...::Split Decision::...
 

Faced moments of desolation
For enrollment of veneration

Tradgic times stared him right in the face
It didn't kick in.. But his sites were displaced
These sickenin views couldn't really be real?
Thought on it.. He remained completely still
Summits of punishment are now taking effect
How long will it be till they making it reflect?
Nothin would protect him from whats coming
They'd do worse to him if he started running
So he stood..Pulled down his hood.. Waited
He had split decisions.. Now never debated
What he stated..his actions was going to do
Made his choice..Now the people were through
Fret wasn't subdued.. So they left him to be
It was only now did he rapidly grow insanity
He was left in amity..But his freinds had died
Quickly realised.. That he felt guilty of living
But even now conflicting wasn't inflicting him
He pointed the gun at his head.. so steadily
The bolf bright blood was really dripping dim
He was always well prepared.. died readily

not a bad piece, good vocab, didnt get what it was about so i label it not topical but its four in tha morin and im kinda tired so i might just not have been pyin much attention.other than that nice piece,keep spittin.~1~

Um.. thanx for the feedback

Anymore thats more detailed? :)

Nothin would protect him from whats coming
They'd do worse to him if he started running

graphic twin i like that alot but seams so basic to your usual
So he stood..Pulled down his hood.. Waited
He had split decisions.. Now never debated
What he stated..his actions was going to do
Made his choice..Now the people were through
Fret wasn't subdued..

the complexirty and wordplay im used to i love it

So they left him to be
It was only now did he rapidly grow insanity
He was left in amity..But his freinds had died
Quickly realised.. That he felt guilty of living
But even now conflicting wasn't inflicting him
He pointed the gun at his head.. so steadily
The bolf bright blood was really dripping dim
He was always well prepared.. died readily
tight as hell how from cliamx you keep intesity to the ending.


over alkl real good pop and an enjoyable read.

yeah that was a pretty ill drop for the most part. the vocab was good and so was the rest of ya shit dawg ..good shit keep postin

did nt feel a good enough flow...even with the pauses...i think it woulda been better with more words, rather then lots of pauses,

structure was very tight....this meant that it did nt hav any creativity within the verse, but it was strict and if you did about 2 more words more i woulda felt a real good flow....

the vocab and wordplay was good, could be more complex and original....stayed on topic and told a kinda story but it some how did nt hit me as a tight drop..but showed good abilities...keep em comin