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11. Civilized Gangsta (3-4) vs. 12. Lay Fear (1-0)
G.B.A Gimmick Battle Association House Picture Battles This week, you will be dissing your opponent's house. Good Luck. ============  Civilized Gangsta as Club House vs.  Lay Fear as Construction House ============ Verses Due Monday at 12:00AM Pacific 10 Line Minimum, No Line Limit Biting = Ban Feeding = -2 Votes Swaying = DQ Vote On 4 Battles And Post Your Links OR Auto DQ Votes Due Wednesday Night New Battles Up Thursday Morning For Full Rules Click Here |
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I hate when my house falls inferior to someone else's,... the point is dumb even if its potentially better..people often complain n' CG sighs..join the 'club'.. now your in the clear..with your houses outside appearance..its fit for conduct every1 goes with the wood finish..ur jus the first to use it as a finished product ya mom sucks, n ya need a 'Gateway' for that driveway..we shoulda showed him we'll 'monitor' ya progress..so call us when ya lawns r big enuff for us to 'modem' all that money has got ya gassed up..I'm guessin its gone, I'll jus scar ya mind.. n I agree ya driveway is superior...but atleast I can afford to park a car in mine. ya far from fine..ya could probably sparr in time, rep ya shelter?.this dikes chicken was a nice home..but from the pic looks like ya 'scrambled away'..like 'a Vick did'.. your gone..ya got nowhere to go..ya mom's occupation?she aint' fit for datin son far as ya roof goes?..guessin that where ya mom derives her inspiration from.. haha..uh quick key..goodluck K |
lmao @ the big difference's.
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lolz thats what I said when I looked at it I was like wtf?...its not even a house its still under construction..atleast u got the nice one..I was stumped on what ot say for the first ten mins.. g'luck k haha..
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Fear, your really lost in the woods with this one. no doubt!
And you'll never live in the fast lane bitch, ya got no house. Ya know what they say bout dudes n big trucks n small ego's On a scale from 1 ta 10, buildin houses...they all zero Why the fuck you need 6 windows?....in a forest Seriously, thats probably why ya so mental...And just borin How Tha fuck u get to ya front poorch, that involves a goal Cuz every time you put ya next foot forward, you fall in a hole Construction? shiiiiiit I don't mean to knock ya boots off BUT that whole fuckin things at a slant dude, its NOT JUST ya rooftop Dude's short for words, and you still can't figure it out kid Really..... makin them moves, just not buildin ya house yet |
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Lay Fear ----------- I hate when my house falls inferior to someone else's,... the point is dumb even if its potentially better..people often complain n' CG sighs..join the 'club'.. Ehh... concept coulda been used much better. So-so. 1/2 now your in the clear..with your houses outside appearance..its fit for conduct every1 goes with the wood finish..ur jus the first to use it as a finished product Pretty decent flip, but not entirely true. 1/2 ya mom sucks, n ya need a 'Gateway' for that driveway..we shoulda showed him we'll 'monitor' ya progress..so call us when ya lawns r big enuff for us to 'modem' The quotations are unneccesary. Very basic wordplay, but points for the effort, and staying on topic. 1/2 all that money has got ya gassed up..I'm guessin its gone, I'll jus scar ya mind.. n I agree ya driveway is superior...but atleast I can afford to park a car in mine. So, how is his superior?? Blah. 0.5/2 ya far from fine..ya could probably sparr in time, rep ya shelter?.this dikes chicken was a nice home..but from the pic looks like ya 'scrambled away'..like 'a Vick did'.. Definitely lose the quotes. Better wording would've made this dope, cuz I've never seen the evicted wordplay. But, the concept overall was blah. 1/2 your gone..ya got nowhere to go..ya mom's occupation?she aint' fit for datin son far as ya roof goes?..guessin that where ya mom derives her inspiration from. Hmmm... What's her ocupation got to do with it? And plus, this is really dissin her, not really the house. 0.5/2 - 5/12 - ------------------- Civilized Gangsta ------------------- Fear, your really lost in the woods with this one. no doubt! And you'll never live in the fast lane bitch, ya got no house. REALLY basic, could've been dissin any house. 0.5/2 Ya know what they say bout dudes n big trucks n small ego's On a scale from 1 ta 10, buildin houses...they all zero Ehhh... wtf? Nah... 0.5/2 Why the fuck you need 6 windows?....in a forest Seriously, thats probably why ya so mental...And just borin Read the second line... that's the punch? And how is it dissin the house? 0.5/2 How Tha fuck u get to ya front poorch, that involves a goal Cuz every time you put ya next foot forward, you fall in a hole This definitely had potential, decent by itself. 1/2 Construction? shiiiiiit I don't mean to knock ya boots off BUT that whole fuckin things at a slant dude, its NOT JUST ya rooftop It's really just a statement, and there's really no need for the "BUT", but this is barely ok. 1/2 Dude's short for words, and you still can't figure it out kid Really..... makin them moves, just not buildin ya house yet Wow, the wording in this was pretty bad. Your concepts are decent, just the way you word them is weak. 0.5/2 - 4/12 - ------------------ VOTE: LAY FEAR ------------------ |
I hate when my house falls inferior to someone else's,... the point is dumb
