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J. Luth 09-10-08 04:28 PM

Nature's Calling
 
Nature's Calling

‘Cross the shining sea
A tall tower stood trembling in time
Masked in a shade of autumn
Her majesty’s defense in line
Rain reduced it to crumbling
And alas it did collapse
Escaping it’s cluttered cage
To relieve himself at last

Also Known. 09-10-08 04:43 PM

Is that a poem about taking a shit?

J. Luth 09-10-08 04:48 PM

^ROFL nahh. You def closest one to get it tho man.

Read it again and tell me what you think.

First line hints location
Third line hints color
Fourth line hints location and possibly place ~_~

then last line hints that it's a person

tell me what you think after that. thanks for the input tho man. It's good to see others' interpretation of your work.

this my first poem due for my creative writing class

09-10-08 04:56 PM

Rain is a poor excuse. Your explanation was terrible.

The poem is best without an explanation, & the last two lines were boring and bland. I tried to piece it all together but it was kinda meh at the end. Sorry.

However I'm sure this qualifies as a shortly above average poem, depending on your creative writing class, afterall, people have taste for even the shortest and quickest poems. This was short, yet medium to slow.

Oh, and you had absolutely no tone.

peace.

J. Luth 09-10-08 04:59 PM

lol it's cool to me. This is my first poem, I don't expect to be shakespeare after my first attempt at a poem.

and i made it to be a poem about a guard in buckingham palace. Who tried fighting the urge to go pee, but finally gave in. ~_~

In-Vision 09-10-08 05:01 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by 2v
Rain is a poor excuse. Your explanation was terrible.

The poem is best without an explanation, & the last two lines were boring and bland. I tried to piece it all together but it was kinda meh at the end. Sorry.

However I'm sure this qualifies as a shortly above average poem, depending on your creative writing class, afterall, people have taste for even the shortest and quickest poems. This was short, yet medium to slow.

Oh, and you had absolutely no tone.

peace.


lmao @ the idea of you being a reasonable judge of good poetry.

for what this was, it was good. If it isn't...then all of my college professors have lied to me about everything and my degree will be a lot less valuable then you're godly ammount of knowledge of written art that you've aquired from spending so much time on a computer...and so little time in a classroom where those kinds of things are taught....i bet you could start a stem-cell lab in your basement if you could find the "how to" guide on wikipedia...couldn't you?


you already know how i feel sp....keep up...shit is good.

09-10-08 05:09 PM

If your college professors weren't lying then they should have told you that poetry is subjective and with or without a point, the professor is to decide what he or she truly expects from the poetry. Some expect a large vocabulary with almost no sense behind the words.

With that said, poetry is subjective, and that makes every reader's opinion viable, while at the same time, every poem is also good.

so yeah, shit is good, good is good, bad is good, complex is good, up, down, satan, god, black, white, is all good, in Poetry.


but hehhhhhh reasonable judge lots of time on the computer

In-Vision 09-10-08 05:20 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by 2v
If your college professors weren't lying then they should have told you that poetry is subjective and with or without a point, the professor is to decide what he or she truly expects from the poetry. Some expect a large vocabulary with almost no sense behind the words.

With that said, poetry is subjective, and that makes every reader's opinion viable, while at the same time, every poem is also good.

so yeah, shit is good, good is good, bad is good, complex is good, up, down, satan, god, black, white, is all good, in Poetry.


but hehhhhhh reasonable judge lots of time on the computer



lmao....not only do you not know what you're talking about when it comes to what professors expect out of anything...but you contradict yourself by going out of your way to make a piece look like it's slightly above average...and then turn around and say that it's completely subjective...even though you're opinion wasn't made to appear like it was your opinion..it was made to look like it was a fact....just like 99% of the bullshit you post.

If you can agree that your opinion is just as subjective as anyone elses...then take the fucking time to say..."this is just how i feel...because i don't speak for anyone...and frankly...don't have a very good understanding of this sort of thing."

because you don't. even though you would like to think you do, and like others to think the same...you really don't.

09-10-08 05:22 PM

Naw dude suck my fucking cock because you're wrong.

You have this shit embedded in your head about me that makes you automatically assume shit about the things I post. Well, let it drift away, you have nut latching spirits inside. Let them seep out of your soul you faggot cunt.

In-Vision 09-10-08 05:29 PM

lol...explain to me why just about everyone agrees then? explain to me why alllll these people who arn't highschool dropouts and are actually furthering their education via universities....and not via the internet...seem to all share the same opinion about you?

Cola 09-10-08 05:58 PM

lol, i've learned much much more out of school than i ever did while attending school

School was just one of those places that gave you idea's to take to the next level. Like complex ideas, that you dont really ever ask yourself.

If anything, college is an experience. One that allows you to find who you are goign to be.

But, everyones different

Adam 09-10-08 06:01 PM

It's blah, 'bout average.

J. Luth 09-10-08 06:23 PM

LOL I like how within 2 hours, I get more replies than any other poetry thread in this forum. :love: the Kid

Adam 09-10-08 07:16 PM

Generally that happens when you spam something, it's not because it's immaculate poetry.

J. Luth 09-10-08 07:42 PM

aww, thanks for helping the cause adam. :love: I love you too b! Let me tickle your tummy and serve you breakfast in bed :hump:


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