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-IllEsTaNgYeL- 04-28-03 04:33 PM

Addicted
 
lemme kno what ya'll think...1!
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im so in love with you, its crazy..the things that i do,
im addicted, like dope pheinz, hittin the pipe,
i know if we were together, everything would be alright,
boy you drive me crazy, wit these “i don’t knows,”
don’t you know by now, when i’m with you, everything goes,
down for each other, doin whatevers clever,
don’t let me down boy, you mean the world to me,
tell me this..am i the only one you see,
you got me trippin over you, like i smoked sum hash,
knowin that this thing could last,
love me now, or not at all, its your choice..it’s your call,
let me know, so our love can begin to sprout and grow,
everytime you call, i always feel myself fall..
into your arms and flourish in your love,
just your voice makes me smile,
and the way you talk to me, drives me wild,
baby, it’s all coming back to me..the way to trust, and the way to love,
when you wisper in my ear, and tell me your inner most thoughts,
it’s so hard to resist from stealing just one kiss,
it’s crazy how i am in love, and you don’t even know it,
“friends” is what we are, could i ever tell you how i really feel,
or keep it inside, hidden in the farthest part of my mind,
i look in the mirror, and practice what i’m gonna say,
but until i finally do, i’ll be waiting for the day,
when i know you feel the same way,
could be forever, could be next week,
but when i do tell you, please be gentile with my heart,
and don’t break it, before we even start,
hopefully i’ll get the courage to confess my love,
and until then, i’ll be wishin on the stars above.

AuQ WuRD 04-29-03 11:56 PM

AwWwWwW......Thankyou Baby.....That Was For Me.....:D

U Need To Make U'r Bars Longer.....Not Criticizing, But Those Short Bars Aren't Sounding The Best.....Throw In Some Imagery.....Some Similes & Metaphors Would Help Good Too...........But I Like This Baby.........It Means Something To Me.....Thankyou......*MwUaH*

I Love You!!!


-OuT-

AuQ WuRD 04-30-03 03:06 PM

Upping For Some Fucking Replies......Reply To My BehBeh's Poem!!!


-OuT-

Bloomquist 05-08-03 12:13 PM

lol ok i will. Nice drop man really showing ure emotions but ya could add some metaphors. Hope you and SyNiKaL doin good.

peace out

shiznit 05-08-03 02:59 PM

it was allright but it seems like somehow other bars dont fit but i think this is very sweet.....deep from the heart...thats all poetry is about...u got all the emotions spread out but it would definitely be much better if u got vocabs in it and similes and metaphors and all that figure of speechityshits....but i liked it...keep droppin em'

good luck with u and synikal

-IllEsTaNgYeL- 05-08-03 03:52 PM

thanks...i appreciate that...


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