Rate this line please
 

I thought of it last night; I was too restless to sleep.

I watch the page as my hand moves erratically/
My smooth vocabulary enables me to write lyrics that you construe emphatically/

What do you think?

1 bar? thats it? you gotta rite a little more than dat shit to get some feedbak cuz i cant really give u any cept you gotta work on keeping your lines the same size

^^^yepper, pretty much what he said.

in all honesty.....the bar is nice though. it shows that you got some writing potential. i liked your use of vocab and your multies were smooth. the only real pointer that i can shoot you off hand is that you need to work on your structure some. besides that, you did it. word. keep up the good work pimpin'.


s.v., c.s.

Closed this isnt an open mic