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combatjoe 04-25-03 07:03 PM

first spit
 
yo this is me spitting at my boy kronox just for fun, what do ya'll think?

my punches leave your bitch ass seeing stars//
cause like a surgeon with parkinsons i'll leave you with scars/
you battling me is like holding a metal pole in a thunderstorm//
cause my flows are deadly like chemical weapons gaseous form//
you think your a gangsta son, god damnit your dutch!//
your flows plus punches plus rhymes plus style, oh dear... doesnt amount to much//
even showing up, its like your trying to fail//
you'll get fucked quicker than your first shower in jail//
damnit son its over, case closed, i'm through//
throwin in the towel is all thats left for you to do//

peace

[edit] yo and before you get to critical this was freestyle not like contemplated written shit [/edit]

Mental God 04-26-03 02:39 AM

lol that was prety funny. needs to be a little longer and could be a little more complex

combatjoe 04-26-03 10:27 AM

uppin for more comments

KroNoX 04-26-03 02:06 PM

hahah Combatjoe my boy :)
You having fun yet ? :)
Let's set up a battle for fun ?

Nice first verse tho
I allready read it on IRC :)

inspire 04-27-03 08:26 AM

lmao... for once someone with some talent comes to rb...

Foe 05-01-03 03:10 PM

It was ight

im da realrapsta 05-08-03 11:13 AM

yo man u shouid be proud of yourself

DaIllistReBel 05-15-03 11:21 PM

If that was truely freestyle, then that was pretty good, nice multis, wish I can see the full verse but "damnit" good start

8-off 05-15-03 11:25 PM

yea good shit for a first time

Rise 05-16-03 01:53 PM

Ummmmm...needs work, kinda Basic....Go see battling 101 for good tips on how to elevate....
Other than that, it was straight for a newbie.....Final Answer


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