club banger(short)
 

Ima soldier ima thug I'm so much more//
rappin white hold da floor it aint a game no more//
And Ima fightin dogg homie, I don't really give a fuck//
I'll have you in a head lock while getting krunk in the club//
I got cash to spare, but aint sparin no crap //
if you know me you know I carry heat on my back//
And by "heat" I dont mean guns I'm just soo hot//
Started flowin at the age of 9 dat oughta putcha in shock//
Im not gonna stop rappin till I fill every gap dat that I'm lackin//
get piad for all the hundreds of the smack that I'n stackin//
yet my skin is almost, as white as crack is//
fact is, I'm black never fucked a white chick (as if)//
Its been known I have more power than god on steriods//
you can say all you want about me you know I'm peranoid// :help: :help: :help:
:huh: :huh: :huh:
$ucce$$

leave some honest feed

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...............................quit sleepin mutha fuckaaaaaaaaaaaaas....................

were da feed????????

uppin......................

^^ What?? I dont get that line...This was iight, but too mainstream type shit...Throw in some more punches and multies...And GET ON AIM!!!!!!!!!!


pz

aight whatever i need more feed

come on quit sleepin

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not enough feed..........quit sleepin

1 person feed wtf????????????

sleepin mutha fuckers

I'm going to give feed quality you gave me.

9/10 good shit
nice punches

LMMFAO dude dont go giving stupid feed without even reading the piece. Now I'm going to rate yours:

Pretty wack to me, its basic stuff, and its too much like mainstream crap like magik said.

this would be aiight to some kids who dont understand the dynamics of rap with a dope ass track to add substance. but its mediocre at best. i mean up your vocab be more creative use a more complex rhyme scheme. dont just type shit up just cuz. write sumthing that has meaning. not the garbage u see most artist to day spit about. be different