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Summer's Snow 'Reloaded' Track
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Nice track man. We did this beat too. Wow @ the different style tracks with it. Nice flow, quality is nice. Good intro, and I really liked ya flow throughout. Only comment would be emotion seemed kinda light in some sections, when i felt you mighta come a little harder. Just my opinion - other cats might think its just right. Liked the phone convo styles on the hook. Truth spoken in here, and some real nice lines. "Another new face, is another loose end" <--- fav line right there. You know how it is, like I said on aim. Word.
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^^stanks homie.
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okay okay - fixed the busted link. Here we go again. Upin for you know what.
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HmmmmmmmmmmmI dun like how u came in....I think maybe if you had the yelling at a lower vol an had it fade in...it woulda been stronger.....you opened first verse nicely but it starts too lose emotion as it goes on.....I think u shoulda panned the phone convos to both sides on hook....second verse..come in good...but emotion still aint fitting this beat right....so far lyrically the story is good but the way u delivery don't fit the beat to me..alrite third verse....now u came in on this how u shoulda been spitting whole song....the emotion is a calm intensity an it fits nicely....u start to over do it towards end on it tho....you seemed alil too focused on spitting wit energy an over shot the intensity of this beat......the vocal quality is good....the phone effect on hook isn't too clear couldn't make out what u said too good......I love this beat I had it but jus never spit to it.....overall the song had a good intention...lyrically is was tight you developed story nicely...flow was good too...just your delivery was outta place on this beat...they didn't reall mess at all except for the first few bars of third verse......if u down the intensity an kinda spit more melodic wit a calm intensity it would be so much stronger of a track...stay up.......1
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you came outta nowhere lol... whoa i wasn't feeling how you started that off, you were yelling real hard at the beginning. chorus was aight, the phone line thing was creative but i think it woulda sounded better with the guy singing alone, flow was str8 as well.. having a deep voice on a deep beat, you shouldn't try to be over-emotional on the track, it collides with the original mood of the instrumental. storyline was kept up through-out, was overall a decent track. not bad at all... get at me,
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Tanks for the feedbakc LF and N.
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i dont really like how you came in...it was ok..but coulda been better....
but once the verse actually gets goin....shits nice....flow is good....delivery is good...lyrically im feelin this for real...the hook is dope as shit...im mos def feelin that.... shit i dont know what to tell you to get better lol...shits good man...keep workin |
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how? What was wrong with it? thanks for the vague feedbakc lol. |
^well for me, i think you came in too soon (meaning) you probably shoulda let the beat play a little bit, because you start off very loud, and it's very unexpected for the listeners.. so people wouldn't catch what you said right away.. but hey, it's just a suggestion and my personal opinion.
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word. Yeah, I wouldnt' argue with that. I jsut wish I had recorded it with less input volume so it wouldnt sound liek it was clipping. But stanks for the feed-bizzle. |
beat is dope.......
flow...... consistent overall......like the hook .... first time i peeped you...... pretty solid..... voice takes this where it needs to go...... thats whats up...... like the way you come at the topic...... stay up.... RTF 'ez' |
Chorus is tight, the intro's volume should have been lower, story is coo, your flow was great......overall, I like the beat, your voice fits well, but the singing was what brought the track together.
8.5/10 drop some feedback on this http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200737 |
thanks both of yall. I'm gonna hit those links
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