Redemption Song
 

In my life ive seen twisted plots, witness men drop
In the arms of mothers whose heart seize 2 throb
ive seen glory turn sour, seen childs soul devoured
ive seen much, ive seen much

Ive seen project homes wither, ive seen eyes that flicker
with malice, ive seen calices on the hand of others
As they work for there butter, ive seen all of hells clutter
ive seen 2 much, seen 2 much

Ive seen struggle ive seen huddles of friends sisterz an brotherz
round barrles of flames 2 keep warm under shutter, evicted they
sit it out through the winter
Ive seen much, damn 2 much

What ive seen i remember, no memories pleasent, ive seen heaven
come crashing over head our presents, ive seen housing tendents kicked
out now must settle, ive see men struck down from smith & westens yet
in all there remnints they never learn lessons, weres our redemption
our redemption

the first two verses i loved... they fit perfectly together
you had great vocab n good play on words... the way you pieced
together all the words in the first two verses were good... but
then with the 3rd verse it seems you just kept going not really
knowing what to put... it seems a little strained.... as for the last verse
the first line is the best.. and then it seemed to trail away... try to stick
with consistancy.. if you dont feel it just wait...my fav lines

"ive seen all of hells clutter"
"ive seen glory turn sour, seen childs soul devoured"

thanx, uppin