letter to god
 

Dear God, it’s me ya broken child,
And I know that we haven’t spoken in a while,
But it’s been even longer since I’ved choked on a smile,
Hopin maybe I’ll get to remember what a grin is like,
I’ve been the type with way too much sin in life,
But that’s a given aight, So where you been at night,
Ain’t you seen what these kids livin like?
And it’s more than that, theres this war in Iraq,
Teens in the corps is strapped,
They say it’s best to fight but I ain’t sure of that,
So another flagged draped casket is sent to Washington,
And another mother is forced to watch again,
Oh, You already heard of them,WHY AIN'T YOU STOP IT THEN?
And just the other day I lost a friend, to the struggle,
Why show a way out when they can show you a muzzle,
And I hate to burst ya bubble but this world is trouble,
You need to send ya son here on the double, On my knees I crumble,
over the words I stumble, please God I see the tunnel,

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Nice...........

dat was good-that was ok, u did good dawg

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its coo but foe you kept it simple don't be afraid to unleash shit and put it out you got the talent I know you can do it. rtf in "I Aint Fuckin Wit Cha"

THESE LINES HERE WERE GOOD MULTI'S BEST THE REST FELL WAY BELOW AVERAGE IN MY OPINION

Dear God, it’s me ya broken child,
And I know that we haven’t spoken in a while,
But it’s been even longer since I’ved choked on a smi

meh @ this,
it was aight here

this was pretty good, emotion was good, vocab was ok, multies were ok also, overall good read, keep it up man