2. hotshh! Vs. 16. Jack The Ripper
 

2. hotshh! Vs. 16. Jack The Ripper

10 Line Minimum - 16 Line Maximum

Please Check-In by Wednesday, and Drop your verse by Friday.

Good Luck to both of you..

I'LL FUCKING KILL YOU BITCH.. oh ya, and good luck :thumbup:

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King me

Word, and checking in for my homie hotshh!! good night hoes, im drunk

hahaha. good luck jack

Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME





*I know Marv used a canadian Sun line, this isnt the same, mine just means u going home like steve nash and the suns...voters GET the difference
*also JTR's title is " jack rips whores" and his other alias is " Darth Vader"
WE'RE BOTH IN THE SAME CREW, WE'RE BOTH DOPE, D/R'S STAY AWAY

**Royale is a toilet paper brand
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We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in

(peep the wordplay)

hotshh!
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
open was too polite...decent
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
haha. Fiya
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
ha, ok...step it up
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
so so, flow was juggled
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
good
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
haha, another hit
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
dope bar
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
closing with this line was ite, could have been great

*this verse for the most part was fire. real good punches,
the personals came in every line. shit was hot. the comdey
was a plus, had my chuckle a few times. word. umm real
hot verse, the flow was juggled in a line or two. but again
for the most part, ya verse was FIYA... 91%

Jack The Ripper
We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
good open, not special
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
bar wasnt bad, i just didnt like it
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
oxymoron = most used punch-word, but still a good bar
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
ite, again...nothin special
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
haha, good
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
new concept, was that relavent though?[b]
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
[b]confidence is good
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
haha, ite...good shit

*you worked completely different than hotshh! here. ya
verse was good. i liked the confidence as well.punches
were hot, but you had a little more filler than hotshh!.
the more personals you can intertwine with ya punches
the better. and thats the tie breaker here. good read,
especially the closuer...good shit. but my vote still goes
to hotssh! for less fill and more comdey....88%

vote: hotshh!

good shit yall & good luck.

Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
6...this was an ok punch, i wasn't really feelin the setup with the whole you takin him out with all the low blows and shit, loads of people have dropped shit like that!!
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
7...LMAO!!! comedy lines are cool!!! the whole teeth duck idea was nice and it went with the setup well so props on that!!
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
8...DOPE!!!! the wordplay in this punch was dope as fuck with the whole Obi Won shit, you played nicely off his vader alias with the star wars concept!!!
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
6...decent personal, a nice punch although i think that the whole bar was kinda basic and cud've been better with some dope wordplay!!!
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
6...yeah, not all that similar to Marv's punch in fact, but still i wasn't feelin it and it lacked really in comparison to ya earlier punches!!
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
6...played concept, but ya made it funny with the wedding bands piece!!
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
7...DAMN!!! playin off his user title like that was dope and nuthin too basic with the rhymin either!!
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME
5...NO!!! worst part of ya verse, the whole elevation and dentist concepts are both played, i have seen them many times before!!

OVERALL: 51/80



We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
5...not feelin the opener, i mean even with the link.....talkin about hot shit to play off his name has been done too many times, i am yet to see an original play on his name!!
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
5...callin him gay was stupid and pointless, and the whole dickridin concept is fuckin played like shit man!! i mean at least try to make it funny when ya use it!!
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
7...LOL!!! a nice line at last, the oxymoron part was dope, although i feel the setup was kinda basic!!
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
7...NICE!!! a good play off of his user title and with the dope wordplay it made a nice punch altogether!!
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
6...nice punch, the setup was pretty average but the J-Kidd shit was nice!!
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
8...DAMN!!! LMFAO!!! this was a killer line, original concept and an overall dope punch!!
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
7...nice wordplay, the marathon concept has been done a few times before but you put a new twist on it so props for that!!
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
7...good wordplay again, a nice closer, the barcode - punch it in concept was pretty nice!!!

OVERALL: 52/80

damn...that was a close battle...
both came good, although not as consistent as i expected...both had a REAL DOPE line and both had some wack lines....i thought that hotshh had it at first cuz JTR had a couple of gay lines to begin with, but he brought it together to the end with some real nice punches....hotshh had some nice punches, just not as hard hittin as jack and he had that gay line at the end.........

no hate...

VOTE = Jack The Ripper

[uHotshh[/u]
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
ok
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
This joke is played when casing niggas
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
eh..
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
good
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
ok
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
nope
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
nice
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
good



Jack The Ripper

We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
eh..
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJy got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
weak
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
weak
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
nice
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
good
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
weak
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
weak
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
weak


Vote = Jack the Ripper

good battle, but wtf with tremendous saying 5 lines of jacks were weak, and still giving him the win

rate the punches nucca!!

good shit JTF

lol Trem ain't even in the VC, I don't think

Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
^^nice opener
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
^^ive seen this concept lots... but it relevent so koo...
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
^^didnt connect great, good concept but wordin was off here
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
^^nah, wasnt feelin this line hot...sorry homie
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
^^koo............................
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
^^ohh, best bar so far....very relevent..lol..
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
^^nice..........................
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME
.nice closer.........good verse.
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We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
^^funny stuff..
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
^^nah homie
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
^^this was koo
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
^^decent concept...bit to wordy
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
^^eh...personally wasnt feelin it
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
^^ok......good concept
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
^^ok
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
^^decent
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not voting, :thumbup:

3-1 me if tremendous counts, otherwise 2-1

We got a battle here fellas

Only 2-1, Tremndous is not on the voting council..