high amount of pure, powerful emotion you portrayed here combined with imagery and such insightful lines. I love how you kept your vocabulary simple because it really gives the reader the feeling that a little girl wrote it you know. The picture is a nice add-on to visualize the entire thing but your words would've been enough I think. Excellent piece!
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