Brethren vs. Rule
 

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Kid you got 3 battles checked into now so your wins brittle
Shouldn'a made you game should'a chocked on the whistle
Indeed your twisted big birds going out of business quick
He went down with ya battle ship like ya head to a dick
Don't jump to conclusions about links in my sig light weight
There to prove i'd beat you topically as well for fuck sakes
Michigan huh? your across the border far from rules zone
Resembles ya talent level princess down away from my throne
I could'a slaughtered you with punches from the eye of death
See the casket open with a mirror now tell me has the L Left?

This your first real battle Rule?! I can tell, just stick to topicals,
Before I put a 6 pack right into your face, like thick abdominals,
Ruler?! Hold on buddy, lemme measure the guillotine,
Before we see your spleen end up all in people's drinks, like Creatine,
Rule a virgin, I'm 'full o queens' the way my cards all royal,
Punch you in the face 21 times, make ya eye 'Black Jack', like gargoyles,
Charbroil you, Rule couldn't 'rip the net' if he was a 'Big Fish',
Rule prays for votes, 5 for me, and he's already on his 'sixth wish',
Meantion me openly 3 times, I'll appear, Death's what you hopin',
Rule has septicly-spoken, Never Heard??? Rules are meant to be broken.

Sorry, I was a little slow

Uppin #1 .

uppen number 2....................................

Kid you got 3 battles checked into now so your wins brittle
Shouldn'a made you game should'a chocked on the whistle
^hmm alright this isn't a bad opener....personal Ok
Indeed your twisted big birds going out of business quick
He went down with ya battle ship like ya head to a dick
^meh this is a sex line try to stay away from those...
Don't jump to conclusions about links in my sig light weight
There to prove i'd beat you topically as well for fuck sakes
^good line......good bar nice nice
Michigan huh? your across the border far from rules zone
Resembles ya talent level princess down away from my throne
^hmm alright this is an OK personal not stingin like it should though
I could'a slaughtered you with punches from the eye of death
See the casket open with a mirror now tell me has the L Left?
^ok this is a gpod personal Punch and you threw in some wordplay nice...


This your first real battle Rule?! I can tell, just stick to topicals,
Before I put a 6 pack right into your face, like thick abdominals,
^ok good meta4 nice personal good opener
Ruler?! Hold on buddy, lemme measure the guillotine,
Before we see your spleen end up all in people's drinks, like Creatine,
^ok this is another Ok meta4...bad play off the name in my opinion
Rule a virgin, I'm 'full o queens' the way my cards all royal,
Punch you in the face 21 times, make ya eye 'Black Jack', like gargoyles,
^hmm alright i didn't like this bar either kind of filler in the first
Charbroil you, Rule couldn't 'rip the net' if he was a 'Big Fish',
Rule prays for votes, 5 for me, and he's already on his 'sixth wish',
^good wordplay i like it punch came a little weak but nice overall
Meantion me openly 3 times, I'll appear, Death's what you hopin',
Rule has septicly-spoken, Never Heard??? Rules are meant to be broken.
^hehe nice good ending good opener and ending....

I think brethen came nice good opener and ending but his middle fell off so just figure out how to fill out your verse a little more brethren and you'll get it......Rule nice consistency with a few creative lines...work on your punches and get rid of some of your sensless profanity....both y'all hit this up plz thanx...

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pretty good battle but goin wit gut instinct

i liked brethen more...liked his opener and closer more

ThA Ce

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Kid you got 3 battles checked into now so your wins brittle
Shouldn'a made you game should'a chocked on the whistle
pretty nice
Indeed your twisted big birds going out of business quick
He went down with ya battle ship like ya head to a dick
played
Don't jump to conclusions about links in my sig light weight
There to prove i'd beat you topically as well for fuck sakes
ok
Michigan huh? your across the border far from rules zone
Resembles ya talent level princess down away from my throne
decent
I could'a slaughtered you with punches from the eye of death
See the casket open with a mirror now tell me has the L Left?
good closer


