1x to the joint
 

want critique on this:

So you wanna be a star??.. let me make you blink
have thoughts of throwing winks at god... for an asylum;
cause if he fall to hell.. you know i'm gona find im


let me know wat u think??

not bad at all!
2nd line could of been worked a little better...
don't get me wrong i'm still a newbie on here...
just giving honest option

critique this....
 

give me some feedback...
just a short little punch...


Your from the "Dirty" ya aint so fresh and clean...
ya texts are so "thrownback" got me thinkin' ya got a "time machine"

Radizaim your flows are weak they my head hurt,
got me thinking you gave me a brain "aneurysm"


sorry man, no hate, your fam, that wasnt even a good hit...
give me a hit back when you get a chance

aight ,aight catch it ........ :shoot:

your flows like H2O "hot-to-off", just a second rate nock off
in the front line hide the "self"
don't want ya essence in the presence of a menace
strip ya soul to adolesence

Ha Ha.....yall Youngins......
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Yo what yall dont understand and fail to see and grasp,
Is the fact that you all have earned the right to kiss ma ass.

ya thinking your gonna take this win, nigga i'm "native" to this son
this ain't a "rain dance" its called beating you in this battle like a "war drum"

^^^ your lost post Radiziam was hot

Haha Funny .....................