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Nostradamus vs Introspect
Battle Rules:
30-40 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit Topic: "The Mission" Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 11-13-04 at 06:51 AM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
Introspect has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-04 06:22 AM.
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Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-04 06:23 AM.
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-The Mission- my mission?..to uncover some of americas most devined secrets... -Area 51- my mission.. was one in itself to uncover superior secrets with knowledge an stealth area 51 all kinds of speculations for criteria sum say secret test base? others say ros-wel nevada based perfect for a cover up with the casinos drawing attention..equiped with the essentials as i see tha base the gates say prohibited to tribune prevention cant get in without credentials meanwhile i'm being watched on tha mountain top's by the offical's in the herizion wireless gadgets conflicting badges probally manufactured by verizion to no eval the secretive base show's plenty of action as cars roll by in heavily tinted windows just me on this traveled dirt road gripping the camra as the wind blow's suddenly as the sand from the desert floor settles an i smell the eroma of burning metals.? then a turbulence burst of planes taking off sounds louder than a billion screaming kettels.. quickly i reach for the camra to capture this moment so loud i thought the rapture was-here faster than the speed of sound? is true cause when i got tha camra it was gone into the atmosphere now discouraged i pondered how something so secret yet so obvious could be un-furnished with signs of activity the base is well nurished now heat sets in like a 300 degree furnis telescope in hand i head to the mountains in hopes for a better view. suddenly i see a situation guards an troops gathering rapidly i scatter to the mountian top in anticipation then i feel a de ja vu sensation suddenly the sky line lights up in colorful deceration like an explosion the ground beneath me shifts an starts erotion now my face red in inflamation chemical radiation i think? i'm starting laserations i grab the book to write down information 0-400 hours explosion over 65th station is what i wrote with absolutely no hesitaion then proceeded to turn the camra to the sky to prove my story wasnt fabracation from my eyez it looks like a testing session with guards down to intell's attending the lesson as a intelligence oprative i have to ask myself the irellevent question was this milatary testing proceeding if so that explains the documents they were reading also explains why the higher authority's 10 mins before attended that hypothetical meeting but before i could gather another thought..i was bluntly hit.. an woke up ina dark room distrot being relentlusly interagated by for-shadowed men who were very highly trained an taught without any care for my well being i was beatin an continuesly an asked my percise methods my right eye sliced through my left i could see them unknowingly goin through my identity records again! bluntly struck in the head as my hearing grows weary they say "are you listnin" crainium cracked as i fade away from the... mission |
”The Mission” [3:00 AM, Winter In Russia – The Night Begins] I’m feeling slightly tired, inside a crisp icy breeze.. Snow covered tree’s and dim light, provides the scene.. Like a dream, conspiracies no short of a movie script.. Some presidential race gone wrong, another kid.. Got kidnapped, in fact, it was the presidents first born.. No ransom, just a weakness, no more then a pawn.. So morbid and torn, but that’s the world we live in.. Unforgiving, cant listen to emotions on This mission.. I’m wishing things don’t go wrong, kissing the cross.. Saying a little prayer, just a mockery.. My souls lost.. [Silent Infiltration – The Hotel Job] I’m the assassin type, no room for small mistakes.. One bad move they shoot you, noise is all it takes.. So I sneak in smoothly, lock picking the doors.. Pulling my weapon, stepping with tension on wooden floors.. I wouldn’t pause, but I got to find the master bedroom.. Fiber wire chokes a guard, no idea he’d be dead soon.. A dead tomb, describes the sound of the marble hall.. Approaching doors, searching for room number 24.. No fear anymore, picking the lock to move forward.. Sort of awkward, no ties all aspects are sorted.. It’s a simple job, offing two soldiers in their sleep.. Reclaiming a kid, and driving away inside a jeep.. That was until, I walked inside the small apartment.. Faced with a loaded barrel, I was already past them.. Ducked around, jumped and shot a guy in the stomach.. A siren sound echoes as bodies taking a plummet.. I’ve done it, untied the kid and onto the escape.. Climbing through a window then scaling over the gate.. I was almost home free, but my hope was short lived.. Got shot in the throat, wasn’t alone, they shot the kid.. [A world so cold – Feeling remorse] I killed for money, killed for lies, even killed for respect.. But what did that earn me? ...A bullet through the neck.. The world constantly seems as if, we fight to die.. Strive to be alive, but why do we even try.. It’s a brutal reality actually understanding death.. With every breath, realizing that’s only one less.. That’s how it is though, this cold night blurs my vision.. I wished to clean the world and I died on my life’s mission.. (Money and power are nothing more then an addiction) |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Both these verses were well done. Introspect after I read your verse first I was pretty sure you had this on lock. Your imagery was very descriptive and really painted a picture in my mind. Ya couldn't help but ant to be in this topical as no doubt most of us will have found. The only suggestion I have for your's was to try and work on the wordplay a little. You had multis but the flow was a bit choppy. Some of your lines had diffrent parameter which switched up the pace and the rhyming scheme. All in all I'd give this a 7/10 though nicely done. Nos, your mission of choice was very creative at first I was think'n to myself "to bad he didn't have a cool mission like Intro" but you really turened it around. Your rhyming scheme and use of muliti's was straight, it was very methodical straight and to the point. In regards with imagery I think Introspect to you there but in flow, multi's and usage of words you took those catagories. You didn't try to come overly complex, I know you have a deverse dialect of vocabulary and ya held back. Not that it was good or bad, cause ya got your message across. Overall: Intro took this in regards with Imagery, but with Rhyming, Flow, and use of Multi's Nos takes it. |
This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
you actually came weak in this battle.... not like yo to come that weak..........
