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Potential Vs SpuL
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Verses due by Wednesday Votes FINSH on Friday. 10-20 lines. Agree on an amount. 3-0 = KO Up to 5 votes . . . Votes from inside the league only meaning if you were in the league before or you got knocked out also votes allowed on the member safety list |
yea, I'm down wit 3-0 KO. But they need to be 3 acceptable votes.
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im down wit dat too....umm how bout 10 lines? is dat koo wit you?...checkin in......
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I already did 20 lines, so I'm spittibn' 20 lines. 10 lines is too short
Man, you're so wack and dim-witted, this will be a breeze Someone pilfered yo crack, you then reported it to police You declare you got Potential, but you're still "New to RB" Swipe away the "to R", and you match the skill of a NewBie To me you are a joke, a nobody, a fuckin' coward Stick a battery up yo ass, and you still wouldn't have the power Havin' to battle me, is your misfortune… your misery Jus like my Social Stuides book, man, you're history Man, you're only 1-0. You got a lot to fuckin' learn Jus like Usher, man. I'm gonna let this trouncin' "Burn" Your verses are so vile, they make me feel the need to puke If you acquire any votes, they'll be hate, prolly from E-Looch My verses will 'harass' you… they'll make you feel like turd You are so brainless, you thought 'harass' was two words You even asked your mom, why the sky decides to rain rice So stupid at computers too, had readers go through the pain twice Can't spell your own title right, man, stop commitin' sins Your mom put you next to crap, and yelled, "Shit, it's TWINS!" So wack are you, you prolly got hit by the wack stick, gee Man, fuck the stick… you got hit by the whole tree! |
MoonlitStriker: #Revised is postin for me cuz mah internet is messed...good luck Spul....
Potential's Verse Spul’s "past his prime" but the odds are still "stacked against ya favor #"Concentratin" on ya rhymes har enough....votin on ya verse? "mandatory labor" Seeing his biggest wins, they're nothin more den a "creative lie" "Slept on his verse" so I'll "take a nap" and close dis "shut-eye"(shuteye) Damn, you shocked the audience already?...shiet you past the first round Take out ya "chords" and "strummed" but the crowd still neva made-a-sound Ya career aint "takin off" cuz if the mic was "fuel" you'd never "rocket" (rock-it)* He could neva "screw a dime" cuz closest he got was gettin "juice" from 2 quarters "eye socket" "Thristin for fame" den ya rhymes mus be "rehab" cuz dey dun wanna be "pub-lick"(public)** Put on his "game face" but labels couldn’t "swallow" what’s too hard to stomach He’s "past his prime" so this time I’ma "sit com" (sit calm) and watch what he say Cuz as soon as he said "I wont be back a while" we all started counting the days Style has no "finesse" so since he kan’t "spit bullets" he’s got "useless techs" (niques) Raps a naval war, and since we styll waitin for his departure his tidal(title) cud neva shipwreck He'll always be "in my shadow" the way his rhymes always "behind my back" If his verse was the "highlyte" of this tourney den the reaplays are gonna be wack Heard you were good but like "anti-drug commercials" u teach us to "never believe the hype" *** Best support was frum ya parents....they peeped ya work den told you to neva drop-a-type He rite my double post was pain.......had to show the crowd how I merked that cat double If this tourneys a game of "sorry" den me "bumpin" Soul wasnt even worth the trouble *2 quarters is 50 cents......im tryin ta say hes seien thru 50’s eyes.....50 is of course a bad lyricist... **dun get dun vote...game face=rap game........figure it out or dun vote ***parents dun wan him on da site nymore dun get ny of it dun vote :nono: ....good luck spul :thumbup: |
Erm Spul got this easily Revise came with stretched lines & the screw a dame line was wwwwwwaack dont use that again was that even 20 lines? & dont ever explain you verses that is wack SPUL came decent he had some punches althought i thought the NEw to rb line was gay,, he did come with better flow and personas even thought potential has no name.
V/Spul. |
Aight... Spul the first 6 lines were basically ass and even the rest wasn't great. The structure was pretty decent, the links were useless, but the wordplay definetely picked up a bit towards the end, where you started to be decent. Just work on your set ups to and wording your punches better to make them hit harder.
Potential.. what can I say, you got potential. However, stop explaining your punches, work on your structure, and stop using punctuation and " " on your verses to pretend like the punches are better. It makes it herbish. Let's just take for example one line and see what the problem is: " He’s "past his prime" so this time I’ma "sit com" (sit calm) and watch what he say" Ok, so you sit calm and he's past his prime. The wordplay is, theoretically, relating "prime" and "sit com." The problem is, the wordplay doesn't tie into your punch really, because there's nothing specific about a sit com that means its past his prime. In order for wordplay to be good, you have to match it with your punch, and the punch has to be good. Anyway, work on your structure (shorten your lines), work on setting up your punches and wording them better. You got nice concepts, just get them to translate into punches, or drop them if they don't work. v/ spul |
ight..spul, i don't know bout shadow but forealz....urs waz pretty good..not ur best..but still good...you had punches about da whole way and thats wut made u win basicly...u didn't takl about your self at all....thats a good thing..i learned that from a topical i did..and im bout to loose cuz of dat shyt to a freaken newb...sucks huh..lolz...
potential...im not sure if you even have any potential at all anymore...na j/p...ur ight..but im still betta lol...ur shyt was also pretty streched, and forealz, hella borin...ugotta think of better punches dawg cuz those were pretty simple...and maybe a few good personals... v/ spul |
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