jus read!
 

I have both light and dark,prohesy,death and life all imprisoned within/
I can either commit acts of kindness,or massacres of sin/
I can launch the slaughter of civilizations upon civilizations of men/
Im the monster in the closet,im the boogieman,im the wolf in the den/
Devower herds of sheap,haunt your dreams while you rest asleep/
Terror will slice through your heart to your soul,dreadfully deep/
Ill pluck and steal your mind,and forever your will i shall keep/
I will creep,i will lurk in the shadows-gracefull but devilish and unseen/
Protected,sheilded by the negative and ghastly cold sheen/
For i am a hunter,but i am also the hunted-stalked by fait/
Along with other tyrants,and for my annihalation the loom,await/
They soon will rip me limb for limb,and my flesh they will grate/
And i fear it is much to late,to reverse my future so travail/
Not even if i kneeled to God upon the holly fucking grail!/
My mission to dominate is still destined to fail,just fail.../
And i was predetermined to die-death to me is easy to apply/
My ounce golden wings have been corrupted and nolonger i fly/
Nomatter how hard i try,nomatter how much i cry..../
I suppose to society,i'll always be insignificant and gry../
And nommater how much i ask why,no answer is given/
No explanation that states why this is the way i am liven'/
Dark all around,im a soul in need of aid,never to be found/
Im fated to be placed six feet deep in ground,all before 18,its bound/
And i forsee this sickness patiently waiting around the corner/
Im growing closer,closer,warmer-fuck it im there,i best beware/
But allready im easy to scare-God,how is this fair?/
How is this fair?HOW IS THIS FAIR?????????
My demise is here,its closer then close,closer then near/
It has its raised sword,prepared to clear me and my name/
Leave the blade in my chest,and steal all that i got for its claim/
And so the world will forget that i ever came!/
so am i the hunter,or the hunted?murderer or prey?/
Which side am i balanced at on this malicious fray?/
Stalked by demons every day-so am i the hunter?or prey??/
__________________
Am I the future
or
Am I the damned?

nice shit man

nice drop dog had lots of metifors

thanks
uppin for feedback.

uppin this for feedback

good drop.fellin the emotion,like the metas,it had a nice flow 2 it....

drop a vote on dis man......im 4-0 up jus needs closin....
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132300

Very good emotion to it, you was on direct wit the subject, stayed on topic, and your flow was consistent

Very nice drop

it waas nice i was feelin it fix ur structure to get better flow

uppin

This Was Nice For Real But Let Me Drop This Up In Here

This was good, you had some deep lines in there, emotional and vivid piece, i liked your use of metaphors also, i liked your last couple lines...nice way to close out.....good job...keep at it

getting some good feedback from this
anymore

I liked it your rhymes stayed consistent and you kept it even on the topic, didnt switch your style halfway through. nice drop. big ups.

ok i liked everything on here, except one thing
its not just a problem with you, but a lot of people who rite without a beat or just rite down on paper, is that your lines are stretched, urs arent too bad, in my opinion they are tho, i have the opposite problem, i throw down 8 syllable lines lol