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Voted For: Nostradamus
Not a doubt Nostradamus took this. If this was a shot at your title Intro, I fel you coulda done a little better. Nos, that verse was amazing, your lines connect so well, and the lyrical content is just amazing. The Layout, makes it much clearer and easier to read, and you need that in Topicals really. Intro, verse was pretty dope, god knows I wouldnt have done better at all, but your lines were really stretched and that didnt work too well because it was hard to read, your lines were good, lyrical content wasn't that great but the idea was dope. You had quite a few spelling mistakes, kinna hard to figure out, anyways, Nos got this, his verse was amazin |
Voted For: Introspect
Introspect: Damn you for this font size... I should vote against you for givin me a damn headache while reading this shit... But it was good, very very descriptive, almost over descriptive but it was a good story. I hate topicals for length but I cant hold it against you, all in all it was nice peice though. Nostra: Much less descriptive, the story was told nonetheless and I think you did a good job as well but introspect got alot deeper into his subject, and painted a much more colorful picture with his novel of a verse... I guess I see where using a small font can help. Nothing you did wrong here, I just think your opponent handled it better here.. Vote Introspect. |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Vote Nos... sorry introspect... your lines were just too damn stretched out, your rhyming didn't make up for it... flow just not great. Nos wasn't great in that respect, but not bad. His openening stanza was also decent, even if the rest was kinda meh. Neither really told a great story though... I think both could have used more imagery and a nicer flow to keep the reader in it. |
This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
checkin the polls not gonna vote on this one, too close...
pz |
Voted For: Introspect
Alright this was close but heres the break down Nos came with more of a direct drop with the diff scenes but ya vocab was missin and in topicals vocab and vision are very important ya vocab is wha held u back on this one Intro ya vocab was on point..the text was kinda 2 small so u could barely read it but u had the imagery and vision there basically told a story and thats wha topicals are about Both good ass drops *tips hat 2 u both* but ima have 2 give this one 2 intro 4 better imagery |
Voted For: Introspect
^^^ Took This for real shit was decent. Very creative story line from both but Intro edged this shit out. Nos dropped decent but wasn't up to his normal self with this drop for some reason. Inrto you surprised me alot hear man. Flow and vocab was good from both. Finaly good to see decent battles again. Pz. |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Both of you were very dope in this topical battle this was a good batlte....but i felt that nostra came weak...intro came slight harder... Nost: yours was very goood.. ince imagery.. it really flowed way mor better than intros.. but i liked how intro came into the concpet more in nbeings of talking about the area51 thing.. it really got me more interested instead of yours... but yours was much moer better when read.. introspect had way better vocab.... but i liked your rghyme sscheme better it wasnt basic.. so it was good.... you went off he topical slightly.. but then i liked how you got strongly too it in the 2nd verse.... it was rel good... Intro: yours siht seemed to catch more of my attention from the area 51 and that rosewl inscident siht... yours was slighlty streched but it was good...hard to read though... but no points off dfor that.. it was more creative but it was good.... the end didnt seem to get much of my attention.... though the beggineing was way better.... vote : nostradamus by a very little score: intro 78/100 Score: Nostra: 82/100 |
Voted For: Nostradamus
alright....this was an okay battle..i've read better drops from both of you....but these were both still good...nostra...i liked your story more...also...you had transitions..and it made it easier to read...the both of you had very good word choice...and very good imagery.......i would say the only important aspect that seperates this topical...is which story i enjoyed most...and that would be Nostras...good battle tho....much respect |
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