AITZ vs Peace Back
 

Battle Rules:

15-20 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


our last was demolished...becuase of the server crashing..so im re setting it

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-15-05 at 05:51 PM

Must drop verse in 130 minutes after check in.

AITZ has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-15-05 05:52 AM.

i merk the best n destroy the worst//
peace back wants to test, but he'll be let all hurt//
dont step like god, u slower then a turtle//
ugly like frogs, failed 10th grade 4 hurdles//
u bust ur balls tryin to drive me up walls//
nothing but stalls, ur punch's are weak n they fall//
i control this "peace" since way "back"//(1)
go find the elbow "greese"...u need it, verse was slack//
picture this cat, attackin a police officer..//
here comes a bat, round yo head like violent protesters//
u need some protection steppin to this MC//
no effection i kill anything that breaths on me//
u talk about gays more then u drop punch's//
i bet ur known to lay, and take the cock in lunch's//(1)
im done wit this poser, ill take another win...place it on my holster//
u can go n fry in a toaster, like bread felt 4 to long....dont mess wit this east coaster!!
(1) his name is Peace Back...lol
(2) iv read a battle from him...he was full into talkin bout cocks when he was dissin the other cat...and didnt drop many punchlines...just personals..and lunch's..means lunch breaks...as in school breaks..

Peace Back has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-15-05 04:40 PM.

As i put you in handcuffs and read you your rights,
you're getting taken away for your recent rap-fights
put on this jumpsuit, meet your cell-mate Bubba
Until you face the judge, he'll be your full-time luva
you've been briefed on the court case,.. today is the date,
you'll be standing on trial, and meeting your fate
All the charges brought against you are for battling Peace
"he's* not dangerous, judge, you can take off his leash"
The people on this (web)site will be the prosecution
you have no defense team, and you're facin' execution
The judge is calling "order" and he's slammin the gavel
As your next loss, and my win begin to unravel
You try to hold back a tear, but it rolls down your cheek
As the jury deliberates for under a week
Now the room goes silent for the verdict their supplyin
They say AITZ found guilty for self-glorifyin

*clarifying that it is me telling the judge what's in quotes about "he" (AITZ)

Voted For: Peace Back

weak ass battle here...

Both need major elevation, but PB gets the vote for actually throwing a few punches.

how the...................................uppin 4 votes ppl............................

Voted For: AITZ

As i put you in handcuffs and read you your rights,
you're getting taken away for your recent rap-fights
^^wtf? is this a battle verse or a short story? lol :P
put on this jumpsuit, meet your cell-mate Bubba
Until you face the judge, he'll be your full-time luva
^^lol, no, gay jokes are well...gay
you've been briefed on the court case,.. today is the date,
you'll be standing on trial, and meeting your fate
^^lol stop wasting time telling stories and diss him!
All the charges brought against you are for battling Peace
"he's* not dangerous, judge, you can take off his leash"
^^filler
The people on this (web)site will be the prosecution
you have no defense team, and you're facin' execution
^^filler
The judge is calling "order" and he's slammin the gavel
As your next loss, and my win begin to unravel
You try to hold back a tear, but it rolls down your cheek
As the jury deliberates for under a week
Now the room goes silent for the verdict their supplyin
They say AITZ found guilty for self-glorifyin
^^weak diss at the end and the rest was filler

Man are you SURE this wasn't meant to go in the short stories forum or something, cos it doesn't really qualify as a battle verse?

vs.

i merk the best n destroy the worst//
peace back wants to test, but he'll be let all hurt//
^^no, threats
dont step like god, u slower then a turtle//
ugly like frogs, failed 10th grade 4 hurdles//
^^weak
u bust ur balls tryin to drive me up walls//
nothing but stalls, ur punch's are weak n they fall//
^^too simple
i control this "peace" since way "back"//(1)
go find the elbow "greese"...u need it, verse was slack//
^^okish
picture this cat, attackin a police officer..//
here comes a bat, round yo head like violent protesters//
^^no, just statements
u need some protection steppin to this MC//
no effection i kill anything that breaths on me//
^^no, threats
u talk about gays more then u drop punch's//
i bet ur known to lay, and take the cock in lunch's//(1)
^^1st line true, 2nd line is bloody gay
im done wit this poser, ill take another win...place it on my holster//
u can go n fry in a toaster, like bread felt 4 to long....dont mess wit this east coaster!!
^^wtf? no, filler
(1) his name is Peace Back...lol
(2) iv read a battle from him...he was full into talkin bout cocks when he was dissin the other cat...and didnt drop many punchlines...just personals..and lunch's..means lunch breaks...as in school breaks..

