John Dough Vs. UNIT
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ummm....why you flipping me off?
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good luck
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New to RB and u registered in November? what a gay fellow
And he even shows it with pride..tha faggots rocking yellow I see you(I.C.U)..and ya wackness has over ridden ya body U couldn't get a kick outta Units rhymes..if they were karate! Been meaning to ask u..were u dropped on ya head as a kid? Cuz he's so dumb..I bet even he'll use tha punchline in his sig! Ya bum..Unit hasn't had a crib..ever since tha homo was a baby Then he named his kid Ben..so he could say he had a Mercedes! ....Son..ya finished..tha grip around ya neck gives me blisters ICU prolly thinks he's a pimp..but tha girl in his avy..is his sister! |
here you go
ill rip your "lungs" straight from your chest jus to show who is really breath taken you thought you were gonna win? (lol) you gota be mistaken Bitch u could be enrolled in "ninth grade" and he still wouldn't be "fresh, man" you might be Peter Pan on the mic, but your punches aint goin to Never Land come on dawg..your skillz like "Bruce naked"..cause when you do win itz jus "Bare-LEE" Even if you rap full of "bad words" you couldn't "Curse" me, I stay swift with mine beatin' me?? never happen..like rough sex wit nuns! fuck bets! here's tha outcome u have no chance like gettin' a tan when sun sets just about done!!! Looks like two wins "back to back" like my "Spine Reversed" tha only way i could lose this battle is if I had YOU WRITE MY VERSE! |
Nice prewritten :)
Uppin for explained votes.. If they aren't then they won't count Vote on the better verse..not the post amount |
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fuck you
that aint fuckin prewritten there has not been one vote and you are still bitchn |
Yeah I know it wasn't pre-written
Looks more bitten..shut tha fuck up You biting faggot..not 1 personal? Hmmm??? |
damn...john dough killed this kid with some pretty good punches.....
other than that i unno what else to say... JD..structure was ok...metas were decent...wordplay to.....punches and attempted personals were good....hard hitting and consistant.....12/20 UNIT...YOU have good punches....they not direct tho....too much of bland statements...personals were blah....strcuture can use work....metas werent bad at all....but you gotta a few thigns to work on before you get elevated....wordplay was decent...nice battle here......10/20 vote - JD |
Break Down:
John Dough: You came average..Punches were pare. Flow was on point Vocabulary you lacked. Nothing that caught my eyes in this drop. However You had nice structure which was an easy read. And You had some personals, which were average however you were Will aware that’s what one needs to use to win..Ur best line “ICU prolly thinks he's a pimp..but tha girl in his avy..is his sister!” An ok attemp “I see you(I.C.U)..and ya wackness has over ridden ya body U couldn't get a kick outta Units rhymes..if they were karate!” Ok attempt I.C.U unit: Ok your punches were definitely there however the concepts were Very played. Your flow was their and an ok structure. Kept a somewhat easy Read. Next time use you opponents name in the flow would be a sure victory With good personals. Your fasv line. “ill rip your "lungs" straight from your chest jus to show who is really breath taken” The Bare -Lee line concept was used a lot.. I will give this vote to . John Dough only because I.C.U punch concepts were Played… No hate jus my opinion you both need to stay elevating |
John Dough had some nice punches..good flow...rhymes weren't great tho..karate line was iight..the line dissin his avator was witty, not special tho...mercades line was decent wordplay but coulda been worded better...overall pretty nice verse..
Unit..u had some decent lines...the bruce lee line was pretty funny but that's about the only good line u had..u had some stretched lines too so ur flow was hard to catch....ur closer was really played too....elevate ur flow and try using wittier punches..the bruce lee line is a good start.. vote- Jon Dough hit mine up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114601 |
lets get this finished..
4th uppin..vote..and i'll peep yours |
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