a lil freestyle
 

emcess is gettin shook, like trees n tor-nadoes,
these fe's is gettin hooked, by me like i was ya-yo,
the kid has been a crook, ditch the 5-0 n lay-low,
dont play by the book, i just do what i say-so,
out to make pasos, cases thrown like pe-dro
thrown away like fake-dough, homey i dont fake-so
im real what u take me fo' a mills what im waitin-fo'
fa real, im just waitin on, a deal, if u hatin, just chill,
if im patient, i feel, i will make it, i will, not be taken by satan,
im just sayin,my steel,will be sprayin,neva yield,i aint playin
in a field,youll be layin,if u feel,what im sayin,is not real
im kobe in this rap game,aint no way to stop me
or hold me in this rap game,and u know i blast thangs
when them shots smash brains,all ova,them damn stains
in the sofa,thang in the holster,dont say a damn thang
closer to god if u a target,i let that bang,you ghost n yuh gone
opposin problems get scrapped mane,thrown in the garbage
im the king, im the general, the captain and sargeant
im the illest the realest u dont feel it u real retarded....

Get @ me...wanna be down wit my Crew?

not bad for a freestyle.....had some good wordplay there....uppin on your vocab a little though.....~1~

Open up more but tight wordplay and it flowed really nice!

Didnt no wat to think decent but not wat i really care for!

It was a lil off the top but i like it i guees could use sum work thouhg!

your vocab was ok need to up it a lil but other wise good...