[PeeP]:::RIP:::[PeeP]
 

Listen,
I'm Dyin Inside, Who The Fuck Cares I Feel Like I Been Beaten And Robbed..
But I Still Smile Sometimes Cuz I know You Upstairs Now Eatin Wit God..
I Try To Unwind But Pain Is All This Thug Bares And At Night Sleepin Is Hard..
I Got Ya Tatted On My Arm But That Don't Keep These Tears Off My Cheek..
Not Even This Dough In My Palm Consoles Me, Cuz I Need Ya Here In The Streets..
Who Knows Maybe I'm Selfish Fam But I Can't Control These Emotions I'm Feelin..
I Sit Back And Wonder Where The Help Is Cuz My Heart Broke And Not Healin..
Feel Like Foldin Wit The Hand I Was Dealt Kid Starin Wit No Hope At The Ceilin..
And I Try To Write When Depressed But It's Like I Choke When I Breathe..
Walkin Round Wit A Knife In My Chest But Still Hold Ya Down Bold On My Sleeve..
Moms Tellin Me Have Faith, Grow And Believe, I Just Pray You Doin Good Homie..
Go Cuz You Freed But We Gon Keep Smokin This Weed Cuz The Hood Lonely..


Aight, Leave Ya Thoughts. One.

nice dowg....

And I Try To Write When Depressed But It's Like I Choke When I Breathe..
Walkin Round Wit A Knife In My Chest But Still Hold Ya Down Bold On My Sleeve..

them my fav lines of tha whole thing...

RIP to ya homie... stay strong playa...

i just wasnt feelin it..u needed more flow and better rhymes the message it delivered was good but the style u did it in was weak iight elevate...

Thanx Misfound...

@Insane, I don't mind criticism but you said I need better flow and better rhymes?? Maybe it's you.. Cause when I spit it the flow is crazy. Better rhymes:

I'm Dyin Inside, Who The Fuck Cares I Feel Like I Been Beaten And Robbed..
But I Still Smile Sometimes Cuz I know You Upstairs Now Eatin Wit God..

Moms Tellin Me Have Faith, Grow And Believe, I Just Pray You Doin Good Homie..
Go Cuz You Freed But We Gon Keep Smokin This Weed Cuz The Hood Lonely..

^^Maybe now that you see the rhyme scheme, it'll flow better for ya. Anyway, thanx for the feedback and takin the time to read my shit. One.

Uppin... Yall love to sleep, this shit is hot.. Wake up!