Jay 3rd Ft Jordan - One Of Them Days
 

iight this is this girls first track..she's 14 and i think she gonna come up big..so i'm doin a few tracks with her to help her out..its my g/f's friends sister..yea lol..
song is about missing the ones that passed, i lost my mom by a drunk driver hit and run day before my b-day..so a lot of my songs are related for other people i like to dedicate it to them so they have somethin to vibe to so let me kno what yall think

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=408535

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239278
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239290

just uppin the song

Aight..Definitly got that emotional R&B feel..

The beat..is definitly nice..

The female voice, you can tell is definitly young, but she can carry a note, but definitly needs more confidence.

The emotion by the first lyricist is felt, and the flow is on-point mostly..and the lyrics are good.

The chorus, is well put together..

Second verse is exactly the same as the first, flow wise and emotional wise..

The transition by the female vocalist was a nice touch to this song..definitly felt that

Third verse, was good as well, same basic flow as the first two and the emotion was definitly there.

This is most definitly an emotional and close heart hiting track, and I could tell it means a lot to you. There were some touch ups that could've been made throughout this track, flow, lyrically, and quality wise, but overall nice track man..keep dropping some hot tracks.

thanx for the love man, and when i get time i think i might hit up that collab.. ithink our style will mix nice on a nice dark beat

No doubt, I was thinking the same thing. I just updated that collaboration thread, with my full first verse. Let me know what's good..

Stay up

Aiight this beat sound amatuer, but good good vibe

intro nice..

yea, singer sound young, but she def got lot of potential. Overall it was pretty coo.

First verse, flow pretty nice. Like the emotion you putting into it. Can tell you really putting your all to it. flow went off on some lines, not too much tho. But uhh lyrics nice.

hook pretty catchy, lol you singin' adlib? lool haha


second verse, word @ "when i'm feelin' angered I use the mic as a weapon". singer part on verse was def good idea. mixin' better could help her sound out soo much. sound too hollow, if that makes sense.

third verse, flow started weird i thought, but nice multi's. Flow got better as it go on. lol you sound like Tonyself a bit. pronounciation could be tad bit better, overall nice verse too.

hook again, really growing on me man. liked it. mixin' was only thing bad on it.

Overall, man really ncie track. Real nice emotional track. Def was feelin' this man. first time hearing you too. Nice shit man. f'real 8.8/10


EZ

thanx for the love man, will work on the mixen a lil more..

uppin, just wanna get a few more comments

thanx for the love man, i have plenty of tracks for these type of feeings, just not uploaded..but i do have more commin.. i'll keep ya posted with that.. makes me feel better when people relate to it and feel it..