a few bars
 

ur a lil fiesty redy to fite me i bet rite now u dont like me hahha ur hatred doenst strike me, as unsual or evn uniue, cus i no u n ur beat,
pyschically menatally n emotinally, u need a massage go to her hous en say "lotion me", n if ur luky ul get da rub down evn da rub up
n den dwon agen, n ur lil frend then will let u no when to but da covers over it n den make yo shit bend











rappin naww snappin yea but what hapned?, nun my lips jus keep flappin, they wont stop, dam if only my dhit was hot, id drop da
hottest shit rite on da spot, but my mind wont let me drop so i have to try to co-op, cus if i dont i will end up fukin up extreamly, but then
she can whip cream me, n i can get all dreamy, n den shel see da real me, n leave me, sayin she cant bilieve me, but she can
dieceive me, she cud fuck me but wudn recieve me, she can sieze me, but wit hed she jus CUD NOT please me

uhhhhhh.....dunno what ta say.?!?!?!?!? it started of aight, but then its like u forgot the concept u were talkin bout.went from some1 bein mad at u, ta u talkin a nigga through mackin, ta someshit that wasn't even understandable. I'ont kno what ta say son??????I guess keep at it cuz. aight -1-

i agree with the above statement
although there was a couple lines that kinda stuck out to me

"pyschically menatally n emotinally, u need a massage go to her hous en say "lotion me", "

i dont know u know u started kind tight but then u let it go, u should keep it goin cuz u just dropped a couple levels after the begginin

Work On Ya Vocab

Elevate< Be Creative< Stay On The Topic

And Your Flow Was Kind Of Basic

Work On That Shit

yo man it was 2 different things like i duno it wont let me space it aprt hold up heres da 2 different things so u can undastand it clearly

ur a lil fiesty redy to fite me i bet rite now u dont like me hahha ur hatred doenst strike me, as unsual or evn uniue, cus i no u n ur beat,
pyschically menatally n emotinally, u need a massage go to her hous en say "lotion me", n if ur luky ul get da rub down evn da rub up
n den dwon agen, n ur lil frend then will let u no when to but da covers over it n den make yo shit bend



rappin naww snappin yea but what hapned?, nun my lips jus keep flappin, they wont stop, dam if only my dhit was hot, id drop da
hottest shit rite on da spot, but my mind wont let me drop so i have to try to co-op, cus if i dont i will end up fukin up extreamly, but then
she can whip cream me, n i can get all dreamy, n den shel see da real me, n leave me, sayin she cant bilieve me, but she can
dieceive me, she cud fuck me but wudn recieve me, she can sieze me, but wit hed she jus CUD NOT please me

fuck man this spacin shit is gay as fuck imma send 1 n anoutha

ur a lil fiesty redy to fite me i bet rite now u dont like me hahha ur hatred doenst strike me, as unsual or evn uniue, cus i no u n ur beat,
pyschically menatally n emotinally, u need a massage go to her hous en say "lotion me", n if ur luky ul get da rub down evn da rub up
n den dwon agen, n ur lil frend then will let u no when to but da covers over it n den make yo shit bend

rappin naww snappin yea but what hapned?, nun my lips jus keep flappin, they wont stop, dam if only my dhit was hot, id drop da
hottest shit rite on da spot, but my mind wont let me drop so i have to try to co-op, cus if i dont i will end up fukin up extreamly, but then
she can whip cream me, n i can get all dreamy, n den shel see da real me, n leave me, sayin she cant bilieve me, but she can
dieceive me, she cud fuck me but wudn recieve me, she can sieze me, but wit hed she jus CUD NOT please me

use heap of vocab and elevation and yah structure for yah flow is abit of a let down but kep at it

iite i preciate it

Ice Pcik basicaly siad it all

Elevate, Saty Creative nad On the Topic
Show how oyur lines are speperated nad CLEARLY rhyme.....
make it interesting

1/10

- BC

iite but i did rym!