No More Tears
So many tears I`ve cried at night, So many years I thought were right. You hurt me and broke my heart, You were the one who wanted to part. I still love you and I still care, I just can`t take it, it just isn`t fair. All the nights you were away from home, Were all the nights I spent alone. So my tears I shed for you, Not once did you apologize for the things you do. I`m all out of tears, I can`ttake this no more, You met your last chance and now it`s time you meet the door. |
Pretty played topic, pretty basic rhyme & flow. Very basic vocabulary. Alright emotion & remotely boring imagery. Keep elevatin. Try to make your pieces a little longer, add some multi's or higher vocabulary. Multi's would be nice, they help the flow of a piece greatly. Anyway, I like this piece, but you could elevate greatly. Keep it comin.
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