even if its potentially better..people often complain n' CG sighs..join the 'club'.. meh now your in the clear..with your houses outside appearance..its fit for conduct every1 goes with the wood finish..ur jus the first to use it as a finished product lol ya mom sucks, n ya need a 'Gateway' for that driveway..we shoulda showed him we'll 'monitor' ya progress..so call us when ya lawns r big enuff for us to 'modem' okish, wp is a played 1 all that money has got ya gassed up..I'm guessin its gone, I'll jus scar ya mind.. n I agree ya driveway is superior...but atleast I can afford to park a car in mine. coulda done a better follow up, but ok ya far from fine..ya could probably sparr in time, rep ya shelter?.this dikes chicken was a nice home..but from the pic looks like ya 'scrambled away'..like 'a Vick did'.. sorta, bad use of wp your gone..ya got nowhere to go..ya mom's occupation?she aint' fit for datin son far as ya roof goes?..guessin that where ya mom derives her inspiration from.. sorta again Vsss Fear, your really lost in the woods with this one. no doubt! And you'll never live in the fast lane bitch, ya got no house. coulda did better Ya know what they say bout dudes n big trucks n small ego's On a scale from 1 ta 10, buildin houses...they all zero meh.. Why the fuck you need 6 windows?....in a forest Seriously, thats probably why ya so mental...And just borin nah How Tha fuck u get to ya front poorch, that involves a goal Cuz every time you put ya next foot forward, you fall in a hole lol Construction? shiiiiiit I don't mean to knock ya boots off BUT that whole fuckin things at a slant dude, its NOT JUST ya rooftop okish Dude's short for words, and you still can't figure it out kid Really..... makin them moves, just not buildin ya house yet okish You can do alot better Jynx, you obviously didn't like your topic or something & wrote fast. V// Lay Fear, both were meh, Lay had more work on his verse & it showed I guess Jynx didn't try, his last weeks was better. |
Contruction Houses Verse
yo.. I hate when my house falls inferior to someone else's,... the point is dumb even if its potentially better..people often complain n' CG sighs..join the 'club'.. Meh play on words for this, nothing special too me… now your in the clear..with your houses outside appearance..its fit for conduct every1 goes with the wood finish..ur jus the first to use it as a finished product NICE! Im feeling this one, it was present well in second line too ya mom sucks, n ya need a 'Gateway' for that driveway..we shoulda showed him we'll 'monitor' ya progress..so call us when ya lawns r big enuff for us to 'modem' I like this, though without the CPU nameplays, the concept is weak, obviously the plays take this bar to another level, nice creativity. all that money has got ya gassed up..I'm guessin its gone, I'll jus scar ya mind.. n I agree ya driveway is superior...but atleast I can afford to park a car in mine. Flow was a bit choppy at the end, but I like the play on this, pretty funny. ya far from fine..ya could probably sparr in time, rep ya shelter?.this dikes chicken was a nice home..but from the pic looks like ya 'scrambled away'..like 'a Vick did'.. only problem that makes this w/p forced {evicted/a vick did sound alike, so its not forced in that way} is the literacy and grammer of how u said it, no one would say in a sentence, like evicted, and just end the sentence, you can tell theres a grammar problem just saying it out loud…so this is a creative concept, just not good wording.. your gone..ya got nowhere to go..ya mom's occupation?she aint' fit for datin son far as ya roof goes?..guessin that where ya mom derives her inspiration from.. not feeling this as a closer, doesn’t match up to the res of ur bars… Hard Hitting Bars-2 Decent Bars-3 Bars That Need Improvement-1 Club Houses Verse Fear, your really lost in the woods with this one. no doubt! And you'll never live in the fast lane bitch, ya got no house. Not a good opener..setup was better then punch, so that’s bad structure.. Ya know what they say bout dudes n big trucks n small ego's On a scale from 1 ta 10, buildin houses...they all zero This is okay, still though, nothing hard in it Why the fuck you need 6 windows?....in a forest Seriously, thats probably why ya so mental...And just borin setup and punch weren’t good…not feeling this How Tha fuck u get to ya front poorch, that involves a goal Cuz every time you put ya next foot forward, you fall in a hole This ones kinda funny, not totally accurate, but decent.. Construction? shiiiiiit I don't mean to knock ya boots off BUT that whole fuckin things at a slant dude, its NOT JUST ya rooftop hahaha, this ones a lot better then all your other bars.. Dude's short for words, and you still can't figure it out kid Really..... makin them moves, just not buildin ya house yet Naw, nothing special or even decent again… Hard Hitting Bars-1 Decent Bars-2 Bars That Need Improvement-3 Overall: Best Use Of Bars-Lay Punches-Lay W/p-Lay On Topicness-Lay {used it more to his advantage} Flow-CG VOTE—Well, overall I see this as a very lopsided battle, lay fear takes everything but flow…So my vote obv. goes to lay fear. |
ya far from fine..ya could probably sparr in time, rep ya shelter?.this dikes chicken
was a nice home..but from the pic looks like ya 'scrambled away'..like 'a Vick did'.. vs. How Tha fuck u get to ya front poorch, that involves a goal Cuz every time you put ya next foot forward, you fall in a hole Overall, this battle was pretty weak, lots of lines from both of you that were just too simple and weren't that witty. Lay had slightly better concepts tho so I got him winning. Vote - Lay Fear |
4-0
Lay Fear WINS 2-0 Civilized Gangsta LOSES 3-5 |
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