I can tell you're both new to this. You both have mostly filler. Forget all that, and start dissing! AITZ wins cos his opponent submitted a short story instead of a battle verse, lmao! :D no hate, I found this entertaining :D

oh yeah hit a link in my sig, thanks,

Voted For: AITZ

AIGHT YOU DIDNT REALLY HIT THAT HARD BUT YOU HIT AND YOUR FLOW WAS BETTER

auight this was not a good battle but you guys both have poteintial,

peace, you should have not tried to make your verse about a story that was kinda wack and you should have hit alot harder and you should go rea some battles before you battle again you have good consepts but your verse was just boring your flow wasnt keeping me on track..sorry

A, you wss not that good eithe rbut alot better than him you only reaLLY wint his becuase your verse flowed better than him your more of an audio rapper becuase your verse was written like it should have been recored...but yeah you won

vote=AITZ

RTF PLEASE
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207228

lol...cheers on the vote dude....audio rapper???...hows that..iv never done an audio battle b4!

ill rtf..if i havent on that battle

Voted For: Peace Back

Im not gonna take time to break it down bar for bar but heres my feedback to both

PeaceBack-I liked how you kinda had a theme to your drop and you stayed constant with it....nice vocabulary....good punches, a pretty nice drop keep it up

AITZ-First off, don't use those //'s please you make the whole site look retarded....the best thing you had goin for you was "u talk about gays more then u drop punch's//
i bet ur known to lay, and take the cock in lunch's//" besides that your shit was real basic and wack ass punches, you need to elevate big time man

Vote-Peace Back for comin much harder with better structure, vocab, and punches

Voted For: AITZ

IP:


i merk the best n destroy the worst//
peace back wants to test, but he'll be let all hurt//
dont step like god, u slower then a turtle//
ugly like frogs, failed 10th grade 4 hurdles//
u bust ur balls tryin to drive me up walls//
nothing but stalls, ur punch's are weak n they fall//
i control this "peace" since way "back"//(1)
go find the elbow "greese"...u need it, verse was slack//
picture this cat, attackin a police officer..//
here comes a bat, round yo head like violent protesters//
u need some protection steppin to this MC//
no effection i kill anything that breaths on me//
u talk about gays more then u drop punch's//
i bet ur known to lay, and take the cock in lunch's//(1)
im done wit this poser, ill take another win...place it on my holster//
u can go n fry in a toaster, like bread felt 4 to long....dont mess wit this east coaster!!

^^Felt ur punches hit harder, though ur structure was whack and had no flow...u beat him wit punches and personals

As i put you in handcuffs and read you your rights,
you're getting taken away for your recent rap-fights
put on this jumpsuit, meet your cell-mate Bubba
Until you face the judge, he'll be your full-time luva
you've been briefed on the court case,.. today is the date,
you'll be standing on trial, and meeting your fate
All the charges brought against you are for battling Peace
"he's* not dangerous, judge, you can take off his leash"
The people on this (web)site will be the prosecution
you have no defense team, and you're facin' execution
The judge is calling "order" and he's slammin the gavel
As your next loss, and my win begin to unravel
You try to hold back a tear, but it rolls down your cheek
As the jury deliberates for under a week
Now the room goes silent for the verdict their supplyin
They say AITZ found guilty for self-glorifyin

felt ur verse was sorta played and childish dont feel u attacked ur opponent at alll........

aiight cheers............................uppin 4 another vote in this bitch...........................................we rd