Savior
 

(This Piece Is Different From My Usual Style. Its A Personal Verse I Wrote To God. No Cursing...No Drugs...No Violence. From Me To Him. Give Me Some Feedback Please.)


(Over Jay Z's "Blueprint" Beat)
Dear Lord
Please Forgive Me For My Sins
The Hearts Of Men Are Often Flawed
Thats Why Im Lost Again
So Help Me Find My Way
To Break These Chains And Make A Change
To Drain The Rain On Flames That Blaze
And Gain A Greater Day
My Smiles Have Been Forgotten Since I Lost My Grin
My Closest Friends Are The Tears That Drop Off My Chin
From Stocked Thoughts Locked Within
Unlock This Box And Drop This Grim
I Watch In Awe With Astonishment
'cuz When The Hardest Hits
Your My Jaw Of Brick
That Sits Strong But Never Chips
Like Rocks Tossed Or Even Skipped
I've Given All That I Got To Give
Before I Fall You Give Me Grip
Offer Oxygen When Im Out Of Wind
Your My Light, My Sight, My Vision
When The Darkness Hits
You Never Let Me Down
Never Let Me Down
Gravities Opposite
Who Saw An Accomplishment
Instead Of A Tarnished Kid
From The Stockton Strip
With An Awkward Sense
To Pick The Hardest When An Honest Mans Options Split
Gone But Non Forget.......


(I Decided To Cut It Off There. Let Me Know Your Thoughts On It.)
......Supervillain

that was dope. i cant wait to hear your real style.

Thanks For The Input My Friend. I Dig Your Shit Too, For Real. Check Out My Other Verses And Let Me Know What You Think. Holla At Ya Boy.

Supervillain............of The Crhyme Sindicate

yo supervillain that was some dope ass shit. like demolish said cant wait to hear your shit.

Much Love Chekmate. I'll Keep An Eye Out For Your Work.

.........s.v. The Tyrant

ayo that was some nice shit dawg. you had some good word play.
keep it up.

ayo check chekmate's shit. trust me its dope try to leave some feedback for him.
peace

can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.

s.v.

can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.

s.v.

can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.

s.v.

that was fuckin sick, the wordplay was heavy im lookin out for your next piece.

hold it

DATS MY BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was the kinda shit you should be droppin all the time, That was some hot shit! Bring me some more, write this well in your battles.......
~Dope~

i agree wit clorox and um enygma..ur shit wuz so damn ill...u kno i'm ya gurl that supports ya movement..but even if i wuz ur worst enemy i wud hafta give u props on that one...wow...um i am gonna print that..i'll give u props for it thooo ma nig...ill shit..unbelievable

thats blazin shit man

and good topic to

great rhyme scheme holla!!!!!!!