! Walter Wall vs Peepers !
 

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plenty of time till verses are due.....gl

A Babie's Dream....

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A parallel world where my future and past collides
Unknown tasks undefined, a guessing game decides
Confessing my dreams, proclaiming any gaining’s
You see I’m stuck in the seams, without trainings
A seed unleashed, a deep beast not yet deceased
Infinite possibilities as opportunity turns a knob greased
My dad pleased, buying blue bed sheets and wallpaper
My mom pleased, guiding the plans to make me safer
My sibling uneasy, sweating the days when he's alone
I drift off into a state where I miss all of the show
Dreaming of a world where my potential is able to grow
Dreaming of a world where equality is on the table to show
The fable is known, my dream is the dream of everyone
Is seems we all want some fun, to put ahead number one
Ourselves, success, carefree with no stress to be blessed
I guessed this was the normal of this world, but I surely jest
When in the womb, I had dreams of something profound
But now I’m ina tomb, dead after a lifetime in bounds
My original dreams unfulfilled because of various means
I was a teenage bombshell screaming for pleasant scenes
Murdered for my beliefs and protests on grief’s and incest
My brief life can only say how ironic was my in-utero dreams
Compared to the the Hamptons, a Compton ghetto only personifies a brutal theme


:thumbup:

Both earned an extension thanks to Walter Wall.

I was getting better but….
The tension in my tendons is still test'n me to break
I should wash up but I cant stop watch'n soaps, it aches
Stated often, Im the same as u and every wide eyed waitress
And Id go eye to eye with God if only he werent faceless
I base this theory on conglomorations of expendages....wasted
Cant take this sobreirty sincerly sorry to be loud but I found it tasteless
Lady liberty's a foreigner, coroner howd she die of a face lift?
Ill take this spacegoat phaze hope nonexistent, wav’n my fists like pistons
Ready and pumped for war, I had an uncle sam who died...I don't miss him
Im not impressed with death and what he'll bless, set in my optimistic mess
Tresspassed back to my mind state after I passed out on the capital steps
Took me down to the station and took the freedom within me carried
Feels as if the world’s reaching its final days, this nightmare’s scary
I’m just a young man with hopes and dreams to be oppression free
But now my girlfriends pregnant and the sight of the sonogram taunts me
His little head fills with Ideas that will one day be silenced
The future disgusts me, my rage springs to life and gets violent
Mother Earth is an air head so I take a needle filled with her thoughts
Air into my veins and my words become my regrets…at a loss
And as I say good-bye to by baby as I struggle to the floor
I hope that he’ll dream, and it'll come true…to never be ignored

upp'n...

VOTE!

damn.............its shitty everythings gettin mad slept on........nyce drops by both, flow almost ruined both also............tha breakdown:

Peepers: rhyme scheme-7.5, flow- 6, story-7, total= 20.5

Walter: rhyme scheme- 8, flow- 6, story-8, total= 22

nyce drops.......peepers yours was deep but wasnt as original of an idea as walters, vote walter, good luck fellaz, peace, 1

im gonna have to disagree with kilo.

Dreaming of a world where my potential is able to grow
Dreaming of a world where equality is on the table to show
The fable is known, my dream is the dream of everyone
Is seems we all want some fun, to put ahead number one


^fav part of peepers

Cant take this sobreirty sincerly sorry to be loud but I found it tasteless
lady liberty looks like a foreigner, coroner howd she die of a face
lift?

^fav part of walter

however, i could not catch most of the flow for walter. peepers' was a little bit choppy here n there, but i could vibe most of it.

v - peepers

^if ure a newbie who couldnt vote in frontlines then shouldnt be able to vote here

..im IN this tournament. status quo.

lmao

shot down walter

good battle, more votes

walter did get sonned there ..

but regardless, first of all i'd like to apoligize for my inactivity around here
it will get better,

but as for this battle i was nothing short of impressed. you each took the
topic from a different viewpoint, and i respected both displays of writing
equally. i think that peepers edged this out because he had more style and
flow in his ryhme scheme. you both did a nice job. thank you for showing .

v. peepers

More votes!?