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Freestyle-King 04-25-05 04:08 PM

Freestyle-King vs l i n e .
 
Battle Rules:

10-15 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-25-05 at 04:38 PM

Must drop verse in 25 minutes after check in.

System 04-25-05 04:10 PM

l i n e . has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-25-05 04:10 PM.

System 04-25-05 04:17 PM

Freestyle-King has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-25-05 04:17 PM.

l i n e . 04-25-05 04:25 PM

Listen "king", we all know you're wack, no need to flaunt it
And yeah your style's free... 'cause nobody wants it...
Get stomped jew, you wouldn't be wanted if Hitler was alive
Cause the only buzz you create is standing next to a bee hive
Like kiddy rides, you get dizzy from poor thrills...
Look! Lil D has $235! ..You can finally afford to pay bills!
Like caulk kid? I'll toss you a bottle of mono for your audio tracks
Now your verse has an excuse to be tired...like race tracks
Couldn't snap-back with whiplash, you crack like new trees
Please, I'll have you off the board quicker than skaters with DC's
I'll help out with your needs... *SIKE* I really don't care...
I'd tell you to word up...
...But you'd throw your verse in the air
stupid.

Freestyle-King 04-25-05 04:41 PM

yo boy. wat u wating fo gee, a nigga like me, to drop my shit and PEE/
Cause if u have seen, im the illest in this scene, i had ur mom on the wall screamin at ME/
what the fuk is wrong with you, my punchlines will knock you on the streetz and make u wear a TUTU/
i heard you were a jew, if it was true, my shit would infect you like the FLU/
i got 2 bars down, already i have you lookin like a CLOWN/
im lyrically bound, 2 impound, when peeps try to read yo shit its like they DUMFOUND/
yo shit is sensible, but that's the way u are so SENTIMENTAL/
mine is the opposite, my shit will stay in yo brain and make you go MENTAL/
you have no chance to win, you strugglin like you were intoxicated with GIN/
this is a sin, so just praise the lord, you were smilin so much when u read my shit it turned it into a GRIN/

hit this shit up mayne...uppin....

Freestyle-King 04-25-05 04:44 PM

nice flow man now lets get some votes

Germ 04-25-05 04:46 PM

This was feedback posted for l i n e .
 
wow, line should get this easy.....nice battle....

Freestyle-King 04-25-05 05:42 PM

hit this up playas

Verbal 04-25-05 05:45 PM

Voted For: l i n e .

Listen "king", we all know you're wack, no need to flaunt it
And yeah your style's free... 'cause nobody wants it...
Ha...
Get stomped jew, you wouldn't be wanted if Hitler was alive
Cause the only buzz you create is standing next to a bee hive
Punch was good..
Like kiddy rides, you get dizzy from poor thrills...
Look! Lil D has $235! ..You can finally afford to pay bills!
Ha...
Like caulk kid? I'll toss you a bottle of mono for your audio tracks
Now your verse has an excuse to be tired...like race tracks
Played, not really feeling it..
Couldn't snap-back with whiplash, you crack like new trees
Please, I'll have you off the board quicker than skaters with DC's
OK...
I'll help out with your needs... *SIKE* I really don't care...
I'd tell you to word up...
...But you'd throw your verse in the air
stupid.
Good finish

Took this battle, Freestyle knows his verse was wack....line was solid, good punches....

Freestyle-King 04-25-05 05:51 PM

man that is fuked up mayne u vote for the one i lose but when i got a winning one u say
chekin polls..........
man that is so gay man that should be a hate vote because that is all u have been saying man ur wack fuk u king suks wat a queer
u know wat u are the fuk face man fuk u i was trying to be nice to u and u just disrespect me man fuk u that is fuked up playa im out

uppin

Germ 04-25-05 05:56 PM

^ wtf are you talking about, im not going to vote because line is in my crew....and, i would have voted against you anyways, because line had a better verse....and holy fuck, i could barely translate that jibberish ^ in that last post.............AND, i havn't voted on any of your other battles....so i say again, wtf are you talking about?

Verbal 04-25-05 05:56 PM

If you weren't such a dumbass, you'd see I voted for you on that battle.

Advice: trade in the mic for a skateboard, you whining pansy.

Verbal 04-25-05 06:08 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Verbal
If you weren't such a dumbass, you'd see I voted for you on that battle.

Advice: trade in the mic for a skateboard, you whining pansy.



yo boy. wat u wating fo gee, a nigga like me, to drop my shit and PEE/
Cause if u have seen, im the illest in this scene, i had ur mom on the wall screamin at ME/

Pee and poop jokes, and fucking his mother...like I said. Wack. Good verses use wordplay, technique, innovation, creativity and complexity. You had none of that....two lines didn't even connect....what I'm getting from this verse is that you squat to take a piss, and somehow go from that awkward scenario to fucking his mother, probably the first time I've ever heard anyone say that. Ever.


what the fuk is wrong with you, my punchlines will knock you on the streetz and make u wear a TUTU/
i heard you were a jew, if it was true, my shit would infect you like the FLU/

Your punches will make him wear a tutu? So you punch like a ballerina?
And try to explain your second verse without sounding like a complete idiot. That line made no sense...


i got 2 bars down, already i have you lookin like a CLOWN/
im lyrically bound, 2 impound, when peeps try to read yo shit its like they DUMFOUND/

More filler. Looks like you're straining to finish the battle. Rhyming multiple words does not make a good verse. If it doesn't make sense. It's apparent you don't know the real meaning of "dumfound", and not only that but you made more of a punch at the audience then the person you're battling...

yo shit is sensible, but that's the way u are so SENTIMENTAL/
mine is the opposite, my shit will stay in yo brain and make you go MENTAL/

You're complimenting him to begin with, and then it tapers off into absolute nonsense. You're trying to rhyme without even thinking about what your verses mean. W-a-c-k.

you have no chance to win, you strugglin like you were intoxicated with GIN/
this is a sin, so just praise the lord, you were smilin so much when u read my shit it turned it into a GRIN/

....weak..........wack..........nuff said.....

Freestyle-King 04-25-05 06:10 PM

kesse i wasn't talkin to u fag i was talking to this cat and u didnt vote for me u said that u would

l i n e . 04-25-05 06:20 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Freestyle-King
kesse i wasn't talkin to u fag i was talking to this cat and u didnt vote for me u said that u would


shit man chill its an ONLINE TEXT BATTLE. p.s cant you only up 5 times or ur dq'ed?? Just a thought.
Also, some constructive critisicm...your verse was entirely self glory.. i didnt see a punch directed at me and everything you said was basic and contained no similies, metas, nothing... I don't take this online shit seriously its just a hobby not my life.. daaaanngg


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