Had To Get Him
i'd appreciate feedback please
Caught him thuggin, muggin on tha corner Never saw him before, he was a foreigner Hat low, pants low, but he was straight high Already makin plans to kill him....he must die He gave me a bad vibe, sumthin bout him I ain't like He slowly faced me and and mugged like I ain't gone fight Without movin my lips I told him to state his purpose Of being on my block before I erase him like his life was worthless The blunt in my hand started sendin smoke to my eyes And this nigga had a blunt too, to my surprise He asked me "what kinda shit you smokin?" Wit a mean sneer to invoke fear I just told him that its potent I took a hit of mine,he took a hit of his Realize we looked so alike, you'd think we were twins separated as kids He laughed and said "I only smoke blunts wit high taste and a lil lace To tha point where I'm so high I can't feel my face" He even told me my shit was dipped too Said his dope boi was the same crip too I touched my .45, muttered "Nigga you wildin" He touched his heat too and just started smilin It was like he was readin my thoughts....I took another puff He inhaled too, even with my signature huff Had to let him know"Aiyo, yoiu gotta dip" He barely moved, just said "you gotta lotta lip" That was the last straw, I aimed tha heat, ready to kill He grabbed his at the same time and said"Both our blood gonna spill" I emptied the clip...he shot too Layin in my blood I heard him laugh and say "Nigga I AM YOU!" I died with him right there...and when my family saw the casket A neighbor told them that he saw me arguin and shootin my self ...All because I was faded off a blunt that was dipped in acid so tragic |
lol that was dope homey.....keep it gangsta....keepin comin
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!Propz! Nice Drop' ...!! Dope' Just Like Ecko Said' ...!! Stay Up Boi ^
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fa sho...thank you for the feedback...
nice pics lunatic^^....:D |
FaSho' .. !! Yo' Welcome ..... BabeBoi
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eeeeeeewwwwwww good story fam..........CS.........holla!
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C.S. WHAT???????!!!!!!!!!!!
hot story fam..........killem all homie. ha. s.v. |
hahahaha fas ho you know how we do....anyways keep tha feedbsck coming please...Uno
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I felt it a lot...imagery was nice...flow was near flawless....everything was set up real good...i knew where it was goin...so if you were goin for a suprise than you might wanna work on that...but yea....i also think you should of left the very last part out...because we all kinda got the picture...you should of stopped at "Nigga I am you!!!" that was perfect...but anyways...good drop...keep bangin..It'd be nice if you could check out my latest open mic the title is immortal technique topical...it shouldn't be too hard to find it's close to the top...anyways...regardless if you check it or not....2 fingas one love
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One word.......gay!
Just kidding.......LOL. That shit was pretty tight, but you probably already know that, don't you.......... |
LOL...youre a bastard...uppin!
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damn can I get some more feedback please?
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Uppin
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A jo i liked this..stay up and keep droppin
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yo that shyt was fire good storyline i was def feelin it keep it comin iight.............................
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