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wiley d 09-12-07 12:07 PM

trying to innovate myself-doing me
 
this life wasn’t meant for me I just got caught in it,
my heart like my mind cause I got lost in it,
now im on track in the right lane,
head might strain ,
feeling migranes
i dont feel the same
so you dont have to see my pain
livin easy cause lifes easy
fuck a gangsta im just tryin to be me
fuck tryin to be g
my hair still beedy
but now my heart not bleeding
cause im the real me
fuck worrying about a dude tryin to kill me
fuck a rockstar but they probably the ones that feel me
u cant control life so whats the point of a planner
people look up for an answer,
we all goin to die its just faster if you have cancer
i talk proper cause they dont expect me to have manners
cause im a pants sagger and i bang wit niggas that where bandanas
streets so hot our face pill like bananas
kids killed the streets is a hazard
i was born in this world a bastard
it takes steps to be the best feel like im goin up a ladder


im on my fly shit so im soreing
you get caught sleepin you get killed while your snoring
you only commit crimes if its boring
my paperchase is the only reason i wake up in the morning
money is the only reason i wake up
fuck the world with two fingers straight up
like food you get ate up
im compared to an obese person the way i got my weight up
life dont wait up
it keeps movin
loves ones you keep loosin
niggas keep shootin
and its funny how these bitches do
im not even goin to mention dudes
they not a product of there environment there a product of what they listen to
like sharpening a pencil yall not gettin the point that im gettin to


http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183244
http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183245

Young Fear 09-13-07 08:26 AM

straight piece. You should work on lengthining it and being more descriptive.7/10

Brydon 09-13-07 04:20 PM

yeah str8 man,needs 2 b bit longer.but worked well dude.

Ransum 09-13-07 05:48 PM

decent but need to be longer...
your lines a bit to short for me but decent, this is actully u'r best i'v personally seen keep elevating.....

KM 09-13-07 08:28 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by wiley d
this life wasn’t meant for me I just got caught in it,
my heart like my mind cause I got lost in it,
now im on track in the right lane,
head might strain ,
feeling migranes
i dont feel the same
so you dont have to see my pain
livin easy cause lifes easy
fuck a gangsta im just tryin to be me
fuck tryin to be g
my hair still beedy
but now my heart not bleeding
cause im the real me
fuck worrying about a dude tryin to kill me
fuck a rockstar but they probably the ones that feel me


http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183244
http://www.community.rapverse.com/s...d=1#post3183245



ahh nice small verse here i was feelin it for what it is.....i see alot of small pieces from u which is good cause it shows u can put something down....lets see a longer piece from u though something u could really put effort into like 30-50 lines long....that should be interesting....~1~

wiley d 09-15-07 09:49 AM

good lookin on the feedback can i get more

wiley d 09-16-07 09:42 PM

can i get some feedback

KM 09-16-07 10:29 PM

hmmmmmm u rarely give feedback to others...hmmmmm lolz....

wiley d 10-08-07 09:30 AM

can i get some feedback

10-11-07 12:32 PM

Those links are not proper feedback.

You have 3 Days To Post 1 Or More Links In Order To Keep This Open Mic Open, According To New Rules. Do So Or This Will Be Closed & Moved.

10-14-07 06:32 AM

Closed, Moved And Stored.


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