This your first real battle Rule?! I can tell, just stick to topicals,
Before I put a 6 pack right into your face, like thick abdominals,
decent
Ruler?! Hold on buddy, lemme measure the guillotine,
Before we see your spleen end up all in people's drinks, like Creatine,
blah
Rule a virgin, I'm 'full o queens' the way my cards all royal,
Punch you in the face 21 times, make ya eye 'Black Jack', like gargoyles,
kinda stretched and forced
Charbroil you, Rule couldn't 'rip the net' if he was a 'Big Fish',
Rule prays for votes, 5 for me, and he's already on his 'sixth wish',
decent
Meantion me openly 3 times, I'll appear, Death's what you hopin',
Rule has septicly-spoken, Never Heard??? Rules are meant to be broken.
ok closer

Pretty decent battle..but I have to give it to Rule...He jus ahd a more consistent verse...while Brethren fell off at parts. Rule had some nice punches and personals in there too. Vote=Rule

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RULE

Kid you got 3 battles checked into now so your wins brittle
Shouldn'a made you game should'a chocked on the whistle
ok opener..........wasnt really feelin the second line..
Indeed your twisted big birds going out of business quick
He went down with ya battle ship like ya head to a dick
pretty tight.......feelin the second line......good wordplay.......
Don't jump to conclusions about links in my sig light weight
There to prove i'd beat you topically as well for fuck sakes
decent.......wasnt really a punch........its aight........
Michigan huh? your across the border far from rules zone
Resembles ya talent level princess down away from my throne
ok first line......second line is pretty good.......ok punch.......
I could'a slaughtered you with punches from the eye of death
See the casket open with a mirror now tell me has the L Left?
i liked this closer.........second line is tight.........good punch.......

Conclusion - structure was good.......flow was on target..........vocab was pretty good........multis were ok.......some of the wordplay was tight........some of the punches connected..........ok personal

OVERALL - 6.5/10

BRETHEN

This your first real battle Rule?! I can tell, just stick to topicals,
Before I put a 6 pack right into your face, like thick abdominals,
nice opener........good punch........nice wordplay......good way to start the battle......
Ruler?! Hold on buddy, lemme measure the guillotine,
Before we see your spleen end up all in people's drinks, like Creatine,
no punch.......wordplay and multis are tight........
Rule a virgin, I'm 'full o queens' the way my cards all royal,
Punch you in the face 21 times, make ya eye 'Black Jack', like gargoyles,
good punch.......nice wordplay.........
Charbroil you, Rule couldn't 'rip the net' if he was a 'Big Fish',
Rule prays for votes, 5 for me, and he's already on his 'sixth wish',
once again, good punch........tight wordplay.......
Meantion me openly 3 times, I'll appear, Death's what you hopin',
Rule has septicly-spoken, Never Heard??? Rules are meant to be broken.
pretty ill closer.........while the second line is kinda played its still good.........nice personal.........

CONCLUSION - good structure........flow was on target........vocab was good........multis were pretty good.........nice wordplay........the punches that were there connected well.........tight personals......

OVERALL - 7.5/10

VOTE - BRETHEN

this battle was pretty good.. i think that brethren took this battle based on his wordplay and punchlines both battles were good but i feel like brethren came with better punchlines and rhyme schemes..

vote- brethren

ill explain more.. also i felt like brethren came nicer with rhymes heres a line of his that i liked "This your first real battle Rule?! I can tell, just stick to topicals,
Before I put a 6 pack right into your face, like thick abdominals,"

he had nice personals in his verse mixed with nice punchline. which makes for a winner

now rule i felt like his verse was good.. but brethrens was better becuase he had better wordplay and disses

flow brethren
personals brethren
ohhhhs- brethern
simplicity- Rule
metas- brethen

overall looked like a one sided battle brethren was deliverin punches taht hit with precision.... they didn't cram with wasting fillers kinda like rule did.... rule u must step up an make a lil but more complex verse.... it was good but highly outmatch in this one

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Yeah!....Go Brethren..Go Brethren..Go..Go..Go Brethren!
Nah for real...a very malicious laying here...i don't like the feeding Brethren but looking at the battle and weighing my options i have to still give it to you...you had a few dope Lines.."Your spleen will end up in people's drinks like creatine" I like the multi's...dope punch and overall you really owned this cat.


Rule you been around here long enough to know that every bar has to hit son...you ws going off on tangents and shit and really didn't keep your focus on hitting Brethren with quality punches every line. There was a lot of useless filler and overall I think you need to..Get...That...Dirt off ya flowing! I said..Get ...That ..Dirt Off ya Flowing! Ya shit needs work...real talk son....

Both of yua'll hit up this battle for me...I need it closed.
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