Denied Truth Vs. Whyte Ave.
 

Rules:

Battles Go Up Friday
Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time
Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time

20 Lines Minimum
40 Lines Maximum

No Biting
No Recycling
Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit
Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines

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Topic: Hell Bound

check check....

Requesting a bit of an extension...got called into work today, and I won't be home until 11:30-12:00 mountain time, so it'll be 1:30-2:00 eastern time...I'll write something up then..

ahhh i hate this...I dunno if he is going to no show or not since I requested an extension...i guess ill throw something half decent together

Her emerald eyes cause my knees to grow weak
And seductive smile cause me trouble to speak
Her hair flows like that of a peaceful river
Hearing her voice, causes my spine to shiver
She’s making her way over and my palms sweat
As beautiful as a garden in full summer bloom, yet
She’s a threat, getting involved with her is not smart
I have a girl I love and that holds a place in my heart

She sits down beside me and starts up conversation
I show hesitation, but soon give in to my temptation
She’s so attractive, and any man would give in
With her cute laugh and soft silky smooth skin
And after an hour of talking, I’m in the palm of her hand
And I’m about to do something my brain can’t even understand
I ask her to my hotel room and she accepts the invitation
I’ve given in to temptation for a once night sensation

I wake up in the morning and she has already gone
I’m empty inside, and feel like my souls been withdrawn
I cheated on the love of my life and now I must pay
As my soul is hell bound, and my heats begins to decay

*As my soul is hell bound and my heart begins to decay

voting
 

ya won by no show i thought you took a different approach to hell bound that was a little off topic you tried to add another topic to it and make it one big one. it had good structure, good visuals, good vocabulary and annalogies...but i understand it woulda been better if it wasnt a post to see if the other kat would show. Overall i give ya 7 outta 10 if ya need more holla at me

Goes to Whyte Ave of course (no-show)

This verse had potential in fact, I know you didn't really put too much effort in it but I liked your approach of the topic. Good imagery, tight vocab, nice wordplay...You had the basic shit on lock so might work this out as an open mic or something? It'd be a waste otherwise...just an idea...

DQ