phive vs Young Blaze
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10-12 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 03-14-05 at 01:27 PM Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in. |
phive has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 12:58 PM.
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Young Blaze has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 01:01 PM.
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young blaze, cant rap, and ya too young ta use razor blades,
to shave the peach fuzz off ya ugly face, such a fuckin discrace, instead of slappin yur ass the doctor sprayed ya with mace. My rhymes are born to kill, ill hit ya harder than tyson will, and sit ya fuckin urn on ma window sill. You be the type of nigga who be poppin pills, with the shakes and chills, robbin the tills from good will,(BITCH). Sayin you be rollin with knives and guns? Your a lyin nut sucker who was raised by nuns, sittin in ya back alley playin dice for cinnamon buns. Here I am bitch, better run, cuz now ya done!!! |
phive Bought Heaters To Pratice To Warm THe Bench/
My Slugz Put Holes In His Chest Like A Chain Linked Fence/ Your wack, you might wanna look up to me like an older Brother/ your just not gettin "Props for Ya Work" like Cops UnderCover/ You Only Bringin 'Single bars' What You imitating Nate Dogg Hooks/ My Lines Come With More 'Content' than State Farm Books/(Insurance Company) Kid you'd have to pay to be Reppin A Crew/ This 'Small-Timer' would need "Padded Insoles" to Step in my Shoes/ You K.O. Me? Not Even If I Had My Hands Tied/ You Might As Well Have Been in the 'Tsunami' cuz this battle is A LandSlide/ END..... your always Gettin Fucked wit Text This dudes a Whore / You Couldnt spit HOT SHIT if u gave BlowJobz too tha Human torch/ |
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Voted For: Young Blaze
YOung Blaze- you had a good verse . i jus thought u should work on your structure a bit.. i know that it prolly fit when u typed it up but the boxes are screwy like that.. o ver all you had alot of good and creative punches... i liked your vocab.. .. you could work on your punches a little more but over all you had alot of good aspects in your rhymes... o yea i liked ur state farm line. Phive- you need alot of work... change your structure... don't talk about guns and knifes unless they are used in a metaphor.. some of your stuff was really played and i thought that you could work on your punches and personals alot more. work on your vocab.... go read a page out of a dictionary.. why don't you join the crew "First Floor" their a good elevation crew and they will help you with your spits Vote//Young Blaze RTF links in the sig |
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Voted For: Young Blaze
this verse was alot better more hard hitting punchlines and alot better structure the other verse fell off a little it was consistant enough to win on punchlines this verse was the better one... I was feeling the other verse because of the structue and boring to read... |
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Voted For: Young Blaze
Young Blaze phive Bought Heaters To Pratice To Warm THe Bench/ My Slugz Put Holes In His Chest Like A Chain Linked Fence/ Your wack, you might wanna look up to me like an older Brother/ your just not gettin "Props for Ya Work" like Cops UnderCover/ You Only Bringin 'Single bars' What You imitating Nate Dogg Hooks/ My Lines Come With More 'Content' than State Farm Books/(Insurance Company) Kid you'd have to pay to be Reppin A Crew/ This 'Small-Timer' would need "Padded Insoles" to Step in my Shoes/ You K.O. Me? Not Even If I Had My Hands Tied/ You Might As Well Have Been in the 'Tsunami' cuz this battle is A LandSlide/ END..... your always Gettin Fucked wit Text This dudes a Whore / You Couldnt spit HOT SHIT if u gave BlowJobz too tha Human torch/ HA HA HA lots of hot shit in dat battle like da punches and lyrics u used elevation was nice good structure in a couple lines u tried 2 jam 2 many lyrics in 1 line, but dats iight 8.5/10 Phive young blaze, cant rap, and ya too young ta use razor blades, to shave the peach fuzz off ya ugly face, such a fuckin discrace, instead of slappin yur ass the doctor sprayed ya with mace. My rhymes are born to kill, ill hit ya harder than tyson will, and sit ya fuckin urn on ma window sill. You be the type of nigga who be poppin pills, with the shakes and chills, robbin the tills from good will,(BITCH). Sayin you be rollin with knives and guns? Your a lyin nut sucker who was raised by nuns, sittin in ya back alley playin dice for cinnamon buns. Here I am bitch, better run, cuz now ya done!!! Weak rhymes hard to read structure- work on it some punches not 2 many work on elevatin 7/10 my v/Young Blaze hit up my battle yo post good adequate feedback and a vote 4 da best battler pleaseeeee i hit yall battle up return da favor wit the good feedback and vote so its fair and not cheatin 2 da site YERD! |
This was feedback posted for phive
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