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Untraceable vs final
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20 Minimum 40 Maximum No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting This is a topical battle...if you dont understand one or both of our verses...DO NOT VOTE PLEASE, thank you... Topic:Greed
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final has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-15-05 06:49 PM.
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Untraceable has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-15-05 11:04 PM.
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a child,a mere mortal had no voice among his people but had thoughts of power driven deep in his cerebral dreams and goals sweeped in and out of his soul..... ...an imaginative brain he hoped for economic growth would show itself he thought about nothin else then that because of his enviornment no homes, filled with rats he decided to invest big so it was the mafia he joined to gain some cash, killing people was beyond the point he was heartless,with cold veins his brain was insane immoral acts left citizens with murderous claims..... but he earned his paper thats a fact theres no doubt but at a time he had enough it swarmed him in a cloud he wanted more...a industry man, ahead of his time another scarface you could say,sayin the world is mine in his teenages years still earning more then adults becoming a millionare without money his life was at a hault as the years came and went his thoughts became severe became a monster his life was a car unable to steer didnt care about anyone else the green paper was his worries billions of dollars owned and yet he wanted more,he wasnt sturdy his people buried in poverty, they begged him for help but it didnt phase him, they were on a downfall of health they preached,sent a choir to sing for him to share his wealth but he shrugged them off and just told them to help themselves he forgot about his people and that once he was also poor he lost whatever sympothy he had, evil deep in the core now hes an adult, bill gates kinda money was around him it surrounded every move he made like police cars and sirens the past choked his future,stocks plummited,there was tension all his money on wallstreet gone now hes in a second depression lost his cars, jewelry, and wife, hes forced on the street no credit cards and movie stars his life ended in a blink resorts to homeless shelters inside wishing god for luck while outside lying out front,mcdonalds cup askin for a buck he fucked them over and now the maker fucked him too his greedy ways are through now hes infested with boos looks for jobs continously when he sees a poster that states "Janitor wanted",shit not much but its the only job he can take this is his chance now to end his old acts so theyre parted and become a new man, give back and end what he started |
Topic-Greed Once upon an unusual day a man has somehow found his way Relay it back to the day that he had no longer lived in dismay He found himself impeading the spot to become one to lead None could see that his actions deniably in itself was greed Feeding off his intentions he had kept his secret unmentioned His pension grows and leaves his old succesors suspended dreaded the truth to his succesion he just boasted and gloated His selfconfidence coasted causing him to make lies sugar coated His executive poisition grew without preminitions from actions chose Drove himself to new places, on the news he talked in captions closed Facts arose about him and when confronted he froze with confusion Using all he had he made the lie a proven fact from thoughts fusioned His hopes showed contusions of when he pushed himself to the limit Within minutes thoughts hinted away from work, became hard to finish Trying to deminish and win this election to become a producer Abuser of what had brought him succesion, slowly becomes a loser Looser minded people saw that his reign wasnt going to last With passed time he began to realize his dreams started to pass Departed faster than what he expected and wont be resurrected His misdirected intentions started his downfall within seconds And during his succesion he was blinded by his imperfections Which infected the direction of his wrongs into corrections So before you try to score that top notch spot on top of it all Just remember your greed is your seccessor as well as ur downfall .......DONT GET IT DONT VOTE....... :thumbup: |
uppin lets get some votes please dont let this get as slept on as my others lol...
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yeah.....true dont sleep on this......
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Voted For: Untraceable
good topical and this one was hard to make a decision on so I had to go with you becuase I felt the emotion and it gave me a good imagry up in this. the opener-closure was execellent and it was as if I was in it my self. the rhyming was good and this is what got it for u. Once upon an unusual day a man has somehow found his way Relay it back to the day that he had no longer lived in dismay He found himself impeading the spot to become one to lead None could see that his actions deniably in itself was greed Feeding off his intentions he had kept his secret unmentioned His pension grows and leaves his old succesors suspended dreaded the truth to his succesion he just boasted and gloated His selfconfidence coasted causing him to make lies sugar coated His executive poisition grew without preminitions from actions chose Drove himself to new places, on the news he talked in captions closed Facts arose about him and when confronted he froze with confusion 7/10 and hit up on my links peace |
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