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I slice u with a Machette//Concave yo back//Cuz dis g is Reddy//
pop u up like a hackysack//I spit vicious//At all of u bitches//stop lookin suspicious// And u wont get all of deez disses//I grant u three wishes// so u wont miss this//Cuz i bound 2 get physical//
and lyrical//spittin words at yo dimensional//if it doesnt fit you//then ima split you// like Yoshimistu// And when i kill i wont miss you// Ill reuse u//like a tissue//Put u in da daily obitual//thats a ritual// and if its an issue//then im glad thats the end of u//And u still talkin, i'll put the words back in you// cuz ill leave u shook like a box of shake and bake// like and earthquake that hit to make ya bones break//cuz i come from the "School of Hard Knocks''// makin ya confuse like a fool// thats why i put the "Hard Knocks of School" in you.. Im thorough//And what i tell you stop following guides// u makin me take all your pride// that u thought u had inside//:confused:

rap about what you know, if you never killed some one then why are you rapping about it.... rap about what you know and it will come out alot better.

that whole verse is wack i dont really know how to help you with that.....the only way to help you is to tell you to get off that style. cause rapping about killing someone is always wack.